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Frosty Jack's

On the park bench he sat, With his bottle of frosty jack's. His mate, who had drank too much Lay flat out on his back. He was trying to make a roll up But given his situation, A puggled mind, cider drunk, No chance of co-ordination. But he could always hold the bottle, he held it in both hands. Lifted it, took a mighty draught Then off to the promised land. They were heading for oblivion, Down a one way, drunken track. Minds befuddled, slowly fading, Being killed, by frosty jack's.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 8/29/2017 11:56:00 AM
Made me sad to read Gary so vividly descriptive down to the end of the bottle:-( hugs Jan xx
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Gary Smith
Date: 8/29/2017 12:03:00 PM
Thank you Jan :)
Date: 8/25/2017 6:03:00 PM
So sad and true to life Gary ! Well done.
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Gary Smith
Date: 8/25/2017 6:07:00 PM
Thank you Heidi :)
Date: 8/25/2017 5:20:00 PM
I always have mixed emotions when confronted with this! Great write Gary, telling it like it is. Kind regards, Craig
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Gary Smith
Date: 8/25/2017 5:29:00 PM
Thank you Craig :)

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