Goodbye Daydreams

Daydreaming on a glorious green mountain hillside.
Dazzling Carolina Blue background, watching white cloud performances.
Strong wind blows, goodbye forever!

Daydreaming on a white sandy beach.
Dazzling ocean green background, watching waves come in and go out.
Sandcastles built, goodbye forever!

Choka:

On a green hillside,
Daydreams of cloud performances
A strong wind blows, Bye.

On white sandy beach,
Daydreams of watching waves splash.
Sandcastles gone, Bye.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Endicott Avatar
November 12, 2009 at 5:52 PM
I LIKE THIS POEM
T. Avatar
October 29, 2009 at 11:06 AM
Wish I was on a sandy white beach right now!! Great poem! Thanks for your comment! Take care-
Richards Avatar
October 8, 2009 at 5:59 PM
I love the switch from free verse...to the choka!! Nicely done! :) ~Love, Carrie
Culverhouse Avatar
October 7, 2009 at 6:53 PM
beautifully penned
Golden Avatar
October 7, 2009 at 5:39 PM
You've beautifully described two of my favorite settings, Martin. I long for the ocean, and feel invigorated in the mountains! Thanks for sharing this piece. Donna
Robbins Aka Gonzo Avatar
October 7, 2009 at 5:06 PM
Hey man your writting and theres nothing wrong with this work. fast moving good job.
Gorelick Avatar
October 6, 2009 at 11:28 PM
whats not to like about this nice piece. I like both forms..BG
Moreno Avatar
October 6, 2009 at 9:21 PM
You are cruising along with your great work, I left you some mail...Raul
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