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Frozen Soul In Silent Stillness

Like a frozen soul in silent stillness,
crisp mist returns like forgotten debris.
Carpet of scarlet leaves lay on green grass,
dew drops seem like tears from crying trees.

Lost in thought in a world I’ve created
Gazing at trees in their autumn attire
Tears are falling like the vibrant leaves
In their final grand spiral of fire

I am the sadness of the season 
in turn I anticipate the impending chill
Stability fades and my emotions churn
I can’t see beyond this steep hill  

Nature's palette has turned my golds to grey,
as broken branches compose songs of sorrow. 
Canopy of clouds mean sun casts no shadow,
and each path before me is dark and narrow.

A collaboration between Silent One and Judy Stickels.
15 October 2020

Judy has not written in a while, so I wanted to encourage her to write.  
The beauty of poetry is that we can share and together make words stronger.

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Caren Krutsinger October 19, 2020 at 1:36 PM A delightful collaboration. Your rhymes are impeccably done; well penned! Silent One October 19, 2020 at 2:45 PM Thank you..

Angela Crabtree October 17, 2020 at 8:44 PM The imagery of your words combined with the music that you have attached to this makes for a perfect picture painted with your pen :) ~Angie Silent One October 18, 2020 at 3:00 PM Thank you..

Jennifer Proxenos October 17, 2020 at 4:47 AM And yet even in its barren state with its barren twigs and branches like a witches hand, when the snow come and dresses the tree and lies beneath it it will look like a snow queen. I love the way you have got the tree giving its feelings of losing it's s beauty, so clever SO, almost like a vain women in her twilight years - another fave for sure. Hugs and blessings my friend, Jennifer. Silent One October 17, 2020 at 7:06 AM That's an interesting interpretation and I can see how you would read that... This more about a person being a little lost... Thank you for all your support today

Janice Canerdy October 16, 2020 at 12:46 PM There is a vivid blend of literal and figurative language in this somber, lovely piece, S.O. Janice Silent One October 16, 2020 at 3:50 PM Thank you..

Mugo Muriithi October 15, 2020 at 10:50 PM i like this piece of art... Silent One October 16, 2020 at 11:39 AM Thanks..

Evelyn Judy Buehler October 15, 2020 at 10:08 PM So lovely! I very much enjoyed this stunning collaborative effort. :) Silent One October 16, 2020 at 11:39 AM Thank you

Andrea Dietrich October 15, 2020 at 5:54 PM I congratulate you both. Together you have made a stunning duet here!! Silent One October 16, 2020 at 11:39 AM Thank you

Brandy Nicole October 15, 2020 at 5:51 PM Oh my !!! Looking at this photo and then curling the words around me, my heart feels these moments differently. I see life and a new beginning, after a season of rest and tender hibernation. Perhaps. . . this is because my emotions wrap around the beauty that surrounds it, and not the sadness. You both have created a somber moment, here within your words. ~ Brandy Silent One October 16, 2020 at 11:40 AM Glad you felt the poem... Thank you

Bobby May October 15, 2020 at 5:45 PM WOW!!! this one blew me away! Silent One October 16, 2020 at 11:40 AM Thanks..

Heidi Sands October 15, 2020 at 2:54 PM Congratulations for this great collaboration. I love the piano music too :) Silent One October 16, 2020 at 11:40 AM Thank you..

Rico Leffanta October 15, 2020 at 1:12 PM A frozen soul is certainly scary enough for Halloween, but autumn is no preparation for old age! Aloha! Rico Silent One October 16, 2020 at 11:40 AM Indeed lol

Elaine George October 15, 2020 at 10:53 AM A truly beautiful collaboration...and the music so fitting. Thank you for sharing. ~ Elaine Silent One October 15, 2020 at 12:50 PM Thank you..

Mystic Rose Rose October 15, 2020 at 10:19 AM I love the words you pen far beyond the canopy of heaven , your leaven for the heart Silent One, Thank you Silent One October 15, 2020 at 12:53 PM Thank you for your kind compliment..

Alexis Y. October 15, 2020 at 9:22 AM WoW! Silent and Judy have such a well written collaboration. The metaphors combined with nature is top notch. Excellent job to the both of you. You should submit this in the contest. Have a good day my friend :-) Alexis Silent One October 15, 2020 at 9:44 AM Thank you Alexis.. Always great to collaborate with a fellow poet..

Tom Cunningham October 15, 2020 at 9:20 AM Two talented poets, you've composed this poetic gem well together , love the imagery Tom Silent One October 15, 2020 at 9:44 AM Thank you Tom..

Vijay Galia October 15, 2020 at 9:18 AM I wonder how would I hone my skills to someday, collaborate with you? You're so good, I fear to show, Whatever I write looks so stooping low.. I like your work, whatever you show, I take this opportunity to give you a bow!! Silent One October 15, 2020 at 9:44 AM We can do a collaboration whenever you feel ready.. Thank you

Beryl Edmonds October 15, 2020 at 8:03 AM A beautiful autumn collaboration, well done to both of you. Belle Silent One October 15, 2020 at 9:44 AM Thank you..

John Hamilton October 15, 2020 at 8:02 AM This is sooo good, a nice collab, it is seamless so that is a sign of great teamwork. Kudos to you SO for helping another poet, you are a good man! Silent One October 15, 2020 at 9:45 AM That is the beauty of poetry and thats how it should be in life to help one another.. Thank you

Anne-Lise Andresen October 15, 2020 at 6:20 AM - A wonderful co- poem, Judy & S.O. :) - We have had frost at night all this week ... autumn changes place with winter ... cold ... brrrrr ... - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Silent One October 15, 2020 at 6:57 AM Thank you... Anne-Lise Andresen October 15, 2020 at 6:23 AM ... Oh ... Judith ... this young lady :) - A pleasure to see you :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit October 15, 2020 at 5:28 AM Enjoyed the tune of this melancholy song. There's beauty in the saddened voice. Kudos to you both Silent and Judy. Silent One October 15, 2020 at 6:56 AM Thank you Vijay...

Kim Rodrigues October 15, 2020 at 5:25 AM A beautiful collaboration! Love: Tears are falling like the vibrant leaves/In their final grand spiral of fire Silent One October 15, 2020 at 6:56 AM Thank you Kim...

Regina Mcintosh October 15, 2020 at 5:10 AM I tried to find her, but she isn't showing up in a search? Can you send me a link to her poetry please :) Silent One October 15, 2020 at 5:20 AM I struggled to find her also! Lol. https://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poems_by_poet.aspx?ID=90970

Regina Mcintosh October 15, 2020 at 5:08 AM This is beautiful and your collaboration is so impressive and expressive. I love it! A fave for me - I'll look up this poet. I don't remember her! God bless you kind poet :)Love and prayers sent your way Silent One October 15, 2020 at 5:20 AM Thank you Regina, always enjoy getting the cobwebs off from these poet's pens...

Maria Williams October 15, 2020 at 5:03 AM Two incredible poets, an incredible collaboration. Judy, Im so glad to see you writing again. As you can see your pen flows effortlessly. It's raring to go. Don't stop now. You've been missed. Si , poetry at its best as always. Love it, and music choice is perfect.A fave....Maria Hugs Silent One October 15, 2020 at 5:21 AM Thank you Maria, this was fully inspired by Judy... Hopefully she will now start to write a lot more...