Forever, Not Us

The first time that I saw you,
the angel of my dreams.
I thought we might be compatible,
but nothing is what it seems.
For going on two years now,
we have been joined at the hip.
Your jealousy is getting old,
it seems everything I do you flip.
I think we need some time apart,
no longer can I stay.
I have loved you always,
and will even after today.
Lord knows that I have tried,
tried to speak these words to you.
Look into your eyes like a man,
to say I am sorry but we're through.
So, I've composed this poem,
a craft that I do best.
This may be the last you see of me,
I think our time has reached it's crest.


Jared Pickett
11/29/2006
Asavvy1
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Torbenson Avatar
February 22, 2010 at 7:41 AM
very nice break up poem, i like how it was so soft (in my eyes) but you made the point clear good writtin keep it up
Pennywell Avatar
February 17, 2010 at 12:33 PM
hey thanks for the comment its greatly appreciate
Strand Avatar
January 27, 2010 at 8:04 AM
Hi JP thanks for your welcome comments today rrgds Brian
Brown Avatar
January 22, 2010 at 4:48 AM
Nice breakup poem, just fantastic!
Smith-Johnsen Avatar
January 13, 2010 at 10:33 AM
Well, Jared. This is about the most poetic "Dear Jane" letter I have ever read. Did you deliver? Lives and love can be destroyed by jealousy. I hope all goes well. Good luck. Dane Ann
Sweetheart Avatar
January 12, 2010 at 7:48 PM
Written with luv and devotion but with the knowledge that its over and had it time in your life... something better is coming your way... love is kind .. not filled with jealous rages... if u don't have TRUST in any relationship u have NOTHING.. keep that in mind Sweetie.. speaking from experience.. u are a great guy... some sweet girl with pizzazz will come your way someday soon and this will be behind u.... keep smiling... "Sweetheart"
Moreno Avatar
January 11, 2010 at 9:17 PM
Profound and compelling, the rhyme was perfect...Raul
Kendrick Avatar
January 11, 2010 at 7:32 AM
The jealous emotion is from insecurity within. You could help her overcome her insecurities. Sara
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