Black Eyed Susan Poet Tanka

Giant Coffin

Trapped in the stairway
Heavy smoke filling my lungs
Screams piercing my ears
       The tower is collapsing!
       No time to say good-bye, no...


9/13/11

Received 6th place in "Remembering 9/11" contest

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Carol Sunshine Brown September 27, 2011 at 9:28 AM I am stopping by your wonderful poetry today to thank you for your kind comments on my writing Susan. Hope you have an inspiration filled week. Love, Carol

Michael J. Falotico September 15, 2011 at 5:38 PM Congrats my friend on a wonderful win.. always Michael

Jack Horne September 15, 2011 at 4:04 PM Many congratulations to you, Susan : )

Bob Quigley September 15, 2011 at 10:38 AM Powerful emotion displayed here. Congratulations on your win Susan

Caryl Ramsdale September 15, 2011 at 4:30 AM Outstanding title to finish my friend. All favorite lines. Congratulations on your 6th Place win Susan. CR

Lee Ramage September 15, 2011 at 12:53 AM I can't imagine how this would have felt, you bring it home... well written. Congratulations on your win. well done.

Nette Onclaud September 15, 2011 at 12:23 AM emotions right through the core, susan..sunniest congrats on your special win :) huggs

Andrea Dietrich September 14, 2011 at 11:06 PM wowie, from the perspective of the one trapped inside, This is SO great, Susan. I dont' know what placement you got, but congrats on your win. I got on the list too , which made me happy.LUv, Andrea

John Freeman September 14, 2011 at 9:12 PM Susan, a beautiful job on you part about a bitter situation that changed many lives. Congratulations on your worthy verse of worth being honored. Agape, Moses

Kim Merryman September 14, 2011 at 8:41 PM Congrats on your win, Susan! Kim

Dr.Ram Mehta September 14, 2011 at 8:20 PM Congratulations on the win in the contest of Carolyn, Susan

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 14, 2011 at 4:11 PM Congrats Susan on your wonderful win..so luv that title..impressive my friend..luv..

Joyce Johnson September 14, 2011 at 3:22 PM You place us all right there Susan. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

David Williams September 14, 2011 at 2:59 PM Susan congrats on your win..David

Carol Sunshine Brown September 14, 2011 at 2:15 PM Congratulations on your well deserved win Susan. Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire September 14, 2011 at 2:06 PM Susan, your perspective taken from one of the victims was unique and powerful. That last line is especially chilling. Congratulations on your win! There were many great entries, so take pride in your achievement. Love, Carolyn

Dinda Minardi September 14, 2011 at 10:36 AM Wow, is this for 9/11 ? A great write, you can present only in few lines, that's great, Susan. :)

Richard Pickett September 14, 2011 at 9:39 AM nicely done Susan...Nicely done...God Bless...Taz

Lisa Cooper September 14, 2011 at 9:27 AM 9/11 was a tragic event, your tanka captured it's tragedy. great pen