Jack Jordan Poet Free verse

Gods In This Universe

Gods are lovers, the senses, heavens and shapes in the clouds, 
the mother, the father and what slips between becomes another,
locked with them in wildness, feeling the stroke of blood, 
drenched in the sweat of touches,
describing forms meant only for the gasp of recognition’s
dark flight to no–thought, 
without resistance because that’s where my god is, 
deep in that mine where light is far away,
and god the god is there waking me saying,
“Take me, I am yours.”

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Dr.Ram Mehta January 28, 2014 at 8:29 PM Enjoyed your first write and congrats on the win, jack

Charlotte Puddifoot January 28, 2014 at 5:32 PM jack, it was a nice surprise to find this poem was yours! I didn't have a clue who'd written it, but I thought to myself "this was written by a deep and profound thinker"...there is quite an erotic quality to the first six lines, which then shifts to a spiritual tone in the last four lines; a most original and intriguing piece - congrats on your win in my contest :) Jack Jordan January 29, 2014 at 9:16 AM Thank you, Charlotte. I've sent you a soup mail... Jack

Poet Destroyer A August 16, 2013 at 5:47 PM I'm taking myself back to your first poem... AGAIN! lol, wow, I stormed this poem with a nice welcome, then I gave your poem the first review, then I came back to congratulate the force and love of God, while it was a featured poem. Jack, coming back to this one. I love the way you embraced the line.... god the god is there waking me saying, “Take me, I am yours.” graceful ... always~ LINDA Jack Jordan August 16, 2013 at 6:06 PM It's a long way from haiku, that's for sure. This is the first time I've looked at it in months.

Richard Lamoureux February 3, 2013 at 9:32 AM I hope you find the right one. Very powerful write. It is good that you have rediscovered your muse. I have also been inspired by the soup. I joined the end of October. Jack Jordan February 3, 2013 at 10:24 AM It's a rich and rewarding community. I'm really enjoying being a part of it.

Poet Destroyer A January 27, 2013 at 8:29 AM Jack, :-) Congratulations with your featured poem of the week. Glad to see you among the poets on the soups front page. Love your wonderful verse. Have your self a nice & beautiful Sunday... ~PD

Debbie Duncan January 25, 2013 at 2:33 PM Great poem, a twist on God ;} I like it. And welcome to poetry soup. There are some very nice people here. you have a blessed day Jack. ;} Jack Jordan January 25, 2013 at 4:04 PM Thanks for the comments and the welcome. I'm having a good time in the Soup. I haven't written in a long time. Jack

Kenisha Shines January 16, 2013 at 7:15 AM really beautiful write. Jack Jordan January 19, 2013 at 10:13 PM Thank you for the supportive reply. Jack

Anne-Lise Andresen January 15, 2013 at 1:34 PM Jack, welcome to the P-Soup! You have posted a very good poem, I like it. - Hoping for many, many more in the future. - Love from Norway and me / / Anne-Lise :) Jack Jordan January 15, 2013 at 1:43 PM It's good to meet you, all the way from Norway to Oklahoma, no less. I'm a poetry novice, so I appreciate your comment. Jack

Poet Destroyer A January 15, 2013 at 9:47 AM About your poem: wow...some force this God pulls upon you... I like this line.. (slips between becomes another,) much to ponder with that line. thank you for sharing the wild image above.. love it~PD Jack Jordan January 15, 2013 at 1:42 PM Thanks for the reply. I'm new at the online poetry game, and a complete poetry novice, so I really appreciate your "Hello" and the feedback.

Poet Destroyer A January 15, 2013 at 9:44 AM Good morning Jack, , stopping by to say hi ;-) and welcome you to this lovely soup bowl. My name is Linda; everyone here calls me PD for fun. I'm here picking up and finding new poets to love, appreciate and adore. Please do not hesitate to look me up here on the soup if you need feedback on your poetry. I am looking forward into following your poems as you grow and post here at the POETRY SOUP. Take care~ LUV PD" Jack Jordan January 26, 2013 at 11:07 AM Thanks! Commentary is always useful - good or not so good. Please feel free to comment as you see fit; I have a thick skin. I like your Soupname. Jack