Grey Light of Dawn

The grey light of dawn spread softly over the hill,
In the Blue Ridge, fog covered Ashville. 
No birds dared fly high above the dark clouds,
The wind blew, and thunder rumbled like shrouds.

Time passed by slowly, the wind felt low.
Only one star twinkled, its lonely foe.
A whisper of grey could not be deprived
Until the soft sun rays lit the sky and light arrived.

The hour held a promise of persistent rain
Until the sky cleared and all was gain.
The listless world woke for its usual chores
And all went hurrying to their overstuffed stores.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2026

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Sands Avatar
March 25, 2026 at 5:18 AM
A beautiful new beginning. Well described Victor :)
Kannan Avatar
March 24, 2026 at 11:39 PM
So beautiful!!! Loved the ending...
Hind Avatar
March 23, 2026 at 5:33 PM
sweet poetry, Victor!! :) loved that ending stanza
DiMino Avatar
March 23, 2026 at 8:40 AM
Lovely touch of life. Well done my friend. Storms do pass, and somehow we pick up the pieces. When I was young I was thrilled to watch them, but now think more about the folks who suffer. Perspective sure changes for most of us with age. If only there could be wonder without often consequences.... Blessings my friend.
Gifford Avatar
March 23, 2026 at 5:22 AM
Hello Victor, beautifully penned. Nothing beats the feeling I get when the rain ends and the sun shines through. Have a great new week ahead, my poet friend.
George Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 8:31 PM
With the light of dawn, life catches fire and the world returns to its frantic activities. Beautifully penned, dear Victor.
May Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 7:20 PM
Dark clouds give way to sunshine, Very nicely penned
Kendrick Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 5:44 PM
This one sounds like Ashville, North Caroline. I have been there at one time a long time ago. The fog on the mountains is beautiful in early morning. Thank you for sharing this one with us. Sara K
Greenhough Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 4:11 PM
I enjoy th contrasts in this poem. No matter how stormy the heavens, life goes on. This read is very enjoyable.
Buehler Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 3:58 PM
The storm ended just in time for a bustling day to begin, with the first sun rays of promise. I love the wonderful imagery employed, in this beautiful tale of a turbulent night.
Dietrich Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 1:09 PM
Wonderful display if your descriptive writing talent, Victor
Kitchin Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 12:03 PM
Victor, nicely done with vivid imagery. A grey day is always better than a snowy one.
Goldsmith Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 11:28 AM
What a painting you have painted with your words. Love It... Have a great day/week to come writing away............
Roper Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 11:17 AM
The state I am in, the day with overhanging white and gray clouds may look like it is going to rain, and at the end it never does... I'm glad because of walking Peanut; he is 16 and as gray as I am. Enjoyed reading. my friend
One Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 10:39 AM
You create imagery so well, but you always have done... Great to see you still active on here... All the best..
Edmonds  Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 9:31 AM
That’s so good Victor, wonderful, I love it… Beryl
Cunningham Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 9:21 AM
When the day begins you're left wondering if the sun will make an appearance, thankfully in your poem it did. Hope the sun is shining today in Malta Victor. Tom
Sands Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 9:06 AM
So well described Victor. Beautiful and peaceful :)
Daniels Avatar
March 22, 2026 at 8:48 AM
Beautiful capture of grey dawn, Victor. Delicately observant. I liked these two lines : “ A whisper of grey could not be deprived Until the soft sun rays lit the sky and light arrived.” Neat couplets. Very clever twist in last two lines. Well done. It will get warmer at your neck of woods soon, then grey will give way to another hue on cue. X.
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