Gee Whizz Lady

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When I let one loose in the elevator,
I tried holding, but the gas had been greater.
Spreading in age, I couldn’t blame for later,
Every step I took, my body a traitor.

Three young man that were next to me,
Were trying to be respectful. One fell to his knees
Pinched his nose; Gee Whizz, Lady! Snickered tee-hee.
The doors flew opened, they buzzed out like bees.

8/1/2021


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Indiana Shaw

Date: 8/9/2021 9:05:00 PM

My granny always took lavender tablets, so, hers always smelled sweet, loved your poem on the subject, ha, ha, ha . . . ; )

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/7/2021 5:32:00 PM

Such humor in this one. I love it that you let three young men show you how bad it was!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/4/2021 1:58:00 AM

Ha ha, had quite a laugh, Eve:)

Jan Allison

Date: 8/3/2021 5:10:00 PM

ha ha ha this is hilariarse and I love pic pic Eve, thanks for the giggle:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/2/2021 2:40:00 PM

hahaha these are all so good. Gotta try it fast. you nailed it.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 8/1/2021 5:36:00 PM

Fortunately for me my olfactory senses were not harmed during this read. So I was left with a big beaming smile on my face.

Eve Roper
Date: 8/1/2021 9:43:00 PM

Thank you, Scott, for visiting my verse and not getting offended. It is just helllll getting old.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 8/1/2021 11:34:00 AM

Hi Eve, what a give away our age is, it is evident by what others hear and smell - sorry - however, i'm sure we have all had a similar experience. Well penned my friend, Hugs and blessings Jennifer.

Eve Roper
Date: 8/1/2021 9:44:00 PM

Thank you for your lovely visit my friend always a joy to hear from you. I hope you are doing well. Hugs Eve

Joe Dimino

Date: 8/1/2021 8:59:00 AM

My complaint with elevators also -- too many people, and not enough ventilation.... I think you and the young men should see a lawyer together (a case against the manufacturer)...or separately, depending on the time of day, and what everyone has eaten. Excellent, fun read.

Eve Roper
Date: 8/1/2021 9:50:00 PM

Thank you, Joe, for your visit. Yes, places like that should have good ventilation to help control, besides odor absorbing deodorizers. I am glad you liked the read.