Get Your Premium Membership

green

it seems as though a thousand years have passed us by and you have reduced me to some kind of common piece of furniture you’re over here i’m over there looking at each other; reflections in smoked glass taking our norm and twisting it to fit your perfectly sick fantasy of comfort and security quiet, deep inside you like to be ruled, told how and what to think and feel then, in the end it was never really you; lying to ourselves is the worst thing we can do and you say you don’t wanna be like me it would be nice to be green again without the depth of time and the gravity of life strapped tight around my heart

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 8/31/2013 9:45:00 PM
Lori, , Congratulations :-) on having your poem Featured on the soups Home Page... always~ Linda
Login to Reply
hopkins Avatar
lori hopkins
Date: 9/3/2013 5:59:00 PM
thank you Linda! what a fun surprise :D
Date: 8/31/2013 7:32:00 AM
"reflections in smoked glass"...such a perfect expression of a relationship gone stale with time and resistance.
Login to Reply
hopkins Avatar
lori hopkins
Date: 9/3/2013 5:59:00 PM
thank you Jenny~
Date: 8/29/2013 7:19:00 PM
Congratulations, your poem is featured on the "Poem of the Week" home page... :)
Login to Reply
hopkins Avatar
lori hopkins
Date: 8/30/2013 7:52:00 AM
wow! what a great message to wake up too! thanks for the heads up :) i really like this one too ~ :)
Date: 8/18/2013 2:10:00 PM
green , yellow, or blue, It all about loniness and two people never being one. I like this one. I'll be back. Kilmer
Login to Reply
Date: 8/17/2013 11:46:00 PM
wow nice I like the way you trying to express the I inwitch is u.good job welcom add me to the fans.
Login to Reply
Date: 8/17/2013 8:18:00 PM
splendid write. Lori, sad, your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers, I love it!! Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND". Hugs* Skat *
Login to Reply
Date: 8/17/2013 4:40:00 PM
I love the color green Lori, deep first poem, -A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. Dropping by to invite you to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* -Looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
Login to Reply
Date: 8/17/2013 12:17:00 PM
Welcome to P-Soup, Lori ! - Nice to read your first poem here. - Hope you will have much pleasure to be with us. - Wishing you good luck - have a nice day! - Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours. - My first greeting to you from Norway / / / Anne-Lise :)
Login to Reply