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Goodbye Daydreams

Daydreaming on a glorious green mountain hillside. Dazzling Carolina Blue background, watching white cloud performances. Strong wind blows, goodbye forever! Daydreaming on a white sandy beach. Dazzling ocean green background, watching waves come in and go out. Sandcastles built, goodbye forever! Choka: On a green hillside, Daydreams of cloud performances A strong wind blows, Bye. On white sandy beach, Daydreams of watching waves splash. Sandcastles gone, Bye.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 11/12/2009 5:52:00 PM
I LIKE THIS POEM
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Date: 10/29/2009 11:06:00 AM
Wish I was on a sandy white beach right now!! Great poem! Thanks for your comment! Take care-
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Date: 10/8/2009 5:59:00 PM
I love the switch from free verse...to the choka!! Nicely done! :) ~Love, Carrie
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Date: 10/7/2009 6:53:00 PM
beautifully penned
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Date: 10/7/2009 5:39:00 PM
You've beautifully described two of my favorite settings, Martin. I long for the ocean, and feel invigorated in the mountains! Thanks for sharing this piece. Donna
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Date: 10/7/2009 5:06:00 PM
Hey man your writting and theres nothing wrong with this work. fast moving good job.
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Date: 10/6/2009 11:28:00 PM
whats not to like about this nice piece. I like both forms..BG
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Date: 10/6/2009 9:21:00 PM
You are cruising along with your great work, I left you some mail...Raul
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