Grieving

in stark contrast to pastoral silence-
prolonged convulsive sobbing
of a distraught widow


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Contest: Writing Challenge 4 
Placed 3rd 
Sponsor: Dear Heart 
© 20th March 2019

griefsadkimo

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Angela Crabtree

December 11, 2020 at 5:53 PM

A wonderful write in contrast ;)

Paul Callus

December 12, 2020 at 6:27 AM

Thank you, Angela. Regards // paul

Allen Beilschmidt Sr.

May 21, 2019 at 10:26 PM

Excellent contrast Paul

Paul Callus

May 22, 2019 at 11:05 AM

Thank you, Allen. Best regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

May 14, 2019 at 3:28 PM

A big belated congrats on this nice little poem I had not ever seen before now!

Paul Callus

May 16, 2019 at 4:32 PM

Thank you, Andrea. Those who search eventually find...:) Regards // paul

Edlynn Nau

April 14, 2019 at 2:24 PM

Congratulations! Love the contrast in paradox. Super write! I know a lot of thought and work went into this little gem. Sometimes I think these take more time than the longer poems. Small is beautiful.

Paul Callus

April 15, 2019 at 10:16 AM

Thank you, Edlynn. The idea came to mind quickly; it took longer to express it in the syllables required by the form used. ~ Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

April 7, 2019 at 8:07 PM

Your talented pen creates a vivid scene, Paul, that is as beautiful as it is heartrending. You captured me with the expressive emotions of this piece, causing me to savor the sadness evoked. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes and hugs my dear friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

April 8, 2019 at 9:44 AM

I had missed both your awesome poetry and visits, Susan. Your sincere comments encourage and spur the writer to reach for even better results. Thank you. ~ Warm regards & Hugs my friend. // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

March 30, 2019 at 2:07 AM

Hi Paul, And I always keep such a close watch on your poems - well done and congratulations on your win Paul - Crying and sobbing is part of living. Poetry hugs, Jenny.

Paul Callus

April 3, 2019 at 1:21 PM

Many thanks, Jenny, for keeping a close watch-out for my poems :) Your comments, congrats and overall visits are truly appreciated. Warm regards & hugs // paul

Constance La France

March 25, 2019 at 3:01 PM

Paul, congratulations on your win in my contest. I know all about sobbing, lovely 3 lines you have given me~

Paul Callus

March 26, 2019 at 7:10 AM

Thank you, Constance. Always a pleasure to take part in your contests. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

March 24, 2019 at 8:19 AM

- Congratulations Paul on your winning poem in the kimo contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

March 24, 2019 at 2:21 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise. Hope you've had a lovely weekend. Hugs // paul

Nette Onclaud

March 23, 2019 at 12:11 PM

ohh, the wailing against the quiet of nature... your voice is distinct, paul... huggs

Paul Callus

March 23, 2019 at 3:47 PM

Exactly, Nette! The contrast has not escaped your keen eye:) Thank & Hugs // paul

Arthur Vaso

March 23, 2019 at 12:53 AM

This really pulls at the heartstrings,

Paul Callus

March 23, 2019 at 3:41 PM

Thank you for yet another visit, Artur. Regards // paul

Heidi Sands

March 22, 2019 at 4:10 PM

Well written Paul :)

Paul Callus

March 22, 2019 at 5:06 PM

Thank you, Heidi. Best regards // paul

Vijay Pandit

March 22, 2019 at 3:08 PM

It's all new and devastating for her..aptly described, Paul.

Paul Callus

March 22, 2019 at 5:05 PM

Thank you, Vijay...I had this vision of a young girl, widowed too early...hard to come to terms with... Regards // paul

Jack Horne

March 22, 2019 at 3:00 PM

oh, love the way you've done this - a sure winner

Paul Callus

March 22, 2019 at 4:28 PM

Thank you, Jack; would love to see you on the judging panel:) Regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

March 22, 2019 at 2:58 PM

You packed so much into this little poem Paul, impressive, expressive, explosive. A winner in my book. Good luck in the contest! xomo

Paul Callus

March 22, 2019 at 4:27 PM

Thank you for the lovely, generous comments, Maureen! I hope we'll meet on the winning podium:) Warm regards // paul

Tom Cunningham

March 22, 2019 at 2:28 PM

You captured it well Paul, a sad image of the widow. Good luck. Tom

Paul Callus

March 22, 2019 at 2:51 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Tom. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu

March 22, 2019 at 2:05 PM

Hello Paul, I can relate to that. A widow grieve until she feels peaceful inside her body. When a widow grieve he whole body shakes from the tears she sheds. Whe that feeling is gone she feels so much better.Regards Darlene.

Darlene De Beaulieu

March 23, 2019 at 5:12 PM

Yes that is right Paul. Have a nice evening my friend.

Paul Callus

March 22, 2019 at 2:50 PM

Thank you, Darlene...your words make a lot of sense! Tears are capable of washing the pain away. Regards // paul