Jan Allison Poet Couplet

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Image posted with kind permission of the artist :- Eve Roper.

Gone With the Wind

It’s such a windy day, what a delight
Daddy says I can go and fly my kite!

We head for the beach to have some fun
Dashing onto the sand I run and run

My kite so blue trails on the beach
I wish it were in the sky out of reach

Suddenly a gust of wind whisks the kite up high
Soon it’s dancing in the bright blue sky

I hold on to the string with all my might
The breeze is strong; the kite takes flight

A tail of red ribbons flutter from the kite
Seeing the kite weaving is a wonderful sight

My legs begin to tire and the wind drops
We head for an ice cream at the shops

Daddy and I have had such a lovely day
If it’s windy tomorrow we’ll be back to play


Contest: Oil Painting 4 & 5
Sponsor: Eve Roper
Jan Allison
11~21~15

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Arthur Vaso January 1, 2016 at 9:51 PM You silly bugger you both so very talented!!!! Jan Allison January 2, 2016 at 4:57 AM moi talented noooooo I just write and hope lol:-) hugs Jan xxx

Arthur Vaso January 1, 2016 at 12:53 AM I see talent and beauty here! N'est pas? Jan Allison January 1, 2016 at 6:42 AM Yes Eve is very talented :-) as for me I just try my best to cobble a few words together:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A December 16, 2015 at 9:13 PM JAN :) CONGRATS ON YOUR WIN...... SKAT Jan Allison December 17, 2015 at 1:46 AM Many thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May December 16, 2015 at 5:54 AM Wonderful write Jan..Congrats on a great win Jan Allison December 17, 2015 at 1:45 AM Many thanks Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane December 16, 2015 at 4:52 AM Nicely done, Jan.. congratulations! Jan Allison December 17, 2015 at 1:45 AM Many thanks Lin I was delighted to place so well i adore Eve's pictures she is incredibly talented:-) hugs Jan xx

Keith Bickerstaffe November 30, 2015 at 3:42 PM I always had a hard time getting my kite up in the sky, but when I did... what a thrill! Thanks for rekindling a special memory. Hugs, Keith o :) Jan Allison November 30, 2015 at 3:44 PM Thanks Keith - I love the image Eve painted and had such fun writing for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Iris E. Sankey- Lewis November 27, 2015 at 5:46 PM Smooth couplet of joyful actions on a courteous day. A winner already. Jan Allison November 27, 2015 at 5:48 PM Aww thanks Iris I find Eve's pictures inspire me so much I try hard to capture her picture in words:-) hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton November 25, 2015 at 3:55 PM a glorious poem Jan love it gl in contest hugs 7 Jan Allison November 25, 2015 at 4:01 PM Thanks Shadow:-) Eve's pictures are so wonderful I do hope she likes my poem:-) hugs jan xx

Viv Wigley November 25, 2015 at 11:26 AM Lovely, bright piece, Jan, ideal antidote to these cold dark days. Will do well, no doubt. Viv x PS- Are you going to tell John Wulf he looks like London's Lord Mayor Boris Johnson? Jan Allison November 25, 2015 at 11:29 AM lol he sure does - on one comment I made I said I thought he had gone too far with his 'plastic' surgery lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish November 23, 2015 at 4:34 PM Enjoyable "slice of life" from a child's point of view. Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison November 23, 2015 at 4:42 PM Thanks Matthew:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus November 22, 2015 at 3:37 PM Your imagination has been well inspired by this lovely painting, Jan. It will do well! Hugs // paul Jan Allison November 22, 2015 at 3:46 PM I hope Eve likes it - her amazing images inspire me to write as well as I can:-) hugs Jan xx

Charmaine Chircop November 22, 2015 at 3:04 PM Oh dear Jan , our mind is tuned on the same frequency, cuz I was thinking of childhood memories today. What a lovely poem , and knowing how close you were to your dad, it means so much more. A fave for the poem and for the lovely painting, hugs. Jan Allison November 22, 2015 at 3:12 PM Dad and I were closer in his final year than ever Charmaine:-( I love the images Eve finds for us - she is so so talented and I try my best to create a good poem for her:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux November 22, 2015 at 10:18 AM Two talents coming together! Remarkable painting and poem! Jan Allison November 22, 2015 at 10:45 AM :-) Thanks Richard I just hope Eve like's my interpretation - he paintings are inspirational as is the lady who paints them:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith November 22, 2015 at 6:51 AM Ah another beauty to go into your children's collection Jan Allison November 22, 2015 at 10:44 AM Thanks Tim - I adore the pictures Eve paints - I am not familiar with sport so chose the one I felt I could do justice with in a poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Jack Horne November 21, 2015 at 3:27 PM aww. a lovely sweet write - I was expecting a poem about farts, LOL Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 6:20 PM Oh Jack ... as if I would ha ha ha - oh dear my fame for writing about poop and the like is spreading lol :-) hugs Jan xx

Mary Swingler November 21, 2015 at 3:06 PM Your poem captures the essence of a child's excitement and joy. the simple pleasure of flying your kite at the beach is incomparable. Your lines form the foundation for this smooth flowing couplet. the euphony creates an enjoyable experience for the reader. Your poetic expression exudes descriptive images. I can imagine myself running and laughing breathless on the beach. The entire day with daddy was perfect. It struck an emotional chord with me. Thank you for sharing yourself with us. Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 6:19 PM Thank you for such a delightful comment Mary you captured the essence of my poem so beautifully:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen November 21, 2015 at 2:33 PM - Lovely written, Jan - Luck in contest ! - I wish you a great and peaceful weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 6:18 PM Thanks Anne Lise I adore the images Eve gives us she is such an amazingly talented lady - her poems and artwork are wonderful:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos November 21, 2015 at 12:07 PM Difficult to make up my mind which is more beautiful your poetry or the painting ...I think it's a toss up and how well they flow together. You know it's one thing to be an artist...but quite another to capture reality in oils.....wow... Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 12:10 PM Thanks for that lovely comment Judy i would dearly love to see Eve's pictures in real life I am sure they are even more breathtaking than we can see on the web . I just hope Eve likes my interpretation of her stunning picture:-) hugs jan xx

Bl Devnath November 21, 2015 at 11:54 AM Very nice memory of childhood life beautifully penned. Good luck in the contest my lovely friend. Loved always,bl Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 12:04 PM Thanks Bl:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud November 21, 2015 at 10:18 AM i went to look at the paintings, jan... hope that is a kite.. nonetheless, a fond, heartwarming write..huggs Judy Konos November 21, 2015 at 12:19 PM Well it has two tails...so it's either a kite or a space ship! Of course you cannot see the string it broke which is why it crash landed.... Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 10:32 AM I hope it's a kite Nette - that was my interpretation of the image:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich November 21, 2015 at 9:31 AM Jan, I could not see what that thing in her hand was. Good that you could just see it as a kite. Because you made a lovely poem from it! Soupmail. Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 9:53 AM I've interpreted it as a kite Andrea - i sure hope it is!:-) hugs jan xx