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Poetic Form: Villanelle
Inspired: 2023 December 22
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Embers trailing an afterglow of dawn, welcoming harmony lingers aloft, as chess pleasures the first move of its pawn. That will make Mary quite contrary yawn, passed Mary was Harry down his hayloft, embers trailing an afterglow of dawn. Into the John Harry quickly withdrawn, Mary takes her sweet time as she so oft, as chess pleasures the first move of its pawn. Here sits down Harry as breakfast is on, then sat Mary talking ever so soft, embers trailing an afterglow of dawn. Harry is done, washed up, and waits for Vaughn, Mary's done, washed up, and waits for Miss. Croft, as chess pleasures the first move of its pawn. Mary's the first to leave on down the toft, Then Harry, his friend, and a boy named Shawn, embers trailing an afterglow of dawn, as chess pleasures the first move of its pawn.

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Date: 12/23/2023 9:00:00 AM
Oh what an interesting villanelle this is! I absolutely love your storytelling skills, how impeccably you've maintained the flow here whilst weaving a captivating scene, incorporating the 'chess' theme and also, keeping a beautiful pace of the refrains as well.. I've been wishing to try this form too & now seeing yours, I'm inspired to write as well. This should do well in the contest, sending my best wishes~
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Hilo Poet
Date: 12/23/2023 11:43:00 AM
Ahh, Hiya, I am very pleased with your words that linger, truly grateful. As I explained to Silent One how one thing led to another till--voila, mon amie, a breath of a tale. I do hope that you do and should start commenting but I'm a bit of reader. Aloha, William
Date: 12/22/2023 3:50:00 PM
I appreciated the 'chess' concept and how you wove it into your poem. Your refrains flowed quite well...a beautifully constructed Villanelle. Have a great evening, Sara
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Date: 12/22/2023 4:13:00 PM
I find PS members, in general, to be rather savvy in the interpretations of chess. Thank you, Sara. The evening here has been slightly great--rain and all--but then again the evenings are not over yet, my friend. Aloha, William
Date: 12/22/2023 11:27:00 AM
Who are Harry and Mary? You have written a Villanelle which flows and rhymes very well and your choice of refrains were perfect for your poem..
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Hilo Poet
Date: 12/22/2023 2:49:00 PM
The impetus was ‘contrary’ that hail Mary that intro rhyming Harry and not repeating Vaughn instant intro Shawn and the single toughest of all was ’toft’ (prior to the aforementioned inception) which gave rise to its setting to be in some quaint country village near Somerset—admirable name Aloha, William
Date: 12/22/2023 7:44:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Get Ready" write/story. Good Luck... Merry Christmas..................
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Hilo Poet
Date: 12/22/2023 7:48:00 AM
Thank you, Paula, and yes to a Mele Kalikimaka. Aloha, William
Date: 12/22/2023 7:15:00 AM
Your villanelle is brilliant! So well written and your chosen refrains are excellent too. Flows so well as well. I especially love the storytelling here going on throughout as well as chess concept! I bet this will be a winner. Best wishes for the contest, and sending you light . Pleasure always reading your work
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Date: 12/22/2023 8:49:00 AM
I don’t remember the last time ive used a thesaurus, i think i need to use it more often as my vocabulary is getting too repetitive or redundant Thank you for your response, you did an amazing job: best wishes
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Hilo Poet
Date: 12/22/2023 7:39:00 AM
As I was commenting to Vijay of its simplistic tenor being that some sponsors I don't know as I mentioned to you early on of not 2nd guessing them of how they run theirs and if a Thesaurus needed yours would not be given the light of day--still in the dark here, Ink Empress, thanks. Aloha, William
Date: 12/22/2023 6:16:00 AM
Splendidly done, my friend. Much enjoyed the tone and flow and the tenor of your repeating lines, William.
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Date: 12/22/2023 7:31:00 AM
I'm somewhat getting a feel of the sponsors mindset, and Shadow's been here longer than I but she's been out of the limelight and known of her since I recently returned, some sponsors don't want to pull out a Thesaurus, so I'm going neutral and keep it simple--not all the time. Thanks again, Vijay. Aloha, William

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