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Glass Castle

I built her a glass castle And set her as my queen And promised her the East and West And e'r'thing in between. She placed me on her white cake - Her Golden Figurine. It looked like I could do it, But that's just how it seemed. I tried to keep my promises. I did with all my might. But in the end I failed at that And proved the hater's right. The queen's still in her castle, Her raiment's simply stunning. She's waiting for her Charming, But I'm not sure he's coming.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 7/29/2009 1:52:00 AM
Wow I absolutly love this it goes deep jon....... n lol martha that's true n ur funny......makes ya think
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Date: 6/29/2009 7:15:00 PM
nice i like this one
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Date: 6/21/2009 9:44:00 AM
hi Jonathan nice write, and yes I am one of Jehovah's Witnesses are you
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Date: 6/19/2009 11:08:00 AM
wow that is very deep john and i don't understand why u made seem like the queens standards are so high but understand but understand as long mr charming is her best friend n brother i don't the queen wud ask for anything more since she is young n is try to focus back on jah lol
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Date: 6/16/2009 10:39:00 AM
Well written and intrinsic truth underlying the fairy tale format. Love how you ended the poem. Enjoyed reading this. Well done. Regards Heidie
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Date: 6/16/2009 5:11:00 AM
This shows emmense promise. Very introspective.
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Date: 6/16/2009 1:16:00 AM
very nice, great flow, consistent meter... yep... fav'd. thanks for sharing!! I love it!
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