Glass Castle

I built her a glass castle
And set her as my queen
And promised her the East and West
And e'r'thing in between.
She placed me on her white cake -
Her Golden Figurine.
It looked like I could do it, 
But that's just how it seemed.

I tried to keep my promises.
I did with all my might.
But in the end I failed at that
And proved the hater's right.
The queen's still in her castle, 
Her raiment's simply stunning.
She's waiting for her Charming,
But I'm not sure he's coming.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Prejean Avatar
July 29, 2009 at 1:52 AM
Wow I absolutly love this it goes deep jon....... n lol martha that's true n ur funny......makes ya think
Goodwin Avatar
June 29, 2009 at 7:15 PM
nice i like this one
White Avatar
June 21, 2009 at 9:44 AM
hi Jonathan nice write, and yes I am one of Jehovah's Witnesses are you
Martinez Avatar
June 19, 2009 at 11:08 AM
wow that is very deep john and i don't understand why u made seem like the queens standards are so high but understand but understand as long mr charming is her best friend n brother i don't the queen wud ask for anything more since she is young n is try to focus back on jah lol
Buys Avatar
June 16, 2009 at 10:39 AM
Well written and intrinsic truth underlying the fairy tale format. Love how you ended the poem. Enjoyed reading this. Well done. Regards Heidie
Poddar Avatar
June 16, 2009 at 5:11 AM
This shows emmense promise. Very introspective.
Attal Avatar
June 16, 2009 at 1:16 AM
very nice, great flow, consistent meter... yep... fav'd. thanks for sharing!! I love it!
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