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Goodbye

I'll always remember the day you bounded into my life Cradling you in my arms I wouldn’t let go I buried my head in your soft brown fur Then cried with happiness at my first puppy I’d dash home from school so eager to see you You were always waiting for me when I walked through the front door Your tail wagged so fast I thought it would drop off You’d fetch your lead and sit waiting impatiently How you loved going for long walks Rain or shine we would always be together side by side The muddy puddles fascinated you - Oh, you couldn’t wait to splash and play just like a toddler! You were my constant companion for many many years Over time your health deteriorated Our walks got shorter and shorter… I'll always remember the day you were leaving my life Cradling you in my arms I couldn’t let go I buried my head in your soft brown fur Then cried with sadness as the vet put you to sleep FICTIONAL WRITE Contest - Goodbye Sponsored by Nayda Ivette Negron 04~20~16
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Marcum Wong Avatar
October 1, 2016 at 7:42 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful first placement Jan! ; )
Allison Avatar
February 4, 2017 at 10:21 AM
Thanks Connie I somehow missed replying to your comment I do apologise!:-) hugs Jan xx
White Avatar
October 1, 2016 at 4:38 AM
Just (((hugs))) and congrats the same time. Sometimes winning is bittersweet with a teary eye. <3 Darren
Allison Avatar
October 1, 2016 at 7:28 PM
Thanks Darren:-) hugs Jan xx
Roberts Avatar
September 29, 2016 at 8:37 PM
Ohhh Jan it's so painful saying goodbye to a much loved let. Yet isn't it wonderful you can make thsr decision to save it more suffering, why can't we do that for humans. Wonderful write.....Seren
Allison Avatar
September 30, 2016 at 7:04 AM
Yes I agree why can't we choose Seren:-( we have no choice to be born but surely we should have a say in when we die:-( hugs Jan xx
Scars Avatar
September 29, 2016 at 8:56 AM
Oh Jan, sooo sad. I'm dealing right now with having to put my baby Bo down...the vet said any day now I need to decide...God bless you, congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
Allison Avatar
September 29, 2016 at 5:21 PM
Oh LuLoo I'm so sorry its so hard to let go of a treasured pet:-( hugs Jan xx
Canerdy Avatar
September 29, 2016 at 8:10 AM
A 7 for this very moving WINNING poem, Jan. Janice
Allison Avatar
September 29, 2016 at 5:20 PM
Thanks Janice:-) hugs jan xx
Y. Avatar
September 28, 2016 at 10:49 PM
Hi Jan, Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
Allison Avatar
September 29, 2016 at 2:24 AM
Thanks Alexis:-):-) hugs Jan xx
Roper Avatar
September 28, 2016 at 10:39 PM
Very beautiful and heartfelt poem congratulations on your win : ) Hugs Eve
Allison Avatar
September 29, 2016 at 2:23 AM
Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx
Negron Flores Avatar
September 28, 2016 at 9:44 PM
Congratulations Jan on this beautiful poem. The death of a loved pet is very sad.
Allison Avatar
September 29, 2016 at 2:23 AM
Thanks so much Nayda it is so very sad when a pet passes away - so often they are more loyal than people:-( it was lovely to have the chance to showcase an older poem:-):-) hugs Jan xx
A  Avatar
June 21, 2016 at 1:08 AM
JAN, CONGRATS on your Loyalty win. SKAT
Allison Avatar
September 29, 2016 at 2:22 AM
Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx
Chansarkar Avatar
May 19, 2016 at 2:54 PM
Beautiful again Jan!
