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He walked into the place of my employment.
I was the only one at work in that small convenience store.
His aura was that of an angel
with the hint of a devil in his grin.

My attraction to him was immediate and amazing.
Tall and dark, he was the Adonis of my dreams.
I saw him from the corner of my eye as he lingered close by. 
My Adonis was also watching me!

Daily that week he appeared around evening,
flirting a bit and making small talk, his grin ever enchanting!
I can’t remember of what we spoke.
I was too lost in the beauty of his brown eyes.

Finally, he asked me out.  Why did he wait four long days?
To his country he would return from his short vacation
the very next day after our one and only night out.
I was never to see my young man's dear angel face again.

As I awaited his entrance to the store that big night,
I was aching with longing to simply be near him.
Other dates on which I’d gone were the most ordinary of tunes
compared to the romantic aria that played out that precious night.

We had driven off in his uncle’s Riviera, the car he'd borrowed.
Like his caresses and kisses later that sweet night,
even the automobile’s name is seered into my brain.
By that one September night with him, I was left ASTOUNDED.

Jan. 17, 2020
Though I used all the words, Astounded is my chosen word which
best described that indelible night right before I turned 17.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 1/24/2020 4:01:00 PM
Congrats. what a great piece
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Date: 1/24/2020 12:23:00 AM
Great win, Andrea, Congrats. A nice nostalgic narration.
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Date: 1/23/2020 10:03:00 AM
Back to say Congrats! Hugs Rick.
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Date: 1/23/2020 12:39:00 AM
Really enjoyed this one - nice! Sincere congratulations for your awesome win in Lu Loo's challenging contest, Andrea - best wishes for 2020 and keep up the great work, my friend! Blessings to you and yours! :o) <3
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Date: 1/22/2020 5:39:00 PM
Andrea congrats on your top win!;)
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Date: 1/22/2020 8:34:00 AM
hey sweet Andrea! Loved this poem, so happy to see you win top place. Thank you for your participation and congratulations on your placement. x:-)-luloo
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Date: 1/20/2020 8:22:00 AM
One night of romance is a memory kept, best wishes in the Contest Andrea
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Date: 1/19/2020 2:24:00 PM
Too funny, yes we definitely were on a similar wave length and ended in the same place. I like your story. So glad you brought it to my attention. Good luck in the contest. ;0)
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Date: 1/19/2020 12:57:00 PM
I know this is not just a story but real Andrea. It is funny how we can remember so many details when we really care for someone, no matter how many years go by. I am sure this will be a top winner. I goofed when I wrote mine and went over the 25 line limit. No way I can shorten mine so I removed it. I love your romantic entry. xxoo
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/19/2020 1:19:00 PM
thanks, I have done better ones on this topic though! Sorry yours was too long.
Date: 1/18/2020 5:55:00 PM
oh those crazy hazy days of summer romance....
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Date: 1/18/2020 12:36:00 PM
Here we meet again. I loved this poem, you always Astounded me with your amazing writings. They always feel so real sad or not, you are an astounded writer. Missed you I am trying to come back. I hope you are feeling much better. Love Terry xoxoxo
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Date: 1/18/2020 11:38:00 AM
Wow! The fire was there! Nice.
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Date: 1/18/2020 9:48:00 AM
An interesting terrific write - a story of a brief romance, but that has so much meaning. Well penned Andrea, Blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 1/18/2020 8:20:00 AM
What a story ...
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/18/2020 11:10:00 AM
I even ditched the guy I had been dating to spend a night with my prince charming. That other guy I had known half a year and I can barely picture him at all today the way I can picture this guy from Quebec whose image will always remain in my mind.
Date: 1/18/2020 7:00:00 AM
Enjoyed the read Andrea-- a charming memory of love.
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Date: 1/18/2020 2:08:00 AM
A lovely ode to young love. The romantic memories from that age are imperishable. I love "the most ordinary of tunes compared to the romantic aria". Brings back some sweet memories... Great write! ~ John
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/19/2020 1:21:00 PM
Indelible is a much better one, along with other numerous poems I have written about Guy Loranger. he even wrote and called me for a year after that night. I hope I have not lost his picture . I have all my memories tucked away in a treasure chest.
Date: 1/17/2020 11:55:00 PM
A beautiful story poem that made me smile, Andrea. It is innocent, and yet, so devilishly sensous at the same time.
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Date: 1/17/2020 9:58:00 PM
Do you know the song by Meatloaf - Paradise by the Dashboard Light?Your piece reminds me of it. My nephew reccommended to me the book the God Delusion. It is by an atheirstic author. Well, where does poetry come from? You can ask the atherists about that! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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