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Forsaken Flower

I’m lost in a field of forsaken flowers, counting crestfallen stars… and as the lavender moon ascends to rinse away cold kohl tears~ I call your name in soft cadence, pondering, will you ever hear me?

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Christina Bowring

Date: 2/24/2024 3:31:00 PM

Dear sweet Inky, this is such a truly beautiful and equally profound verse. Your imagery, as always, is breathtaking as the reader is transported to a forlorn field of forgotten flowers as the wandering soul is also forlorn and feeling lost and abandoned. You capture the anguish of longing so well and the reflectiveness of wondering if your voice, echoes of your heart, will be heard by the recipient for whom you call out to. A very touching read dear one. Loved it. Hugs to you xx

Michelle Smith

Date: 2/20/2024 2:56:00 PM

"...if all flowers wanted to be roses, nature would lose her springtime beauty, & the fields would no longer be decked out with little wild flowers. & so it is in the world of souls, Jesus’ garden. He willed to create great souls comparable to lilies & roses, but He has created smaller ones & these must be content to be daisies or violets destined to give joy to God’s glances when He looks down at His feet. Perfection consists in doing His will, in being what He wills us to be." ~St. Therese :-)

Paige Hind

Date: 2/20/2024 10:04:00 AM

Deep, full of longing-

Valsa George

Date: 2/20/2024 5:19:00 AM

Terse and touching! Emotive and outstanding! Simply excellent..! Into my FAVE

Ayesha Iqbal

Date: 2/19/2024 10:01:00 PM

Ah this is breathtakingly beautiful poetry dear Ink... I loved that alliteration "cold kohl tears" and those last lines are so achingly gorgeous!

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/19/2024 10:17:00 AM

Your poem, dear Ink, is incredibly evocative and metaphorical. It is a splendid piece of writing that conveys its message concisely. The gentle and haunting beauty of your poignant words deeply moves the heart and fills the soul, resonating with the profound emotions of loneliness, loss, and longing that you express.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/19/2024 8:14:00 AM

IE, you capture a very sad feeling, which I can remember as a young man in regards to feeling attraction that went one way. This could also relate to a tragic or other loss of life and wanting to say something when the opportunity is gone. Part of grief.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/19/2024 5:05:00 AM

Wonderfully emotive, metaphoric poem, Ink. Splendid write, succinctly delivered, my friend.

Maria Williams

Date: 2/18/2024 10:48:00 PM

You will count stars with a confident gaze in a field of forsaken flowers. As the lavender moon rises, calling your name with determination, you will be ready to face whatever life throws. You will never be a forsaken flower, dear Inky. Great poem, is it for a contest? ...Hugs

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 10:49:00 PM

Gosh your comment made me cry sight beautiful soul thank you for feeling me truly. Yes i entered it to bite size contest. Appreciate your support always

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/18/2024 10:45:00 PM

The lavender line with kohl tears is outstanding. Is this for any particular contest?

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 10:50:00 PM

Sweet andrea yes, bite size… thank you so much always for being supportive

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 2/18/2024 9:05:00 PM

Oooh ~ beautiful!

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 10:08:00 PM

Thank you so much dear seeker

Robert Schatz

Date: 2/18/2024 8:22:00 PM

Wistful and touching poem Ink Express. The feeling of loss lingers in the field. counting crestfallen stars...

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 10:11:00 PM

Thank you so much robert. Appreciate your feedback as always so thoughtful of you

Susan Ashley

Date: 2/18/2024 6:44:00 PM

Dear Empress, soulful, poetess, the soft haunting beauty of your poignant verse deeply touches the heart and saturates the soul to resonate with your lonely being's feelings of loss and longing for the one you call by "name in soft cadence". Your last line is especially affecting.. to be wondering and never knowing.. such exquisite tender expression! Warmest wishes my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 10:20:00 PM

Ah thank you so very much sweet soul i appreciate your kindness always truly, you really are such an encouraging and generous soul, sending you light always

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 2/18/2024 4:55:00 PM

Intriguing, riveting, mysterious --words that have come to mind while reading your poem. It is very beautiful, Ink.

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 10:30:00 PM

Thank you so much dear hilda, im grateful for your support always truly

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 2/18/2024 4:26:00 PM

dearest Ink--I thought I was with you as you journeyed through the field of forsaken flowers (great metaphor by the way). I felt the strong emotion of wanting the be heard...we all long for that in varying degrees at different times and stages of our life. It's a hollow and sad feeling filled with cold tears. Am faving this one....great to read one of your creations again. :-) hugs, Sara

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 10:34:00 PM

Thank you so much sweet sara for your kind and thoughtful words and also fave. I appreciate your support always truly.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/18/2024 3:24:00 PM

Dear Ink Empress, Your poem, captivates with its striking words and emotional depth. The metaphor of being lost in a field of forsaken flowers, amidst crestfallen stars and a lavender moon, evokes a sense of melancholy and longing. The gentle cadence of your words, infused with the softness of kohl tears, speaks volumes about the desires for connection and understanding. It’s a reflection of the human experience, reaching out into the vastness of the universe, questioning whether our calls will ever be heard. Your poetic voice is heard with a delicate beauty that touches the heart and stirs the soul. Through your words, you envelope emotion and introspection, inviting me the reader to journey alongside you through the landscape of longing and hope. Your voice is a beacon of light in the darkness, illuminating the beauty and complexity of the human spirit. - Blessings, Daniel

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 10:43:00 PM

Ah thank you so much dear daniel your. Comments are always much appreciated and so profound! You always are so mindful and thoughtful in ensuring poets feel heard and seen. For that im grateful really

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/18/2024 3:13:00 PM

oh beautiful flower how you deserve to be heard, amongst the brambles, a quiet flower thrives, thats you

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 10:43:00 PM

Oh beautiful rose i appreciate you so very much always

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/18/2024 10:58:00 AM

- Deep and sorrowful, dear Ink :( - hugs

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 10:46:00 PM

Thank you so much dear anne lise truly grateful

Silent One

Date: 2/18/2024 10:39:00 AM

We have all be lost in a field of forsaken flowers... some stay around the pungent stench, whilst others remove them and plant new seeds of colourful flowers, ready for spring.... There is a haunting touch to your poem, where you are calling someone and wondering if they will reply ... sometimes there is only silence.. Best of luck in the contest dear..

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 11:14:00 PM

Thank you for feeling my poem and for understanding the emotions within my lines. Grateful always for your poetic presence

Tom Woody

Date: 2/18/2024 10:35:00 AM

Exquisite beauty. Are you calling for your mom? Someone else no longer here? It's when we're at our lowest that we feel the need to reach out. Of course, this could also be a prayerful plea to the Creator. David etal made similar expressions in their Psalms. This little heartfelt gem is a new fave for Woody

Ink Empress
Date: 2/18/2024 11:19:00 PM

What a deep thoughtful comment and im grateful also for your fave. Thank you so very much for your visits and comments always