Free Cee Wise Eyes To Recognize

i noticed an enticing gleam in your eyes
a gleam that enunciated precisely what i needed to hear
but somehow i was slow to recognize
when i discovered what your stare made clear

in those emerald orbs i saw your heart
in in that stare were the words "my dear"
that was when sweet began playing its part
and forced far away forever my fear

we shared a shadow under an old oak tree
and a sweltering summer's day suddenly became cool
under that old oad tree were found you and me
when reality decided to break its rule

the rule was that only time would tell
yet the two of us needed no such time
destiny took us to where divinity would dwell
and a summer's day made so sublime

that day you came as such a surprise
while your emerald eyes became an exclamation mark
but by then i wasn't so slow as to not recognize
that you stood as a disclaimer to the dark
  (c)2012 ....PHREEPOETREE ~free cee!~

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 2/6/2012 12:27:00 PM
Just correct two small typos in your work: in the second line of the second verse, you begin the line with "in in". You only need one. In the third line of the third verse, you said "...that old oad tree...". I believe you wanted to type "...that old oak tree...". We are all human. Everything else looks just great.
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Date: 2/6/2012 5:08:00 AM
Nice one Jeffrey, with out the usual anger. missed them x
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Date: 2/5/2012 10:54:00 PM
Great poem, Jeffry.Cheers, Maureen
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