Barry Stebbings Poet Rhyme

Grandfather Clock - Variation On a Triolet

Grandfather Clock
             (A Variation on a Triolet)

     When I was young, not four foot tall,
     My Grandpa’s clock I remember well
     Stood and chimed, alone in the hall,
     When I was young, not four foot tall.
     Taller than I, standing by the wall.
     Older than he? I could not tell. 
     My Grandpa’s clock - I remember well!
     When I was young, not four foot tall.

     My Grandma polishing the fine grained wood,
     I remember the hands, time’s steady measure.
     Day and night the clock in the hall-way stood,
     My Grandma polishing the fine grained wood.
     Pacing the hours across my passing childhood
     The pendulum swung in timeless leisure.
     I remember the hands  -  time’s steady measure,
     My Grandma polishing the fine grained wood.

     ABaAabBA

     06/13/2021

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Rama Balasubramanian June 14, 2021 at 10:20 AM Liked your variation, it seems better than original. Tempted to write one with variation. Barry Stebbings June 14, 2021 at 12:43 PM Thank you very much, Rama. // Barry

Jan Allison June 13, 2021 at 11:54 AM I like the changes you made in the triolet form, you may convince me to actually enjoy writing it lol, have written a few but they are far from my favurite:-) hugs jan xx Barry Stebbings June 14, 2021 at 5:39 AM Thank you, Jan. I will use this variation again, I like the way it removes the strict repetition. // Barry

L Milton Hankins June 13, 2021 at 8:20 AM Barry, as one who has "tinkered" with triolet, I really enjoyed your variation. Well-written and perfectly rhymed. I think sometimes a slight alteration makes for the better poem. I hope you'll enter my "Write Me a Trionet" contest. Barry Stebbings June 14, 2021 at 5:36 AM Thank you very much, I will have a look at your contest.