Green Bikes Or Ham

The deadly white of winter had descended.
Mountain high piles of snow braced the phone poles.
Mufflers donned we left for school unattended
for mother lay crying in her bed, we were not whole.

Father left many nights ago it seemed
we did not know the why, the what or when, just then
what would we do for Christmas, mother screamed.
In this earthly sorrow two little girls cried again.

All of eight was I, and she was but three,
No tree was dressed within the cold, white, rented farm house
only paper chains no sweet cane candy   
the kitchen cupboards were bare even for the mouse.

The night bleak, mother pulled us on a sled
to Gran's we went, through snow and cold for dinner time.
Ma's heart had gone, when Father left her bed
Downcast, we trudged without Daddy's car, we climbed.

We came home and settled in, night brought surprise
our Daddy had come home, and it was Christmas night
he brought me a bike, a green and white prize
But all I cared about was the smile in his eyes.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 1/8/2014 3:57:00 PM
Way to go..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 1/7/2014 7:48:00 AM
how languidly stunning this is, debbie... should have reached the top; love the dad-feel... congrats on your win!.. huggs
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/8/2014 4:01:00 PM
its a difficult emotional verse so I didn't expect much nette
Date: 1/7/2014 1:05:00 AM
Nice write full of Christmas spirit and congrats on the fine win, Deb
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Date: 1/6/2014 6:29:00 PM
You bring us through an emotion of bleakness and sadness then thrill us with joy at the end...great write..congrats on your win
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/6/2014 6:44:00 PM
Thank you I should rewrite it, but it still hurts to remember Mother's passed Dad is still with me, I'm thankful he is.
Date: 1/6/2014 5:39:00 PM
This is a sad and moving piece. I'm glad it had a silver lining. Congratulations.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2014 5:40:00 PM
Also nice Dr. Suess play on words.
Date: 1/6/2014 12:32:00 PM
lovely write Debbie congrats on placing ty too for your support Shadow x smile hug
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Date: 5/9/2012 11:20:00 PM
nice story, kinda nostalgic, right? but oh, I guess the bike (green?) gulped the ham down? ;)
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Date: 5/9/2012 1:55:00 PM
I am trying to catch up some on my thank you's to all the wonderful poets who have left kind comments on my writings. I thank you so much for your words of kindness Debbie. I enjoyed reading your poetry today and hope you are having a wonderful day. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/8/2012 8:49:00 AM
A touching story poem hitting us directly in our hearts. Well written and I'm sure thought of often over the years.
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Date: 5/7/2012 9:02:00 AM
A heart breaking memory....I see the sting of a childhood, so unlike my own, that my heart aches for two little girls I didn't know.
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Date: 5/7/2012 6:47:00 AM
yes all real..at least as real as a memory 55 years old can be...I actually left out a BIG scene...of course ..Dad's memory of the happening is different
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Date: 5/7/2012 6:11:00 AM
you show me a trying scene here Debbie; I just don't realize why people make things harder in life than they already are & this piece highlights this for me.." also i see you had left a comment on my challenge haiku Debbie; and as i read your summing up i think maybe you should have a go at working it out.."
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Date: 5/7/2012 5:07:00 AM
This is a touching write, Debs!! It paints, oh such a melancholy scene, but it all seems to vanish with your last few lines.:) Hope all's going well with you, the sun is definitely trying to do it's thing! Best wishes, love, Mikki
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Date: 5/7/2012 1:55:00 AM
Debbie, wow that was some christmas...David
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Date: 5/6/2012 9:36:00 PM
AH!!!*tear* you made me cry!!! I dont get caught off guard usually....such a tender and heart felt write Debbie...ugh...*sniff* I may read it again later but it's too good to do it this quick...:) Very Well Done...I hope you win!!! big hugs,love ya deb
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Date: 5/6/2012 7:24:00 PM
Ps. Smile ˜ "An Extremely Stirring & Beautiful Favourite, By An Astonishingly Gifted & 'Beyound Beautiful, Poetess.'" *
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Date: 5/6/2012 7:19:00 PM
Smile ˜ I Don't Know, Maybe Its Because I Love You Sooo Much, My Dear Priceless, Beyound Beautiful, Beautiful Debra * But Your Poem, One Of The Most Touching & Beautiful Of Your Fascinating Treasures That I Have Ever Thus Read, Reached Deeply Into My Heart To Bring A Tear Unto My Eyes * I Love Happy Endings As I Sorrow Amid Another Beautiful Lifes Ever Knowing Pain * I No Longer Dwell There As I Used To Yet, My Love Nor Prayers For They Escape * Just As My Love For You. * My Love to You Forever, John!:) ˜
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