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For Him

Poem to be read with Picture Number 2 (boy on boat)

              For Him

In the midst of a simpler time
A boy and his boat set a-sail.
Anchored in dark, murky waters
Fishing gear, picnic lunch, and a pail

As he baited the hook, his zest grew
Underwater, the line disappeared.
Waiting patiently, eager with hope
The boy stared in case anything neared.

From the shore, mud-smeared friends queried why
The boy chose to spend this day alone.
Most times, the lad fished with his daddy
They’d watched him learn how as he’d grown.

But as dawn woke the weary that day
The boy had been struck with the news
While he slumbered, his daddy’s soul passed
Full of shock, he had no time to lose.

So, transfixed to the surface, he stared
For his father, his hero, he prayed
A ripple...a tug...the boy smiled…
Through his tears, he showed Dad who he made! 

Won First Place!!!
Written on November 11, 2021
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Gondolf Avatar
December 18, 2021 at 12:47 PM
This reminds me of the fishing trips with my father when I was a kid, and I too now fish alone. This has touched my heart, Meghan, nicely done. John
Hutchings Avatar
December 19, 2021 at 11:54 PM
John, thank you for your kind remarks. I'm glad you were able to make a connection with my poem, albeit a bittersweet one. I can only imagine how proud your dad is of the man you are today. Thank you for touching my heart, too. God Bless!
Allison Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 3:38 PM
such a touching piece, many congrats on your win Meghan:-) hugs Jan x
Hutchings Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 4:47 AM
Thank you, Jan! I truly appreciate your kind words!!
Dietrich Avatar
November 15, 2021 at 1:53 PM
wow, this is quite a story So touching. Congrats you did the theme so well.
Hutchings Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 4:49 AM
Thank you very much, Andrea! It means a lot to hear positive comments on my work! I'm very hard on myself, and I never did capture the last line the way I wanted, but I'm glad the story still came through!
Calasibetta Avatar
November 15, 2021 at 8:20 AM
Meghan, What an emotionally moving piece-beautiful, sad and deep. Congratulations on your win! Blessings, Paulette
Hutchings Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 4:53 AM
Thank you so much, Paulette! Dealing with all that I am at the time, this win brought great joy to me, like a very welcome rainbow through my ongoing storm. Your words are, as well, so thank you, again!
La France Avatar
November 15, 2021 at 7:43 AM
Meghan, your poem is truly beautiful and so emotional, I love it and congratulations on your win ~ friendship and poetry _Constance
Hutchings Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 4:55 AM
Constance, I greatly appreciate your kind and generous words! Thank you for making me feel as though my poem did evoke emotion! Love and blessings!
May Avatar
November 15, 2021 at 5:06 AM
Beautiful write with emotions running deep, Congrats on your win Meghan
Hutchings Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 4:57 AM
Thank you very much, Joseph! It's pretty easy for me to write emotional poetry right now because I feel quite filled to the rim with emotion, I also know and pray that "this, too, shall pass". You kind words lighten my load!
Daniel Avatar
November 15, 2021 at 12:27 AM
This is a heart-warming write that tugs at the hearts of the readers, excellently penned, Meghan, congratulations:)
Hutchings Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 5:10 AM
Thank you for saying that, Jo. My goal when writing and teaching writing is to always evoke emotion from the reader. That's what I feel effective authors do. I appreciate you making me feel as though I did that here!
Watt Avatar
November 15, 2021 at 12:05 AM
Meghan, this was so sensitively written and really pulled at the heartstrings. I'm sure you are enjoying every minute you can with your Dad and I know he's so proud of you and blessed to have a daughter like you. Congrats on your win ~ John
Hutchings Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 5:15 AM
John, your beautifully written congratulatory response made me cry!! Thank you so much for taking the time to write such a personal note! That was so thoughtful and considerate of you. You are definitely right about one thing; I don't take a second for granted with loved ones anymore! Love, blessings, and Happy Thanksgiving!
Buhagiar Avatar
November 14, 2021 at 10:22 PM
Great win. The accent on emotions is very well displayed. Well done.
Hutchings Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 5:17 AM
Thank you, Victor! I was hoping to "tug" (no pun intended) on a few heartstrings! As I've mentioned before, I believe effective authors should evoke some type of emotion in the reader. Thank you for your kind words!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
November 14, 2021 at 8:43 PM
Truly a wondrous rendering and well-said message, Meghan, your dad is in our prayers as are you and your loved ones, blessings always, Aloha!
Hutchings Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 5:22 AM
William, thank you, from the bottom of my heart, for your beautiful words and prayers. You, too, have moistened my eyes with tears through your reminder of the beauty and goodness in humankind. I needed that! Love and blessings!
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November 14, 2021 at 8:01 PM
Megham I applaud you, wonderful doesn’t do this poem justice, perhaps FANTASTIC does. Love it, congratulations on your win in Eves’s contest… Belle (Have just read what’s you’ve said about your dad and will include you both in my prayers.)
Hutchings Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 5:25 AM
Thank you so very much, Belle! Your kind and comforting words and prayers will help make this Thanksgiving special! I truly appreciate the beauty in your heart! (By the way, I love your name!) Love and blessings!
Roper Avatar
November 14, 2021 at 9:35 AM
Congratulations on your win, Meghan. Hugs Eve
Roper Avatar
November 14, 2021 at 7:29 PM
My prayers are with you and your dad..
Hutchings Avatar
November 14, 2021 at 6:18 PM
Thank you so very much! You truly made my week with this win! As my own daddy may not have much time left, I still live for the moments when he tells me how proud I make him!
M  Avatar
November 11, 2021 at 7:07 PM
Meghan that is very beautiful and heart touching indeed. Love it. Debx
Hutchings Avatar
November 14, 2021 at 6:20 PM
Thank you, Deb! I truly appreciate your kind words! It means a lot that you took the time to read and respond to my work! God bless! -Meghan
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