Grieving

in stark contrast to pastoral silence- prolonged convulsive sobbing of a distraught widow - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Contest: Writing Challenge 4 Placed 3rd Sponsor: Dear Heart © 20th March 2019

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 12/11/2020 5:53:00 PM

A wonderful write in contrast ;)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/12/2020 6:27:00 AM

Thank you, Angela. Regards // paul

Allen Beilschmidt Sr.

Date: 5/21/2019 10:26:00 PM

Excellent contrast Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2019 11:05:00 AM

Thank you, Allen. Best regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/14/2019 3:28:00 PM

A big belated congrats on this nice little poem I had not ever seen before now!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/16/2019 4:32:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. Those who search eventually find...:) Regards // paul

Edlynn Nau

Date: 4/14/2019 2:24:00 PM

Congratulations! Love the contrast in paradox. Super write! I know a lot of thought and work went into this little gem. Sometimes I think these take more time than the longer poems. Small is beautiful.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/15/2019 10:16:00 AM

Thank you, Edlynn. The idea came to mind quickly; it took longer to express it in the syllables required by the form used. ~ Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 4/7/2019 8:07:00 PM

Your talented pen creates a vivid scene, Paul, that is as beautiful as it is heartrending. You captured me with the expressive emotions of this piece, causing me to savor the sadness evoked. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes and hugs my dear friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 4/8/2019 9:44:00 AM

I had missed both your awesome poetry and visits, Susan. Your sincere comments encourage and spur the writer to reach for even better results. Thank you. ~ Warm regards & Hugs my friend. // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/30/2019 2:07:00 AM

Hi Paul, And I always keep such a close watch on your poems - well done and congratulations on your win Paul - Crying and sobbing is part of living. Poetry hugs, Jenny.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/3/2019 1:21:00 PM

Many thanks, Jenny, for keeping a close watch-out for my poems :) Your comments, congrats and overall visits are truly appreciated. Warm regards & hugs // paul

Constance La France

Date: 3/25/2019 3:01:00 PM

Paul, congratulations on your win in my contest. I know all about sobbing, lovely 3 lines you have given me~

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2019 7:10:00 AM

Thank you, Constance. Always a pleasure to take part in your contests. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/24/2019 8:19:00 AM

- Congratulations Paul on your winning poem in the kimo contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/24/2019 2:21:00 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise. Hope you've had a lovely weekend. Hugs // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/23/2019 12:11:00 PM

ohh, the wailing against the quiet of nature... your voice is distinct, paul... huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 3/23/2019 3:47:00 PM

Exactly, Nette! The contrast has not escaped your keen eye:) Thank & Hugs // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/23/2019 12:53:00 AM

This really pulls at the heartstrings,

Paul Callus
Date: 3/23/2019 3:41:00 PM

Thank you for yet another visit, Artur. Regards // paul

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/22/2019 4:10:00 PM

Well written Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/22/2019 5:06:00 PM

Thank you, Heidi. Best regards // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/22/2019 3:08:00 PM

It's all new and devastating for her..aptly described, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/22/2019 5:05:00 PM

Thank you, Vijay...I had this vision of a young girl, widowed too early...hard to come to terms with... Regards // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 3/22/2019 3:00:00 PM

oh, love the way you've done this - a sure winner

Paul Callus
Date: 3/22/2019 4:28:00 PM

Thank you, Jack; would love to see you on the judging panel:) Regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 3/22/2019 2:58:00 PM

You packed so much into this little poem Paul, impressive, expressive, explosive. A winner in my book. Good luck in the contest! xomo

Paul Callus
Date: 3/22/2019 4:27:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely, generous comments, Maureen! I hope we'll meet on the winning podium:) Warm regards // paul

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/22/2019 2:28:00 PM

You captured it well Paul, a sad image of the widow. Good luck. Tom

Paul Callus
Date: 3/22/2019 2:51:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Tom. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 3/22/2019 2:05:00 PM

Hello Paul, I can relate to that. A widow grieve until she feels peaceful inside her body. When a widow grieve he whole body shakes from the tears she sheds. Whe that feeling is gone she feels so much better.Regards Darlene.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 3/23/2019 5:12:00 PM

Yes that is right Paul. Have a nice evening my friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/22/2019 2:50:00 PM

Thank you, Darlene...your words make a lot of sense! Tears are capable of washing the pain away. Regards // paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/22/2019 1:10:00 PM

This is touching, well done. BG

Paul Callus
Date: 3/22/2019 1:38:00 PM

Thank you, Barbara. Our two entries have similarities, albeit differently tackled. Regards // paul