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Grief - For Contest

Grief
gnaws at my aching heart
greets my awakening,
grins within the sunbeams
gathers empty teardrops
garnished with memory’s
gaunt unfocused vision
goring life’s bloodied bull.


11/22/2015

submitted to – Pleiades, Please – poetry contest
sponsor – Kim Merryman

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Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 11/30/2015 3:19:00 AM Congrats John.. wonderful write n win! Login to Reply

Sandra Haight Date: 11/29/2015 8:34:00 AM John, congratulations on your fine win in Kim's contest. Sandra Login to Reply

Alexis Y. Date: 11/28/2015 7:15:00 PM John, congratulations on your win:-)Alexis Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 11/28/2015 3:27:00 PM John, Congrats on your fine win, SKAT LOVE Login to Reply

John Lawless Date: 11/28/2015 6:56:00 AM Thanks Lin, always nice to hear from you. Login to Reply

Lin Lane Date: 11/28/2015 6:33:00 AM Excellent pleiade, John. ..especially like the first line. Congratulations. Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 11/28/2015 6:59:00 AM thanks Lin, nice to hear from you.

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores Date: 11/28/2015 5:29:00 AM Congratulations John Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 11/28/2015 6:55:00 AM Thanks Nayda

Eve Roper Date: 11/27/2015 11:36:00 PM Congratulations on your win, John, very sad! Eve Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 11/28/2015 6:55:00 AM very sad, Eve, but a part of everyones life at one time or another. thanks for stopping by to read and comment.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 11/27/2015 7:05:00 PM EXCELLENT! I loved this entry John. Congratulations on your wonderful win! Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 11/27/2015 7:45:00 PM Thanks Connie always good to hear from you.

Jill Spagnola Date: 11/27/2015 5:13:00 PM ..:) Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 11/27/2015 7:43:00 PM my emoticons went out to lunch...so....thanks Jill

Jan Allison Date: 11/27/2015 5:03:00 PM Dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 11/27/2015 7:42:00 PM Thanks, as always, Jan

Kim Merryman Date: 11/27/2015 3:39:00 PM John, an excellent description of grief! Each line packs an emotional punch! Congrats on your win and on learning a new poetry form! Love, Kim Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 11/27/2015 7:42:00 PM Kim, thanks for taking the time to administer the contest and torment the muse with new and devious poetic forms

Lin Lane Date: 11/22/2015 5:24:00 PM All good lines, John. The last one is terrific. Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 11/27/2015 7:41:00 PM Thanks Lin.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/22/2015 4:58:00 PM wow, I really love the inventive way you did this form. Great job. Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 11/27/2015 7:40:00 PM Thanks Andrea for reading and commenting I appreciate your continued support.

Jan Allison Date: 11/22/2015 4:40:00 PM You depicted grief so well John - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx7 Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 11/27/2015 7:39:00 PM Not a pleasant topic but of late have seen to many suffering too much in my opinion.