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Forgiven

Falling like a silver star 
Driven by love like red car
Slipping on the icy blue part
For you screw up breaking heart

Wondering should I go far
Pondering never have been apart 
Outside I’m fine inside a scar
Blowing my mind this love bizarre 

You try to fix it with a card
Confetti kisses flowers in part
Picnic time in summer at park
My heart thunders my mind sharp

Remember our first piece of art
Playing our genes like a harp
Birthing our dreams that did start
With children green esteemed sweetheart 

With pros and cons on a cream chart
I decide to choose not to throw darts
To not hurt you like you hurt my heart
Love is true for it we all starve

Forgiven this day my love you are.

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Sotto Poet Date: 1/15/2024 4:41:00 PM Karen, Your poetry is deeply moving, expressing sorrow, agony, reflection, absolution, and love. Beautiful imagery, rhyme, and depth. Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/15/2024 4:43:00 PM I appreciate your comments Sotto Poet

Abdullah Alhemaidy Date: 1/15/2024 3:48:00 PM Very lovely poem and smooth read! A favorite poem, have a wonderful time lovely Karen :-) Best wishes ~ AA Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/15/2024 4:17:00 PM So honored it is a favorite! Thanks

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/15/2024 9:26:00 AM Yes being forgiven can transform us. Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/15/2024 10:31:00 AM I agree Richard. Thanks for commenting.

The Situation Date: 1/14/2024 3:18:00 PM Oh man, the muse took charge. this is a fav. I know how you feel after rereading this wonderfull piece. This makes it great to be forgiven. Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/14/2024 5:20:00 PM I’m honored it is a fav. Thank you!

Susan Ashley Date: 1/13/2024 7:52:00 AM Dear Karen, your poetic artistry delivers a soulful poetic gem rich with emotional facets that shine with sadness, pain, reverie, forgiveness and most of all love. Beautiful depth, rhymes and emotive imagery. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Login to Reply

Vijay Pandit Date: 1/11/2024 6:04:00 AM Wonderful, romantic, poem--exuding love throughout Karen. So well done! Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/11/2024 6:35:00 AM Vijay thank you

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 1/11/2024 3:42:00 AM wow truly powerful the heart that forgives is the heart that heals, I love this a fav for me, dear Karen, may your heart always feel the hope of a new resurrected love, one that never goes away nor goes astray, :) Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/11/2024 4:51:00 AM I’m honored that you fav it! Thanks

Victor Buhagiar Date: 1/10/2024 1:17:00 AM Marvellous poem. Not easy to use the same rhyme but you did well. Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/10/2024 4:25:00 AM Thanks Victor it’s my first attempt at it!

Jude Herrick Date: 1/9/2024 8:04:00 PM I could have chosen any of these wonderful stanzas... Remember our first piece of art Playing our genes like a harp Birthing our dreams that did start With children green esteemed sweetheart Awesome! Creative and charming ! Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/9/2024 8:12:00 PM Thanks so much for your kind comments Jude!

Hilda Greenhough Date: 1/9/2024 6:27:00 PM This sweet poem has many thoughts. You're a good person to be forgiving. Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/9/2024 8:11:00 PM Aw thank u but I’m flawed too! God forgives as we should. Hugs Hilda.

Silent One Date: 1/9/2024 11:45:00 AM Hey Karen.. Your poem beautifully encapsulates the multifaceted nature of love, exploring its challenges and redemptive qualities. The vivid imagery, rhythmic structure, and emotional authenticity make it a captivating and relatable exploration of the human experience in matters of the heart... Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/9/2024 12:17:00 PM So happy you even read it. Thanks Silent One!

Regina Mcintosh Date: 1/9/2024 7:32:00 AM Lovely forgiveness. YES. God bless you with love, Gina Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/9/2024 7:43:00 AM Thanks for reading Regina and yes we are all forgiven and wiped clean by the blood of Jesus. The challenge is to forgive others we may want to condemn. God bless you as well!

Ink Empress Date: 1/9/2024 7:14:00 AM You did this so very well dear karen! Loving the cadence of this and the soulful touch of imagery and depth of the poem! Truly exquisite this is! Well delivered. You’ve nailed it! Login to Reply Karen Jones Date: 1/9/2024 7:31:00 AM Thank you Ink Empress! It is my first mono rhyme ever!