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Gone-No More-Goodbye

The Heart That Bleeds Contest Sponsor: Malta Forever I've been lost and found and forgot where I should start, it's all contingent on the circumstance of my bleeding heart. Gone...no more...goodbye... My veins twist and my senses expand, as I walk by your picture on your old night stand. Sure, there was a time I didn't expect this outcome. The clear ways of your final days only portrayed who you never thought you'd become. At a standstill as my vessels constrain and contract, you were most special but I couldn't contain you through an exact tunnel to refrain you. My platelets wither as my plasma spreads, they slither like lead poison into magma forgetting you are dead, my blood moistens, believing your lies instead. Vascular system depleting my oxygen, if only you had listened beyond religion, contemplating secretion, as you started the incision. When did you think we would find you? Was it thought out or impromptu? I've been lost and found and forget where I should start, it's all contingent on circumstance of my bleeding heart. My veins twist and my senses expand, as I walk by your picture on your old night stand. Gone...no more...goodbye... Date Written: February 18, 2016

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Date: 2/19/2016 2:56:00 PM
Your emotions truly shine through in this heartfelt write, Laura Loo, I sense angst and helplessness but also an underlying anger. It's good to let these emotions out. If this was the path she chose, nothing or no one could have changed that.
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/20/2016 5:28:00 PM
Thank you James...Yes no one could change her mind, and I felt very helpless and hopeless..but she's happy and free now and that helps me sleep at night..thanks..-luloo
Date: 2/18/2016 7:44:00 PM
So moving, thanks for sharing such personal thoughts.
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Date: 2/18/2016 10:13:00 PM
Thanks Richard...-luloo
Date: 2/18/2016 6:32:00 PM
Truly fantastic poem, all the more so knowing that it was your sister. Sorry you had such a tragic event in your life. Losing anybody close is very bad but that seems the worst to me.
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Date: 2/18/2016 10:13:00 PM
Thank you Robert...-luloo
Date: 2/18/2016 6:23:00 PM
WEll, gosh, this is an amazing poem I have now read! I thought this sponsor was doing a different kind of contest from what he said at his blog. Will have to check out what is going on. This is a winner, Lin. So sad and such a well constructed poem
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Date: 2/18/2016 6:41:00 PM
Are you talking about the contest "The heart that bleeds"? It said any form acceptable:) But I'm confused because of his blog. But I just saw the blog and I am disturbed..just sayin'....thanks lady :)
Date: 2/18/2016 6:21:00 PM
Just read what you commented to me over at Connie's poem: Laura Loo, I see that hate liver TOO! Let's throw that bloody liver in the river!
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Date: 2/18/2016 3:21:00 PM
One day you two will meet again and your hearts will be JOY-filled! A beautiful expressed piece!
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Date: 2/18/2016 12:28:00 PM
My dear having experienced many instances of grief. I can offer no solutions and scars will always remain tender. I pray you find peace within your heart and confidence in the fact we are all here momentarily in body but our spirits and dreams last forever in the hearts we have touched along the way. I'm certain the angel of your sister is pleased and smiling:)
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Date: 2/18/2016 2:45:00 PM
Aww thanks Daniel.I will never completely heal. In time, it may get easier, but I will never be completely healed. Same goes for anyone who has lost a family member or friend in death. Not just suicide, but facing the loss of someone dear to them. Death has become an inspiration for journey of my days getting easier. My heart goes out to everyone in the world who has lost people, no matter how they died. They are all tragedies but we must all stand together and fight for our hearts to be strengthened through faith...Thank you for your sincerity Daniel. -luloo
Date: 2/18/2016 11:36:00 AM
An emotional poem full of anxiety. One must suffer this kind of pain to describe it. I hope you are not suffering. I pray this a distant memory brought to paper. Peace to you my dear:) Good luck!
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Date: 2/18/2016 12:21:00 PM
Daniel, thank you for your wishes of peace. Yes, this is about my sister who took her own life 12-31-10. Writing about it helps so much. I'm not sure if you noticed but her death is a major inspiration for me when writing for PS.-luloo
Date: 2/18/2016 11:30:00 AM
powerful poem...based on facts? if not very well played! Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 2/18/2016 12:22:00 PM
Thank you Sandra-yes based on facts. My sister took her own life 12-31-10. Hardest thing I have ever went through and am still going through. But one thing for sure is that writing about it helps the healing process...have a blessed day Sandra :)-luloo

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