Allison Avatar
May 22, 2016 at 4:31 PM
Thanks Sara I melt every time i see that cute picture
Mcclain Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 11:10 AM
Hi Jan, That's so poignant and beautifully written. Makes me sad to think how pets have a shorter lifespan than their human companions. Congrats on your big win! Cheers, Brian
Allison Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 12:43 PM
Thanks Brian:-) It is a fiction write for me but i know many can relate to my words:-) hugs Jan xx
Haight Avatar
May 2, 2016 at 6:42 PM
Hi, Jan, this may be fictional, but you sure fooled me with your emotional poem. Beautifully written, and congratulations on your First Place win. Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 3:19 AM
Thanks Sandra I guess this one really hits home with the loss of your lovely cat - i have never owned a dog and as I have an allergy to animal fur we have no pets, but I have friends who have lost their treasured dogs so I put myself in their shoes:-( hugs jan xx
Devnath  Avatar
May 2, 2016 at 8:32 AM
Congrats on your win with top placement my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
Allison Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 3:17 AM
Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx
May Avatar
May 1, 2016 at 2:23 PM
Congrats on you top win Jan
Allison Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 3:17 AM
Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx
Chappell Avatar
April 22, 2016 at 3:20 PM
Oh when you loose a pet that's becomes part of your family life it hurt so much lots love xx
Allison Avatar
April 22, 2016 at 3:24 PM
Thanks Duncan - I am lucky this is a fiction write for me but I know many people can relate:-( hugs Janxx
Callus Avatar
April 22, 2016 at 12:57 PM
Even though it's fictional, Jan, you still managed to touch my heart. Losing a pet ... as emotional as can be! We even have a pet cemetery at the back of the garden...Hugs // paul
Allison Avatar
April 22, 2016 at 1:21 PM
It is an emotive write Paul I know many can relate to the loss of a pet - they are often more loyal than humans:-( hugs jan xx
Rigoler Avatar
April 22, 2016 at 10:01 AM
Fictional or not, losing a pet, as I did some years ago, is a traumatic experience, like losing a family member. Your use of simple language makes this poem seem very real. After three years I had to have another dog. They are wonderful pets. / M
Allison Avatar
April 22, 2016 at 10:34 AM
Thanks Maurice I know many people can relate to my words- I do write 'simple' poems which I hope people can relate to - I dislike having to get a dictionary to discover what a poem is really about:-) hugs Jan xx
Dalei Avatar
April 21, 2016 at 5:12 AM
A deep & emotional write. I buried my head in ur soft brown fur.........emotion is well revealed................hugs
Allison Avatar
April 21, 2016 at 6:01 AM
Thanks Manmath I am touched by the lovely comments I've received:-) hugs Jan xx
Andresen Avatar
April 21, 2016 at 5:06 AM
- I wish you a lovely day, my dear firend Jan :) - hugs // Sunshine Smile :)
Allison Avatar
April 21, 2016 at 6:00 AM
Many thanks Sunshine - lovely name and avatar:-) hugs Jan xx
Scars Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 8:23 PM
oh no..thank God its fiction! I am not looking forward to that day at all, ans it's coming very soon. I will die without my boys...lovely poem for a lovely lady :)-luloo
Allison Avatar
April 21, 2016 at 2:01 AM
Oh LuLoo they are so much part of our family:-( I remember when our family cat got killed by a car - even the neighbours were in tears - she was a little monkey - used to live between our two houses in the end and get fed at both lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Anish Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 5:48 PM
I have never had a dog but I did cry when my cat died. Touching write - and good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Allison Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 6:24 PM
Thanks Matthew i have never had a dog either and I too cried when our family cat was killed many many years ago:-( hugs Jan xx
Andresen Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 2:19 PM
- Man's best friend, always faithful - Terrible sad to lose - A touching and wonderful poems, my friend Jan - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Allison Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 6:24 PM
Thanks Anne Lise thankfully its a fictional write for me:-) hugs Jan xx
Onclaud Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 1:28 PM
ohh, i have gone through this pain, jan... beautifully handled.. huggs
Allison Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 6:25 PM
Thanks Nette I am sure there are many that can relate to this poem:-( hugs Jan xx
Martin Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 1:04 PM
Reminds me of losing both a dog and a cat both whom I loved dearly. Not a day goes by I still don't think of them and this poem brings them right back again. Thanks for re-kindling those wonderful memories. Great poem! Terry (Terrell) Martin
Allison Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 6:26 PM
Thanks so much Terrell thankfully this is a fictional write for me but I am sure many can relate to the loss of a treasured pet:-( hugs Jan xx
Mac Donald Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 10:34 AM
Made my eyes tear up.:( Not easy losing a pet, they become a special part of the family. This is also a powerful and consuming write. Best wishes, Mikki
Allison Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 6:27 PM
Thanks Michelle I am sure many people can relate to my poem:-( hugs Jan xx
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