Fulcrum of a rose

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Fulcrum of a rose Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Unseeking seeker
06/21/25

Stamens and pistils delicately poised Shamans and pistols making too much noise Soft buzz preferred, a silencer’s desired Pollinator’s sense the triggers just fired Nectar brings balance agape open wide Willing the seeker to do laps inside Comes with a snag also stitch in the side Fulcrum of a rose the thorn realised My soul’s not a flower just gives and takes Wants what it craves accepts all, even fakes Opens too early, closes far too late Can’t tell if I’m full, yet knows when I’m sate Possesses a thorn, and stabs by design Fulcrum of my soul’s human not divine Protects at all costs only thing that’s mine Not pain or loss, just my life to define

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Ink Empress

Date: 6/26/2025 3:33:00 AM

I like how youv used details of flowers, like pistils and stamens, the scientific details youv used to convey something so very deep and profound! I really loved especially the lines "My soul’s not a flower just gives and takes Wants what it craves accepts all, even fakes " deep and soul hitting ! " only thing that’s mine Not pain or loss, just my life to define " think many can resonate with that too! A very soulfully moving and heartfelt take on the prompt! Pleasure reading! Sending you light always . A fave ofcourse

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/26/2025 6:25:00 AM

Heya Ink, thanks so much for such a wonderful comment, I was just being truthful to myself, as indeed I try to be in all my poems, it’s pretty hard to define a soul without saying it defines me as a human being, and all the good and bad (points) that involves, just like the rose and thorn, both are part and parcel of the whole, I’m absolutely delighted with your fav considering you deservedly won the contest, mine just didn’t seem to resonate with the sponsor, and that’s ok, I enjoyed writing this piece nonetheless, thanks for the light too! Cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 6/22/2025 5:22:00 PM

We've held, touched, smelled, and used the precious flower over and over again as our muse, thorns surround her as they protect her from harm making it difficult to get close to her. "Fulcrum of my soul’s human not divine Protects at all costs only thing that’s mine Not pain or loss, just my life to define" Beautifully said. You've certainly conveyed the fulcrum of a rose, David Bol, Cheers!

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/23/2025 2:58:00 AM

Heya Anaya, metaphysical roses using human senses and consciousness as the fulcrum, Seekers contests are always difficult for me to express! Still I’m delighted how this one turned out, was a delight to write, thanks so much for your wonderful comment, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 6/22/2025 5:47:00 AM

"Fulcrum of a rose the thorn realized." The prick of a rose's thorns can't always be escaped if our pivot point is not quick enough to escape the pain. Some may believe the stabbing wound is little price to pay for the beauty of being inside her velvety soft petals. We can't always protect ourselves from pain from the want of such beauty. There's as much intricacy in doing so as you've written in these intricate lines, David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/22/2025 6:43:00 AM

Heya Lin great to see you back if only for a little while; life is very intricate and finely poised, pain will and does come alongside the nice stuff, but in the end we really do have our own lives to define, that’s where the real fulcrum extends from, thanks so much for reading and stopping by with wise comment, cheers David