Jan Allison Poet Etheree

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Goodbye Dear Snowman

Snow
floats down
silently
covering earth
in a white blanket.
Children whoop with delight
dashing to make a snowman,
with a carrot nose and coal eyes.
Suddenly snowflakes swirl so thickly
they give him a scarf to keep out the cold!
Their snowman stands guard in the white garden
Until the sun appears and warms earth.
Slowly, so slowly the snow melts - 
poor snowman, his ‘eyes’ fall out
and his nose is dislodged.
The children are sad,
they wave goodbye
to their old
melting
friend

Double Etheree – syllable count 110 

Contest: Snow
Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton
11~15~15

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Kim Merryman November 25, 2015 at 4:39 PM Jan, this is so cute and creative! Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim Jan Allison November 25, 2015 at 4:41 PM Thanks for your continued support Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Rizwana Bhurani November 23, 2015 at 5:12 AM Wow....well portrayed with its snowy beauty....I rembred baby rizzu....best wishes... Jan Allison November 23, 2015 at 3:33 PM Thanks Rizwana:-) hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez November 21, 2015 at 5:02 PM So beautiful. Congrats on your awesome win, Jan. hugs! Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 6:29 PM Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Iris E. Sankey- Lewis November 21, 2015 at 8:33 AM Such delightful poem with shape of gem, and play, and melting away of your words. I wanted more. Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 8:35 AM Thanks Iris - i love snow ... on Christmas cards only:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane November 21, 2015 at 3:42 AM That funny little snowman hung around long enough to help you garner a 1st place...congratulations, Jan. Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 3:53 AM He did lol:-) Thanks Lin:-) hugs jan xx

Teddy Kimathi November 21, 2015 at 3:34 AM Hi buddy! Congratulations on your #1 placement of your diamond-shaped verse! ;-) Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 3:41 AM Thanks Teddy thought I would do an etheree and it turned into a double one:-) hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma November 20, 2015 at 11:41 PM How lovely Jan.. congrats on awesome first place win! Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 3:06 AM I'm delighted:-) thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars November 20, 2015 at 10:10 PM Congrats on your win Jan!! -lu Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 3:06 AM Thanks Lu:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong November 20, 2015 at 9:43 PM This is so sweet Jan. Congratulations on your wonderful win! Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 3:05 AM Thanks Connie:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper November 20, 2015 at 8:59 PM Congratulations on your win! Eve Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 3:05 AM Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A November 20, 2015 at 7:56 PM Nice win Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 3:05 AM Oh Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Etienne Lariviere November 19, 2015 at 4:11 PM You melted me too, very nice. Jan Allison November 19, 2015 at 4:13 PM Aww thank you Etienne:-) I hope we don't get snow - lovely on Christmas cards but in reality it caused devastation on our little Island in 2012 with so many livestock that perished - I hope and pray it does not happen again:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman November 19, 2015 at 7:16 AM Nice double Etheree. Couldn't think of anything for this one. Jan Allison November 19, 2015 at 11:33 AM I thought I would try a form I don't usually write in - just look at some snowy pictures and you will be inspired:-) hugs Jan xx

Abdullah Alhemaidy November 17, 2015 at 10:40 AM I liked it. Jan Allison November 17, 2015 at 11:45 AM Thanks so much:-) hugs jan xx

Bl Devnath November 16, 2015 at 8:48 PM Yes, its like a Christmas tree beautifully pictured. Good luck in the contest my lovely friend. Loved always,bl Jan Allison November 17, 2015 at 1:26 AM Thanks BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos November 16, 2015 at 3:05 PM Excellent and your presentation looks like a Christmas Tree Ornament...how delightful... Jan Allison November 16, 2015 at 3:10 PM I should do some snowflakes on the page too:-) hugs jan xxx

Sara Kendrick November 16, 2015 at 2:39 PM Ahh!! Reads like a winner to me..So creative....Thanks for stopping by...Sara Jan Allison November 16, 2015 at 2:52 PM Thanks Sara I thought I would challenge myself to a different form rather than rhyme:-) Hugs jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders November 16, 2015 at 1:27 PM A wonderful, snowy etheree, Jan! Growing up in Florida, I never had the pleasure of building a snowman. It always looked like such fun! Good luck in the contest...hugs, Rhonda Jan Allison November 16, 2015 at 1:35 PM I used to love it when my son was small and we could build a snowman - not that it happened very often ... now the only place I like to see snow is on Christmas cards lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud November 16, 2015 at 11:28 AM ohh, you so enchant with this snowman melting, jan.. lovely etheree.. huggs Jan Allison November 16, 2015 at 11:31 AM Thanks Nette I normally would write in rhyme so thought I would do a more challenging form:-) hugs Jan xx

Theresa Cw November 16, 2015 at 11:01 AM As always you write such beauty and your imagery is like being inspiring within your very imaginative mind of sweet words... If you want you can check my Happiness Is poem out your name is included in it...... Big Huggggs Theresa A 7 and a FAV Jan Allison November 16, 2015 at 11:19 AM Thanks Theresa will drop by right away:-) hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 16, 2015 at 7:33 AM Jan, cute imagery, I like the smooth shift of feelings here... =`) nice narration. hugs!! ~Olive Eloisa Jan Allison November 16, 2015 at 7:38 AM Its such an exciting time for the kids Olive - thought I would have fun with this contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance November 16, 2015 at 7:24 AM This brings a smile, the joy of winter, as much as it is exciting to build a snowman, watching it melts usually means spring which is just as exciting. Wonderful etheree Jan :) big smile Jan Allison November 16, 2015 at 7:38 AM Thanks Cas - I love writing about snow but not experiencing it for real lol:-) hugs jan xx

Jill Spagnola November 15, 2015 at 11:21 PM Jan, this is so beautiful in form and verse...:), jill Jan Allison November 16, 2015 at 7:37 AM Thanks Jill thought i would have a go at an etheree and 2 appeared lol:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso November 15, 2015 at 7:30 PM Beautiful and well written! Hugs Jan Allison November 16, 2015 at 7:36 AM Thanks Arthur:-) hugs jan xx