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Four in haiku

butterflies flying I see them, beautiful want to go with them rainbow colored skies smell of lavender in air banana pudding on tongue pearls of gold sunlight sapphire blue dripping golden leaves falling trees are standing tall birds singing sweet music songs of memory filled past

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Date: 4/24/2017 6:03:00 PM
Maybe I am scanning too fast. Where is your beauty of poetry poem?
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Date: 8/25/2015 7:54:00 PM
I bet I saw this set of haiku before, but it's great to see them again. My favorite is second one. So SWEET with the banana pudding and all!!
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Date: 8/25/2015 7:53:00 PM
Hey, I came back here to discuss our horoscopes. You said OCt. 7, 1955. I am not November. Don't know why you thought that. I am SEpt 5, 1955!! So actually you share a lot of my numbers in numerology. Oct, tenth month is a "1" and that is my name number! 7 is my DESTINY number while for you it is birth day number. Five vibrates extra strongly in me because it is also my birth day number. If I add all your numbers, you are birth path 8 / Destiny 1 and I get along great with ONES!! awesome.
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Date: 7/29/2014 5:54:00 PM
Debbie... A nicely done Haiku.... LINDA
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Date: 7/8/2013 4:50:00 PM
Sounds like the place to be...now only if there was chocolate... :) great poem -Heather
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Date: 4/7/2013 11:32:00 PM
I'd like to go to that place too. Good one.
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Date: 3/12/2013 9:26:00 AM
Beautiful imagery
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/21/2013 2:01:00 AM
Thank you ;}
Date: 2/27/2013 2:00:00 PM
So very vibrant. I like!
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 2/27/2013 8:20:00 PM
Thank you Jeremy ;}
Date: 2/9/2013 3:35:00 PM
sites in your heaven.
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 2/16/2013 11:57:00 PM
Thanks
Date: 1/26/2013 9:28:00 PM
I like the one about butterflies the best. Thank you for your kind words. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 1/21/2013 9:16:00 PM
hi my sweet poetess Debbie... may i join in your feast of happiness...may i ? I do enjoyed so much each line of your lovely impressive write ...<3 <3 <3 luv and hugs :)
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Date: 1/14/2013 2:02:00 PM
I'm enjoying the wants you share among them butterflies that flutter around you. I also like the sweet taste in your second haiku. ans the 3rd haiku, made me think of my rake. LOL~ and for the 4th haiku. It made me :-( .thank you for the sweet comment~SKAT
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 1/14/2013 9:10:00 PM
Thank you for reading ;}
Date: 12/29/2012 10:43:00 PM
Hi Debbie, thank you so much for stopping by my write and leaving a comment. This write of yours is excellent, love the images they give. Hope you have a safe New Year. Rollo
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Date: 12/26/2012 4:28:00 AM
Debbie, I'm no authority on Haikus, I just struggle and pound my knuckles trying to determine if my poem is qualified as a haiku. I think this entry can be called a haiku..... and a damn good one at that!! Nice Job.... Love Ya, Jake
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Date: 11/25/2012 8:12:00 AM
Glad to see your beautiful haiku this morning. I loved doing mine for that contest. Now I am running out of ideas for any of the other contests! These have incredible imagery. And the banana on tongue is such a unique line!
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 11/26/2012 12:41:00 AM
Thank you Audrea ;} I love banana cream, or the banana nut muffins I make " a lot" ;} I've been trying to learn how to write real haiku's.
Date: 11/25/2012 4:40:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your descriptive work..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by..Yes, I watch the Red Cardinals out my kitchen window for if I open the door they fly away..Someday I am going out there and just sit and see if they come and eat and drink with me out there..Thanks for stopping by..When I go out on the porch and sit, I see birds from a slight distance..They come with me there unafraid..Your review was uplifting..Sara
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 11/25/2012 4:35:00 PM
Thank you Sara,, Love that song " Sara Smile by Hall and Oats ;},,,, I too watch birds out my window. I have a hummingbird feeder, one came in a few years back. I've been reading up on how to write a real haiku,, thank you for reading my words ;}
Date: 11/20/2012 9:35:00 AM
These are so vivid...I love them. You are a great writer! Thanks for commenting on "Suicide and the Butterfly Boy." That was very sweet of you! xxoo Holly Moore
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 11/20/2012 10:24:00 PM
Thank you Holly,,, I enjoy reading yours as well,,,, you have a blessed Thanksgiving ;}
Date: 11/19/2012 9:44:00 PM
This is beautiful! I looooove butterflies and banana pudding is my fav! :)
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 11/20/2012 2:55:00 AM
Thank you Anne,,,,, I will have to read more of yours ,,,, you have a blessed holiday ;}
Date: 11/13/2012 10:02:00 AM
Haiku - you too? Colorful, seasonal, very fine Haiku. Love, daver
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Date: 11/13/2012 4:29:00 AM
These haikus are beautiful. Much more pleasing than my "Horsefly" poem that you read. antway, thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. Have a nice day and stay warm, Jancarl
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Date: 11/12/2012 10:59:00 AM
Descriptive, each one painting a picture for the minds eye. Nicely done.
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 11/12/2012 12:28:00 PM
Thank you Anthony,,, I"m trying to "learn" how to write them ;}
Date: 11/12/2012 6:34:00 AM
Deb when I write for a contest, what I submit is colored by what I THINK the judge likes, how they themselves see the form, write the form..not all of what label haiku for a contest would I consider haiku [the breast one I would not consider haiku..it is haiku LIKE]
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 11/12/2012 12:32:00 PM
I wondered about that " breast" one being a real haiku,,,, yes do show me/ explain ;} thanks Debbie !
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 11/12/2012 6:35:00 AM
let me know if you want me to critique these? I will but I want to help not upset you HUGS!
Date: 11/12/2012 5:42:00 AM
Love the Haiku form, and do it with much justice... hugs Michael
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 11/12/2012 12:52:00 PM
Thank you Michael,,,, I too love the haiku form,,,so I'm trying to learn to write true form ;}
Date: 11/12/2012 2:41:00 AM
Lovely Haiku x 4 - Debbie, well done. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 11/12/2012 12:50:00 PM
Thank you Anne,,,, I'm trying to learn to write a true haiku ;}
Date: 11/12/2012 1:59:00 AM
Good written!! Hugs - Laila
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Debbie Duncan
Date: 11/12/2012 12:49:00 PM
Thank you Liala,,,, not sure if there're true haiku ;}
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