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I was on a plantain branch Cra cra… Cra cra.. Craa.. She put her bangles on a rock Glimpse of gold, shined my eyes I took it and flew back home. A cry of fury trembling hut, I wonder why she made that fuss. With a bit of twinge I shout, “One I took, three with you!” Still her rage in frenzy mood, Crowd is fanning flames to grow, In my nest it shine and rest, Golden bangle shining lust. Then I went back looking around, To watch the jokers in a run, But my eyes in surprise hunt, The bustle of hut in deep slumber. Oh! Again this gold will turn, me a golden king of crows. Another bangle on the rock, I took it and flew back home. What a foolish bird I’m, Fallen on their tricky trap. They found my nest and climbed up tree, My two bangles went with them. Second Place in I am a Bird - Personification Poetry Contest sponsored by Tania Kitchin

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Date: 8/9/2020 2:05:00 AM
Congratulations, Jenish, on your win. A superb narrative. First class visual images. Howard
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 8/9/2020 2:28:00 AM
Thank you Howard for your delightful comment.. Have a great day..
Date: 8/4/2020 3:41:00 PM
Love how you made a story out of this contest theme. WELL DONE. And congrats for the win.
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 8/4/2020 10:30:00 PM
lol.. It was the other way.. I wrote a poem from a true incident and I saw a contest fitting it well.. Thank you Andrea..
Date: 8/3/2020 4:20:00 AM
Back to you with my heartily Congratulations for your wonderful win Jenish sir:-) It feels great to re- read your cute poems:-) Keep glowing:-)Take care.Warm regards.:-)
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 8/4/2020 10:27:00 PM
Thank you Deepa.. It is a pleasure to see poetic friends like you coming back to congratulate..
Date: 8/2/2020 12:23:00 PM
Wow am amazed to see its a true story, many congratulations on your win :-) Hugs Jan xx
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 8/4/2020 10:25:00 PM
I was also amazed when I saw the news.. Thank you Jan..
Date: 8/2/2020 9:41:00 AM
Jenish, great personification and descriptive poem. I should look for their nests to find that pot of gold :) Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 8/4/2020 10:24:00 PM
hahah.. lol.. They already retrieve the bangles.. You will find only white eggs in the pot, Eve.. Thank you..
Date: 8/2/2020 6:45:00 AM
It’s really witty and interesting. Enjoyed the poem.Congratulations on your win!
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 8/4/2020 10:22:00 PM
Thank you Patri.. I'm delighted to see your comment..
Date: 8/2/2020 4:05:00 AM
Ha ha ha...You are graceful and brilliant at humour as well Jenish! This is an engaing poem with those innocent yet witty lines. Congratulations on your win! :)
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 8/4/2020 10:22:00 PM
Thank you Aditi.. I'm happy to hear you liked it..
Date: 8/1/2020 12:42:00 PM
Jenish, congratulations on your winning placement, I enjoyed the story in your clever poem.
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 8/1/2020 9:30:00 PM
Thank you Tania for your kind placement..Your contest was a fabulous inspiration..
Date: 7/24/2020 4:45:00 AM
The turn in the ending is well done, Jenish.
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/24/2020 6:08:00 AM
Thank you Vijay for your support..
Date: 7/24/2020 4:31:00 AM
Interesting story.A favourite for me.I imagined the situation at home if a crow took away my gold bangles. Have to be very careful now onwards with things. You never know,this might just happen. Light muse with heavy message. Stay blessed. Rama
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Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 7/25/2020 5:42:00 AM
Plantain branch. You from south India Like me?
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/24/2020 6:08:00 AM
Thank you Rama for your Fave.. Yes, you should be careful about your bangles.. This is a real incident happened in our place..
Date: 7/24/2020 4:07:00 AM
Haha ..jenish sir I enjoyed this poem.:-) Wonderful tale.I remember a similar story "Crow and the snake" that I read during my school time...where the crow drops the gold chain in snake's home residing on the same tree to get rid of its enemy.But you've beautifully penned with a twist. :-) Keep writing and keep inspiring us with your golden ink.:-)Have a beautiful day. Take care.Warmest regards~Deepa.
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V. Deepa
Date: 7/24/2020 7:21:00 AM
Oh..a real incident:-! Then we girls must be careful with our bangles. Thanks for cautioning us sir:-)
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/24/2020 6:07:00 AM
Thank you Deepa for your delightful comment and support.. Crow and the snake story, I also read.. But this is a real incident..