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Forbidden Paradise

Beyond vermillion skies, over ancestral seas past ripples of oceans in forgotten time lies a forbidden island where young lovers dream a secret, impassioned paradise. A pellucid moon glows in the twilight of night as wild, luscious jungles retreat in the dusk where mockingbirds echo with loud, urgent cries and pungent scents infuse with exotic musk. ‘Neath frangipani canopies young lovers go with a menagerie of desires that only they know. Written on 1/7/2018

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Date: 1/12/2018 9:46:00 AM
A wonderful use of the ten words Laura, with a rhyme also, I'm totally impressed!
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Date: 1/12/2018 1:18:00 AM
You've described my paradise quite nicely Laura.
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Date: 1/11/2018 8:06:00 PM
Such a stirring and sensuous write Laura. Congratulations on your wonderful placement with your enchanting poem. ~Susan
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Laura Leiser
Date: 1/13/2018 12:36:00 PM
Thank you, Susan :)
Date: 1/11/2018 7:30:00 PM
Lovely Laura! Congratulations!! ~Judy
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Laura Leiser
Date: 1/13/2018 12:35:00 PM
Thank you, Judith :)
Date: 1/11/2018 6:07:00 PM
Awesome and beautiful. Congrats on your well deserved win, Laura.
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Date: 1/11/2018 4:23:00 PM
Hi Laura, Congratulations on your placement in the contest:-) Alexis
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Date: 1/11/2018 3:57:00 PM
Returning with congrats on your wonderful win, Laura.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 1/11/2018 5:34:00 PM
Thank you, Vijay :)
Date: 1/11/2018 2:52:00 PM
Back. With Congrats, Laura: Love your Paradise place. SuZ
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Laura Leiser
Date: 1/11/2018 5:34:00 PM
Thank you, Suzanne :)
Date: 1/11/2018 2:41:00 PM
Lovely lines and sensual lines in this great poem.. You used the ten words very well Laura... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Laura Leiser
Date: 1/11/2018 5:25:00 PM
Thank you, Silent! It was much simpler than your example, but I'm glad you liked it :)
Date: 1/10/2018 1:26:00 PM
This is wonderful,Laura: Very natural use of the words, The story flows so easily. SuZ
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Date: 1/9/2018 11:27:00 AM
Wow Laura, this is done so well! I hope to see this high on the winner's list. : )
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Date: 1/9/2018 6:41:00 AM
Lovely theme and great poem Laura--you wrapped the ten words around your verses nicely..best for a win.
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Date: 1/8/2018 4:52:00 AM
Nice, I like it...a smooth flow
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