fragrant florescence Premiere Contest Winner

 you say you
              love the moon
but it’s the stars
              you gaze at,
as you stretch 
    your petal-like fingers
to flaunt magical phrases
  across nocturnal nights~ 
stealing their 
  fragrant florescence
within forsaken 
       liquified lights,
to make them an 
  unseen reality
worth reading, 
as your charming words 
 woven with 
    wisteria wishes
protect them
       from invisible ink, 
that has been
burning empty pages 
from fiery flames,
oblivious to the
tangerine truth
 not every twinkling gem 
can grant your wishes 
  to flicker caramel gold…

perhaps, you should
see the sacred 
     scriptures in silver 
within lunar spheres,
how she carries 
  perfumed pain,
whilst remaining faithfully
   as a fairy goddess; 
beacon of hyacinth hope 
  when you were 
in your 
  island of ignorance, 
speaking the
 lyrical language
of dimmed dreams in 
  sentimental silence

 so don’t question her 
wounded skin reflecting
confined absence~
 nor blame the 
    sizzling sapphires
with her name sewn,
in vibrant violet
within the crystalline 
cage beneath 
   crooning seas

she was never guilty 
    of lethal love
nor were her
  emerald emotions
manipulative games
designed for 
   ephemeral pleasures~
she, was in 
need of a 
   sublime rhyme
that can set her 
 healing heart ablaze,
reignite reasons to relive
promises made amidst 
    inevitable distance

but if pain prompted 
   a voice
you’ll feel her 
   bleeding soul
and her aching sight; 
she’s seen so much
of what the dying
leaves and 
   falling season
could do, 
yet, the wind 
   never revealed
secrets of the 
   sunflower crescent,
for her tale was never
meant to be 
   told to the weak~ 
trees with torn twigs,
    too afraid to translate
heartbroken hymns
and eager to place 
 lambent labels
on wilted weeds 
  and faded flowers,
unaware of the raven runes
flowing in fickle flares
within their 
  stone cold skin. 

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Date: 5/18/2024 3:04:00 PM
Dear Ink, I don't how I missed reading and commenting on this extraordinary poem. Your eloquent use of language in this contest entry is truly remarkable. The imagery you have woven throughout the poem, particularly of the night sky, stars, and moon, is both vivid and evocative. These celestial elements serve as poignant symbols of love, longing, and strength, creating a profound exploration of human emotion. Your piece encourages readers to contemplate their own experiences of yearning and healing, while also highlighting the beauty and intricacy of nature. Hearty congratulations on your well-deserved trophy.
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Date: 5/18/2024 12:52:00 PM
I don't believe you write poetry I believe you perform magic with every word you pen dear Ink, love it, congrats on your 1st place win dear heart :)
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Date: 5/1/2024 8:03:00 AM
IE, this poem seems to me to be a different and inside-out perspective on the contest theme, which is very thought provoking and unusual. You've added a fourth dimension to the concept in question and point out that perhaps we have something wonderful to strive for, but the observer might not think globally and realize there are consequences. The idea you promote...that we should be thoughtful about what we are dealing with in our striving for success...is a philosophical gem. I am actually amazed at what you have done here. This is exactly the sort of thinking that could generate peace in the world. The real judgement of success comes when we take all the effects into account and not just look at what we have done as a single entity. U R AMAZING!!
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Date: 4/12/2024 12:45:00 PM
Congratulations Empress! You are honest with blame, "not every twinkling gem can grant your wishes to flicker caramel gold" luscious. "She was never guilty of lethal love, nor were her emotions manipulative games" resonates. Poetry that holds together through and through, well you make one feel it's worth, justifies! Love can hurt us dear poetess~Anaya
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Date: 4/11/2024 8:44:00 AM
Congratulations on your winner. Way to go. Sara K
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Date: 4/8/2024 7:28:00 PM
"You say you love the moon but it’s the stars you gaze at." The opening pricked me. Failure is a compulsory process for anything that wants to be great. Love, career, family etc. "how she carries pain, whilst remaining faithfully as a fairy goddess." We could say pain given us wings to fly. Love this lines. Cheers dear Ink.
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Date: 4/8/2024 5:35:00 PM
You write with such impact, Ink. A powerful diction, so many beautiful lines-<3
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Date: 4/8/2024 10:04:00 AM
You say you love the moon but it’s the stars you gaze at, oooo scandalous!!! Love it !! she carries pain, whilst remaining faithfully as a fairy goddess; beacon of hope when you were in your island of ignorance, ooooo that line papiiii… damn it breathes soo much power!!! language of dimmed dreams in sentimental silence. Genius! pain prompted a voice, you’ll feel her bleeding soul,and her aching sight; love the heaviness!! trees with torn twigs,too afraid to translate heartbroken hymns, mmm gorgeous
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Date: 4/8/2024 5:43:00 AM
A splendid dialogue of emotions in your gifted vocabulary, my friend.--So, don’t question her wounded skin reflecting confined absence~ nor blame sizzling stars with her name sewn, in vibrant violet---She was never guilty of lethal love, nor were her emotions manipulative games---her tale was never meant to be told to the weak~ trees with torn twigs, too afraid to translate heartbroken hymns---a FAVE for the splendor of vocabulary, Ink.
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Date: 4/8/2024 5:26:00 AM
A deep and emotive theme for the contest.. The imagery in this poem is rich and vivid, painting a picture of the night sky, stars, and the moon. The moon and stars serve as powerful symbols throughout the poem, representing different facets of love, longing, and resilience. Its a captivating exploration of love, pain, and the resilience of the human spirit. It invites readers to reflect on their own experiences of longing and healing, while also celebrating the beauty and complexity of the natural world.
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Date: 4/8/2024 4:54:00 AM
True words right there
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Date: 4/8/2024 2:26:00 AM
- Woow, Ink ... the truth will always come out - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 4/8/2024 2:11:00 AM
Your poem, studded with magnificent metaphors, not to mention imagery, gave me the ephemeral pleasure of poetry. Great poetry and best for a win. Hugs.
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