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Giant Coffin

Trapped in the stairway Heavy smoke filling my lungs Screams piercing my ears The tower is collapsing! No time to say good-bye, no... 9/13/11 Received 6th place in "Remembering 9/11" contest

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/27/2011 9:28:00 AM

I am stopping by your wonderful poetry today to thank you for your kind comments on my writing Susan. Hope you have an inspiration filled week. Love, Carol

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 9/15/2011 5:38:00 PM

Congrats my friend on a wonderful win.. always Michael

Jack Horne

Date: 9/15/2011 4:04:00 PM

Many congratulations to you, Susan : )

Bob Quigley

Date: 9/15/2011 10:38:00 AM

Powerful emotion displayed here. Congratulations on your win Susan

Caryl Ramsdale

Date: 9/15/2011 4:30:00 AM

Outstanding title to finish my friend. All favorite lines. Congratulations on your 6th Place win Susan. CR

Lee Ramage

Date: 9/15/2011 12:53:00 AM

I can't imagine how this would have felt, you bring it home... well written. Congratulations on your win. well done.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/15/2011 12:23:00 AM

emotions right through the core, susan..sunniest congrats on your special win :) huggs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/14/2011 11:06:00 PM

wowie, from the perspective of the one trapped inside, This is SO great, Susan. I dont' know what placement you got, but congrats on your win. I got on the list too , which made me happy.LUv, Andrea

John Freeman

Date: 9/14/2011 9:12:00 PM

Susan, a beautiful job on you part about a bitter situation that changed many lives. Congratulations on your worthy verse of worth being honored. Agape, Moses

Kim Merryman

Date: 9/14/2011 8:41:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Susan! Kim

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/14/2011 8:20:00 PM

Congratulations on the win in the contest of Carolyn, Susan

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/14/2011 4:11:00 PM

Congrats Susan on your wonderful win..so luv that title..impressive my friend..luv..

Joyce Johnson

Date: 9/14/2011 3:22:00 PM

You place us all right there Susan. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

David Williams

Date: 9/14/2011 2:59:00 PM

Susan congrats on your win..David

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/14/2011 2:15:00 PM

Congratulations on your well deserved win Susan. Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/14/2011 2:06:00 PM

Susan, your perspective taken from one of the victims was unique and powerful. That last line is especially chilling. Congratulations on your win! There were many great entries, so take pride in your achievement. Love, Carolyn

Dinda Minardi

Date: 9/14/2011 10:36:00 AM

Wow, is this for 9/11 ? A great write, you can present only in few lines, that's great, Susan. :)

Richard Pickett

Date: 9/14/2011 9:39:00 AM

nicely done Susan...Nicely done...God Bless...Taz

Lisa Cooper

Date: 9/14/2011 9:27:00 AM

9/11 was a tragic event, your tanka captured it's tragedy. great pen