Gin (Etheree)

One 
bottle 
standing tall
in the center
of my universe.
I orbit around her
from dawn to dusk like a dead 
moon on a never ending course. 
She is my only reason to rise
yet is now the bane of my existence.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 11/18/2020 12:24:00 PM
Excellent etheree, Connie, and a sober (unintended pun) warning to not let the bottle be the bane. Loved your 'like a dead moon on a never ending course'. Great poetry. ~ John
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Date: 2/6/2012 8:46:00 PM
I can see that an etheree is now. It must be the shape and not the swallow! :)
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Date: 9/23/2010 1:41:00 PM
Good description of a dangerous path to trod. Do you live in Hawaii? I live on New York's Lower East Side. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
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Date: 9/6/2010 4:55:00 AM
Connie, thanks for your read and commentaries. Thanks above all for your friendship. I am humbled that such a superb artist should give me honor ... how dramatically awesome is this poem that display your genius.
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Date: 9/4/2010 8:12:00 PM
Great write and a very creative one. The concluding last two lines are the jest of this wonderful writes, 'She is my only reason to rise, yet is now the bane of my existence' Love and best wishes ....Ravindra.....Connie Marcum Wong.
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Date: 8/23/2010 2:45:00 PM
Hello Connie, I love this form I tried it myself. Believe me I enjoyed the Etheree so much. I am glad i read this one.. LOL,, Gin,..p.d.
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Date: 8/20/2010 1:13:00 AM
Many lives sure have gone down the drain because of the allure of the bottle-- your etheree sure is very clever Connie, I especially liked your 6th to 8th lines--- hugs nikko :)
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Date: 8/19/2010 7:16:00 PM
what an excellent Etheree, Connie. Masterfully done.
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Date: 8/18/2010 10:08:00 PM
This is just geat, Connie, and I'm happy to hear you were able to take inspiration from a dream to do this. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/18/2010 10:16:00 AM
What a wonderful day to be reading poetry of others. I am so happy your poetry is among those I am reading this morning Connie. I wish you as I wish all my fellow poets the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. It is a pleasure to me to read my fellow poets poetry. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/18/2010 9:59:00 AM
i love the way that this poem flows. i was a bacardi man myself.
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Date: 8/18/2010 8:18:00 AM
I used to circle a wild turkey and it lead me to madness...nice write of a tough topic...TAH
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