Forest's Path

Into slithered path of forest green

my imprints mark a search for peace,
as bushes hide like shades unseen

where vines’ fragrance holds its release.

Drained, I see life through a flower 

struggling to curl among meshed weeds,
these limbs falling on ash of hours

like old willows bound to concede.

Enduring climbs upon a hilltop

the blaze of night in gold appears;
so far the wrens, too near I drop

till leaf of hope breaks, as morn nears.


Dusk now closes its drowsy eyes,

as forest still grants what is mine
breathless from new mist, I arise.

while soles run here in thoughts divine




Mau 2018 Standard Contest of Brian Strand
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Gentry Avatar
April 16, 2018 at 11:07 PM
Congratulations!
Sinha-Roy Avatar
April 16, 2018 at 4:44 AM
Congratulations, Nette on your first position win.
Gauthier Avatar
April 15, 2018 at 10:00 PM
Lovely, nette. Congrats on your gold medal finish.
Haight Avatar
April 15, 2018 at 5:35 PM
Beautiful imagery, Nette. Congratulations on your podium win. Hugs, Sandra
Cunningham Avatar
April 15, 2018 at 5:18 PM
Great imagery Nette and congratulations
Rodrigues Avatar
April 15, 2018 at 5:09 PM
Love the opening line and lovely images! Congrats!
Pandit Avatar
April 15, 2018 at 3:27 PM
Congrats nette on you top win, lovely poem.
Canerdy Avatar
April 15, 2018 at 3:02 PM
So lovely, Nette. CONGRATS on your well-deserved win. Janice
Torres Avatar
July 16, 2014 at 10:13 AM
this is so divine!!! wonderfully expressed lines... Fabulous creatrion from a depth and brilliant mind... what else can I say?... congratulations, my dear!! ^_^ :)
Nance Avatar
July 13, 2014 at 11:56 AM
Woohhooo Grats Nette, another masterpiece :)
A   Avatar
July 12, 2014 at 8:10 AM
Nice win Nette,,...pd
A. Sharma Avatar
July 12, 2014 at 4:19 AM
Nette a beautiful description of the path wid lovely metaphors ! Congrats on huge win!
Johnson Avatar
July 11, 2014 at 8:12 PM
A dreamy dance among the wee wee hours. Where fantasy reigns with its mystic showers. Congrats and thanks for a wonderful sleep. Peace. :)
Chutani Avatar
July 11, 2014 at 6:33 PM
nette, a minute, beautiful description of the path for search of your peace. goes as my fav. congrats for top win. Mohan
Mohn Avatar
July 11, 2014 at 2:46 PM
Lovely Nette...a dream like flow to this beauty
Jerden Avatar
July 11, 2014 at 2:38 PM
Well done, Nette. I liked the unseen bushes compared to ghosts metaphor in particular. Cheers, Roy
Gibson Avatar
July 11, 2014 at 12:57 PM
Nette, each line so beautiful. Congratulations.
Andresen Avatar
July 11, 2014 at 12:56 PM
- Congratulations on your winning poem, Nette !!!!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
July 11, 2014 at 12:03 PM
Galing Netter..:) love your second stanza best!! :) MABUHAY ang ka Nette..:) hugs will see you soon..:)
Smith Avatar
July 11, 2014 at 10:31 AM
Congrats on a great win, Nette my friend!!. Love the images!!.. Hugs.. Arlene
Guzzi Avatar
July 11, 2014 at 10:29 AM
Just magic nette! Congrad's on your Win Light & Love
Sirak Avatar
July 7, 2014 at 8:17 AM
You can always immerse yourself in nature and speak as if you are a part of it. What a wonderful picture you have painted with this poem.
Callus Avatar
July 6, 2014 at 7:44 AM
This is another good take on this picture poem, Nette. Your path could hopefully lead to peace, especially that of mind. gl in contest. // paul
Callus Avatar
July 11, 2014 at 12:52 PM
back for another read ... and with congratulations!
George   Avatar
June 25, 2014 at 3:24 PM
Stunningly beautifu, Nettel. Sure to take top spot. Lainie
Liwayway Avatar
June 24, 2014 at 8:38 AM
a very lovely picture about forest.... super-like it friend Nette...thanks for sharing. it's been month for being away on PS coz' I'm so busy and lazy ;) thanks for your nice comment on my poem. Have a blessed day always :) ;)
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