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We harvested the grapes in late autumn	
when ripeness of love was at its best,			
but deceit in the time of maturing		
changed the passion to wrath and unrest.	

Acerbic vinegar replaced sweet wine 	
and richness of flavour ceased to be mine.	
Betrayed was the pledge of a tender vine.	

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Syllable count: 10-9-10-9  10-10-10
Rhyme Scheme: a b   c  b   d   d    d  

Novel: Grapes of Wrath (John Steinbeck)
Contest: Titles of Novels 
Sponsor: Nette Onclaud
Placed 3rd
© paul callus ~ 10 June 2016

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Timothy Hicks Date: 6/28/2016 11:23:00 PM I wasn't apart of the contest (I'm assuming you pick any book title that you wish and write a short poem about it?) ... in any case, this was cleverly done, with the playfulness of the title. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/29/2016 2:39:00 PM Hi Timothy! The idea was to write about the title, not about the novel itself, thus it was all left to our imagination. // Hope you are well settled in your new environment:) Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian Date: 6/22/2016 5:37:00 AM Lovely write, Paul, albeit sad. I hear congrats are in order. I haven't been around much. Please check your inbox. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/29/2016 2:36:00 PM Thank you Eileen...a week late in replying, but in the meantime I already came across your mail. Thank you for keeping me in your thoughts. Hugs // paul

Chris Hagy Date: 6/20/2016 7:22:00 PM Great write Paul! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/29/2016 2:32:00 PM Excuse the late reply Chris; somehow these comments skipped my attention since I forget to look in my Inboxes! Thank you for reading and liking. Regards // paul

Bl Devnath Date: 6/17/2016 3:32:00 PM Wonderfully crafted my lovely nice friend. Good luck in the contest and seven, loved always, bl Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/18/2016 8:14:00 AM Thank you, BL; the wishes and 7 are appreciated. Regards // paul

Bl Devnath Date: 6/17/2016 3:31:00 PM Wonderfully crafted my lovely nice friend. Good luck in the contest and seven, loved always, bl Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 6/16/2016 4:54:00 PM wow worthy winner, love this Paul, Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/16/2016 5:19:00 PM Your wow means a lot, Harry:) Thank you! ~ Regards // paul

Afolabi Muideen Date: 6/16/2016 11:10:00 AM You composed this gem brilliant, thanks for sharing. Good luck within..........A.M. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/16/2016 1:54:00 PM You are too kind, Afolabi! Thank you! ~ Regards // paul

Red Fiery Date: 6/16/2016 2:32:00 AM ..but deceit in the time of maturing...these words can really leave an impact..I know what they reveal..excellent work Paul..!!! I wish to congratulate you before the results are out...A7 and a fav~ Hugs ~ Red Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/16/2016 1:58:00 PM Thank you very much for your generosity, dear Red! Your awaited visits are always lovely and uplifting! Both the high rating and the fav are much appreciated. ~ Hugs ~ paul

Jai Bankson Date: 6/16/2016 12:01:00 AM Bella Bella Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/16/2016 12:12:00 PM Grazie tante, Jai:) Thank you! ~ Regards // paul

Sandra Haight Date: 6/15/2016 7:36:00 PM Wonderfully written, Paul, based on that title! Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Sandra Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/16/2016 12:10:00 PM So pleased that you like it, Sandra. Thank you:) ~ Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 6/15/2016 1:32:00 AM Excellent. Great imagery write. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/16/2016 12:00:00 PM Glad you stopped by, Ravi; thank you for the 'excellent' comment:) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/14/2016 2:52:00 PM very glad to see this one doing well in the contest.Congrats to you!! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/16/2016 11:16:00 AM Thank you, Andrea .... shaking hands with you across the podium...:) // paul

Teddy Kimathi Date: 6/14/2016 4:46:00 AM Hi Paul. Congrats for your placement with this wonderful piece!! ;-) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/16/2016 10:13:00 AM Thank you, Teddy. ~ All the best...paul

Nette Onclaud Date: 6/14/2016 3:34:00 AM excellently written with effortless rhyme that adds power to the gripping tone of your poem, paul... also glad you got in despite the tech problems...thanks for supporting my contest and warm congrats!..huggs Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/15/2016 5:26:00 PM Thank you very much, Nette; your comments and high placing are most uplifting. Always a pleasure to participate in your contests...despite the latest technical hitches:) Big hugs....paul

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 6/12/2016 6:00:00 PM I am in awe Paul. This poem is amazing and I know it will be a top winner. I am faving it my friend! Excellent! #7 ; ) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/13/2016 10:42:00 AM Thank you ever so much, Connie; I truly appreciate your lovely encouraging feedback...and your high rating + fav. ~ Best regards // paul

Jack Horne Date: 6/12/2016 11:34:00 AM wow, this is so good, Paul - a form I must try too. Belated congrats for the limerick contest. Loved yours, my friend Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/12/2016 4:05:00 PM Thank you, Jack. Hope you're keeping well and active. Always a pleasure to have you visiting. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/12/2016 10:27:00 AM wow, definitely one of my favorites I've seen in this contest. You did the Grapes of Wrath theme so masterfully within this short invented poetry form! I am sure to see this place high!! Glad it got in. We were hanging by a thread, paul!! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/12/2016 3:01:00 PM You are always so encouraging and supportive, Andrea....thank you!! I wouldn't mind sharing one of the top placements with you:) Cling on!! // paul

Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/12/2016 7:47:00 AM No worries Paul, the past is long settled and I have been married now for 22 years to an amazing woman. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/12/2016 8:53:00 AM Now that the dust has settled on the past, may I wish you many more happy years with your present love! // paul

Arthur Vaso Date: 6/11/2016 11:12:00 PM That settles it, I will come visit next year! Hopefully the wine will be a better vintage!! :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/12/2016 7:37:00 AM I believe it all started with irregular fermentation, Arthur. I will have a go at red wine next year;;;you're welcome to stop by:) // paul

Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/11/2016 8:40:00 AM I echo Eileen's "Brilliant" you could be describing my first marriage. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/12/2016 6:53:00 AM Thank you Richard. Sorry to bring you (and Arthur!) back memories. All the best. ~ paul Arthur Vaso Date: 6/11/2016 11:12:00 PM We had the same wife? :)

Eileen Manassian Date: 6/11/2016 6:37:00 AM Brilliant, dear. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/11/2016 8:25:00 AM Thank you dear Eileen:) I am glad you have managed to find some self quality time...I know how busy you must be! Hugs // paul

Eve Roper Date: 6/10/2016 6:50:00 PM Wow!! Paul, this is a winner. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/11/2016 7:31:00 AM So pleased that you like it, Eve...thank you. Have a nice weekend...hugs ~ paul

Constance La France Date: 6/10/2016 6:44:00 PM Paul, this is ''WONDERFUL'' for the contest, best of luck 7+++ Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/11/2016 7:13:00 AM Thank you Constance. There is just one flaw....so far I have been unable to enter the contest due to Soup technical hitches! I hope they will find a solution. ~ Regards and enjoy the weekend. ~ paul