Laura Leiser Poet Rhyme

Forbidden Paradise

Beyond vermillion skies, over ancestral seas
past ripples of oceans in forgotten time
lies a forbidden island where young lovers dream
a secret, impassioned paradise. 

A pellucid moon glows in the twilight of night
as wild, luscious jungles retreat in the dusk
where mockingbirds echo with loud, urgent cries
and pungent scents infuse with exotic musk.

‘Neath frangipani canopies young lovers go
with a menagerie of desires that only they know. 




Written on 1/7/2018

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John Hamilton January 12, 2018 at 9:46 AM A wonderful use of the ten words Laura, with a rhyme also, I'm totally impressed!

James Inman January 12, 2018 at 1:18 AM You've described my paradise quite nicely Laura.

Susan Ashley January 11, 2018 at 8:06 PM Such a stirring and sensuous write Laura. Congratulations on your wonderful placement with your enchanting poem. ~Susan Laura Leiser January 13, 2018 at 12:36 PM Thank you, Susan :)

Judith S January 11, 2018 at 7:30 PM Lovely Laura! Congratulations!! ~Judy Laura Leiser January 13, 2018 at 12:35 PM Thank you, Judith :)

Line Gauthier January 11, 2018 at 6:07 PM Awesome and beautiful. Congrats on your well deserved win, Laura.

Alexis Y. January 11, 2018 at 4:23 PM Hi Laura, Congratulations on your placement in the contest:-) Alexis

Vijay Pandit January 11, 2018 at 3:57 PM Returning with congrats on your wonderful win, Laura. Laura Leiser January 11, 2018 at 5:34 PM Thank you, Vijay :)

Suzanne Delaney January 11, 2018 at 2:52 PM Back. With Congrats, Laura: Love your Paradise place. SuZ Laura Leiser January 11, 2018 at 5:34 PM Thank you, Suzanne :)

Silent One January 11, 2018 at 2:41 PM Lovely lines and sensual lines in this great poem.. You used the ten words very well Laura... Congratulations on your placement in the contest.. Laura Leiser January 11, 2018 at 5:25 PM Thank you, Silent! It was much simpler than your example, but I'm glad you liked it :)

Suzanne Delaney January 10, 2018 at 1:26 PM This is wonderful,Laura: Very natural use of the words, The story flows so easily. SuZ

Connie Marcum Wong January 9, 2018 at 11:27 AM Wow Laura, this is done so well! I hope to see this high on the winner's list. : )

Vijay Pandit January 9, 2018 at 6:41 AM Lovely theme and great poem Laura--you wrapped the ten words around your verses nicely..best for a win.

Arturo Michael January 8, 2018 at 4:52 AM Nice, I like it...a smooth flow