Black Eyed Susan Poet Dodoitsu

Freeze Tag Players - Mosquito Treats

I was frozen in place when
I felt it “bite me” – a nip
On my neck from a pesky
Mosquito – oh no!

I couldn’t move to kill it,
So I stayed still.  But cringed when   
I saw the mosquito land 
On Deborah’s nose!


4/7/12
Susan Burch
For Linda's "Bite Me" contest
Bit Deborah Burch

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Poet Destroyer A May 16, 2012 at 4:56 PM CONGRATULATIONS, SUSAN~ ONCE AGAIN... RE-READING A FEW OF YOUR POEMS... XOX..PD

Carol Sunshine Brown May 9, 2012 at 12:35 PM I am trying to catch up some on my thank you's to all the wonderful poets who have left kind comments on my writings. I thank you so much for your words of kindness Susan. I enjoyed reading your poetry today and hope you are having a wonderful day. Love, Carol

Gwendolen Song April 17, 2012 at 9:34 AM You mean you just sat there?..Did nothing?...Poor Deborah and her swollen nose! ha ha...Great fun this one is, Susan..belated congrats also....They'll be no biting off your toes regarding my Pearl Poem...but I will be glad to split a cheeseburger with ya! ha ha...You cracked me up as I read your comments. Crazy gal! :) Gwendolen

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders April 16, 2012 at 10:49 PM Congrats on your win Susan! So funny that it landed on Deborah's nose and she inhaled it. Too cute! Blessings, Rhonda

Carol Sunshine Brown April 16, 2012 at 12:08 PM Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Linda-Marie's "Bite Me" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Sara Kendrick April 16, 2012 at 10:46 AM Enjoyed reading your work..Good luck in the contest if it hasn't been judged yet..Reads like a winner to me..Sara

Joyce Johnson April 14, 2012 at 9:13 PM I hope Deborah slapped it. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Andrea Dietrich April 14, 2012 at 8:58 PM Again, I love how you ended yours Susan. Congrats on your win.

Deborah Burch April 14, 2012 at 8:19 PM lol...Congratulations Susan on your win!! big hugs,love deb

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 14, 2012 at 7:43 PM congrats Susan on sweet success for this super duper entry luv.. many thankxx..

Andrea Dietrich April 13, 2012 at 6:42 AM Hey, susan. How are you? I have been up since 3 a.m now and it's nearly 7. Good grief. I spent so much time in hotmail I am still not done in SOup!! SOon I have to go tutor my Brazilian lady!

Deborah Burch April 9, 2012 at 2:14 PM LOL!! too funny Cuz!! ;) lets see what I can do with that pesky raschell!!! love debs Deborah Burch April 9, 2012 at 3:50 PM BTW *raschell* is city spelling for raskull...lol ;)

Kabuteng P.Ink K. April 9, 2012 at 9:00 AM Hahaha! This is so cute, how you ended this, Susan :D those mosquitoes sure seem to be having a fiesta :D they'r biting everybody!

Poet Destroyer A April 7, 2012 at 11:19 PM Susan, love it... good luck in the contest.. have yourself a wonderful and Happy Easter, good night~ PD

Andrea Dietrich April 7, 2012 at 9:02 PM hahaha, I LOVE how you ended it with Deborah's nose. Delightful, Susan. I'm glad you "got 'er done"