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FROM NIGHTFALL TO DAYBREAK

The brooding lips of night, her frown when puffs of smoke dot blue sky's crown, stars bleed in ink as all blooms yield for the temptress of darkened field. Then howling breeze dressed in gray shawl, droops longingly to trace slow crawl a twilight tear from clouds is peeled for the temptress of darkened field. Dark goddess of time, shade of pale weariness bears like lost bird's wail, How chilled can silence grit eve's shield for the temptress of darkened field. The fond eyes of dawn, her close view shows night’s long shroud and crypt of blue, She snuffs each star, yet love’s revealed by the angel of brightened field. So harsh the role to kill with light, Shame shades her blush, first soft and slight, ‘Til full mercy shines, then all’s healed by the angel of brightened field. Day’s duty is to moonlight reap, Yet morning glows, can never sleep, Cascading dreams are kissed and sealed by the angel of brightened field.
(c) rhyme 8 syll count Brenda Chiri's Contest: 'Your Very Best Rhyme Of All Time' ~ A Collab Poem

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 1/16/2012 2:05:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in Tracie's "Opposites Attract" contest Nette. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/15/2012 5:52:00 PM
Just read your partner's and now I can say the same to you. Wonderful job and big congrats. I can see you guys had a blast!!
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Date: 1/14/2012 4:43:00 PM
simply stunning - you guys work so well together that you can hardly tell them apart! Congrats on your win :)
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Date: 1/14/2012 1:05:00 PM
I think this is a really well flowing piece from you both..! i intended just to look; but i saw this to be a most moving write..and in all honesty had to comment..!
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Date: 1/14/2012 1:58:00 AM
love this nette, congrats, harry
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Date: 1/14/2012 12:37:00 AM
Congratulation my friend on your superb win the contest, my friend, enjoyed with heart. Loved it, bl
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Date: 1/13/2012 9:26:00 PM
Hey there Sister from Another Mother, high fives! Whata win! And I enjoyed touching my forehead to yours. Energy flows, doesn't it? I can hear your smile from across the ocean. Your asthma is improving, yes? Hugs, from a stuffy nosed Cyndi who has a head cold, but is feeling nice and warm
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Date: 1/13/2012 4:40:00 PM
Great collab poem! COngrats on your win... Thanks for your sweet comment on my poetry, Nette :) Love, J.
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Date: 1/13/2012 4:09:00 PM
Nette, I now see why you and Cyndi garnered the top spot in the contest. Both segments were written quite well with pervasive descriptiveness and appropriate rhyming. Congratulations to both of you.
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Date: 1/13/2012 3:48:00 PM
Reads like a winner to me..Enjoyed reading this eve..Very descriptive and expressive work..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara
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Date: 1/13/2012 3:09:00 PM
Hi Miss Nette! I was sooo impressed with this gorgeous collab..u even took Cyndi on a magical carpet WRITE!!! Congrats to you...I posted one today OUT OF POETIC PRESSURE FROM YOU! hahhahaha. ps..the backdrop for this poem is extraordinary...what angelic images!!
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Date: 1/13/2012 1:34:00 PM
Hi nette! Like what I said to Cyndi, you two worked excellently here-- each giving your own touch to your parts-- I really love how you personified night and dawn here-- enjoyed that "temptress of darkened field" and "angel of brightened field"-- very unique descriptions! Super congrats to you and Cyndi on your awesome win :D Really enjoyed this beauty!!
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Date: 1/13/2012 10:30:00 AM
Congratulation on your joint win x
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Date: 1/13/2012 8:57:00 AM
CONGRATS NETTE LUV ON BIG FIRST PLACE WELL DESERVED WIN WITH CYNDI.. BRILLIANT AND BEAUTIFUL.. GREAT COLLAB.. WILL BE GETTING TO S.M. LATER TODAY LUV.. STILL WORKING ONN MY THERAPY SESSIONS..
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Date: 1/13/2012 8:39:00 AM
Great job, you two! Congratulations, ~Pokey~
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Date: 1/13/2012 8:13:00 AM
Congrats on a great win...
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Date: 1/13/2012 7:58:00 AM
CONGRATULATIONS!!You two are both awesome poets.Enjoyed this collab very much.
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Date: 1/12/2012 10:10:00 PM
very good n flows an goes, like an omnibus with at least ten toes, well understood.....love it...
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Date: 1/12/2012 8:53:00 PM
oooo! very nice...p.d.
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Date: 1/12/2012 7:48:00 PM
I'm blown away by such talent from you both. They both had a hypnotic effect on my senses...so picturesque, so calming...my words fail me. This would have my vote for number 1 !!
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Date: 1/12/2012 7:26:00 PM
What a wonderful twist you spun us through between the dark night and the light of dawn! Beautiful write you two! I really enjoyed this poem very much! The descriptions, wow, what perfect ones they are, giving great emotion to the poem! You both did a really good job!! Hats off to ya both!!
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