Fragmented Verse

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It is an old dream, brown, crumbling at edges, best that I leave this old dream undisturbed - I am the dream, it whispers soft. I wrestle with the covers pushing it away, but the ghosts of the past still come drifting; they come like a silent crowd in the night, so many come to haunt me, maybe forever. Do other people have these too, these frequent nighttime ghost whispers? I am the dream, of your regrets. __________________________ May 27, 2018 Poetry/Verse/I am the Dream Copyright Protected, ID 18- 1026-473-01 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. My invention - Fragmented Verse 12 lines, 4 verses, includes indention on some lines Indented lines 26/28 8/8 26/28 Line 9 and 10 - a question ? Syllables- 12/10/4/4 12/10/10/12 8/8 4/4

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James Inman

Date: 6/3/2018 6:19:00 AM

I like the last two lines. I'm sure there are many who regret loosing you.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 5/31/2018 8:45:00 AM

Oh I know those dreams, and I like how you have presented them. Well said.

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 5/27/2018 11:57:00 PM

Nicely penned, Constance. "I am the dream, of your regrets." Great expression.

Daniel Turner

Date: 5/27/2018 4:59:00 PM

The older one gets, regrets seem to become a waste of time. One can not possibly relive a life already lived. But yes, we all have regrets. I love the form and the poem, Constance.

Constance La France
Date: 5/27/2018 8:52:00 PM

Daniel, I wish I could erase the past, but I guess that is silly because it is what it is. Glad you like the form, thinking it may be for my next contest

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 5/27/2018 3:32:00 PM

Yes, other people have those, too. To self-examine is to have regrets - then to forgive yourself and sleep sweetly.... Your poetry never disappoints.

Constance La France
Date: 5/27/2018 3:56:00 PM

Sun, thank you for visiting, some nights I sleep sweet, but others I sleep with my ghosts ~