Forgiven

Falling like a silver star Driven by love like red car Slipping on the icy blue part For you screw up breaking heart Wondering should I go far Pondering never have been apart Outside I’m fine inside a scar Blowing my mind this love bizarre You try to fix it with a card Confetti kisses flowers in part Picnic time in summer at park My heart thunders my mind sharp Remember our first piece of art Playing our genes like a harp Birthing our dreams that did start With children green esteemed sweetheart With pros and cons on a cream chart I decide to choose not to throw darts To not hurt you like you hurt my heart Love is true for it we all starve Forgiven this day my love you are.

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Sotto Poet

Date: 1/15/2024 4:41:00 PM

Karen, Your poetry is deeply moving, expressing sorrow, agony, reflection, absolution, and love. Beautiful imagery, rhyme, and depth.

Karen Jones
Date: 1/15/2024 4:43:00 PM

I appreciate your comments Sotto Poet

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 1/15/2024 3:48:00 PM

Very lovely poem and smooth read! A favorite poem, have a wonderful time lovely Karen :-) Best wishes ~ AA

Karen Jones
Date: 1/15/2024 4:17:00 PM

So honored it is a favorite! Thanks

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/15/2024 9:26:00 AM

Yes being forgiven can transform us.

Karen Jones
Date: 1/15/2024 10:31:00 AM

I agree Richard. Thanks for commenting.

The Situation

Date: 1/14/2024 3:18:00 PM

Oh man, the muse took charge. this is a fav. I know how you feel after rereading this wonderfull piece. This makes it great to be forgiven.

Karen Jones
Date: 1/14/2024 5:20:00 PM

I’m honored it is a fav. Thank you!

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/13/2024 7:52:00 AM

Dear Karen, your poetic artistry delivers a soulful poetic gem rich with emotional facets that shine with sadness, pain, reverie, forgiveness and most of all love. Beautiful depth, rhymes and emotive imagery. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/11/2024 6:04:00 AM

Wonderful, romantic, poem--exuding love throughout Karen. So well done!

Karen Jones
Date: 1/11/2024 6:35:00 AM

Vijay thank you

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 1/11/2024 3:42:00 AM

wow truly powerful the heart that forgives is the heart that heals, I love this a fav for me, dear Karen, may your heart always feel the hope of a new resurrected love, one that never goes away nor goes astray, :)

Karen Jones
Date: 1/11/2024 4:51:00 AM

I’m honored that you fav it! Thanks

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/10/2024 1:17:00 AM

Marvellous poem. Not easy to use the same rhyme but you did well.

Karen Jones
Date: 1/10/2024 4:25:00 AM

Thanks Victor it’s my first attempt at it!

Jude Herrick

Date: 1/9/2024 8:04:00 PM

I could have chosen any of these wonderful stanzas... Remember our first piece of art Playing our genes like a harp Birthing our dreams that did start With children green esteemed sweetheart Awesome! Creative and charming !

Karen Jones
Date: 1/9/2024 8:12:00 PM

Thanks so much for your kind comments Jude!

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 1/9/2024 6:27:00 PM

This sweet poem has many thoughts. You're a good person to be forgiving.

Karen Jones
Date: 1/9/2024 8:11:00 PM

Aw thank u but I’m flawed too! God forgives as we should. Hugs Hilda.

Silent One

Date: 1/9/2024 11:45:00 AM

Hey Karen.. Your poem beautifully encapsulates the multifaceted nature of love, exploring its challenges and redemptive qualities. The vivid imagery, rhythmic structure, and emotional authenticity make it a captivating and relatable exploration of the human experience in matters of the heart...

Karen Jones
Date: 1/9/2024 12:17:00 PM

So happy you even read it. Thanks Silent One!

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 1/9/2024 7:32:00 AM

Lovely forgiveness. YES. God bless you with love, Gina

Karen Jones
Date: 1/9/2024 7:43:00 AM

Thanks for reading Regina and yes we are all forgiven and wiped clean by the blood of Jesus. The challenge is to forgive others we may want to condemn. God bless you as well!

Ink Empress

Date: 1/9/2024 7:14:00 AM

You did this so very well dear karen! Loving the cadence of this and the soulful touch of imagery and depth of the poem! Truly exquisite this is! Well delivered. You’ve nailed it!

Karen Jones
Date: 1/9/2024 7:31:00 AM

Thank you Ink Empress! It is my first mono rhyme ever!