Footnote For Elaine

The music played between the bambo walls
My heart was dancing outside the ken
Of adult passion and woman ways, 
Your body calls me back again ... I followed you
And all that of among the pile of coveting eyes
Was the conquest attributed to my plight
Dancing while my footsteps followed you
The rhythm changed your body pressed
Against the hunger of my loins
The fluid rose ... your breast caressed
The hesitance before my flight
And all through the remaing years of life
Your messages came with autmn flame
Leaves fluttering in the gulf between us
And the music like an eternal chorus
Of sea waves breaking on the heart
Opportunity lost in the sundering of the heart.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Cantu Avatar
May 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This poem smells like night flowers, so delicate and rythmic; thanks for the experience!!
Goff Avatar
May 8, 2009 at 7:37 PM
L'nass the last two lines are heavenly...my-oh-my!!!! full-beauty-on! this poem is!! Jim
Mac Donald Avatar
May 8, 2009 at 2:59 PM
Beautifully composed and generated piece, L'nass. The intense music of passion, the resounding peals of love, then a wistful whisper of lonliness. An amazing write, L'nass!! Wonderful imagery manifesting itself into a visual and heart-sung rhapsody! Thank you for your comments..those little bits were much akin to mind-dribbles.:) Wishing you and yours the best..God bless!! Mikki
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May 8, 2009 at 2:49 PM
Incredible passion and imagery! Such beautiful words '' "Your message came with autumn flame Leaves fluttering in the gulf between us." You surely have a poet's soul! Love, Carolyn
Jordan Avatar
May 7, 2009 at 8:52 PM
L'nass my dear friend what a wonderfully written piece - I am very humbled by your comments today - You will probably never know how much they meant - You are a very special person I noticed where you went back and apologized for a comment to another lady poet and that my friend is a true measure of class - What a wonderful addition you are to this site - I'll be having more time on my hands and I hope to get to know you and your writing better - God Bless, MJ
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May 7, 2009 at 4:14 PM
dancing while my footsteps followed you--one lucky lady with a passionate lover,poet,master of all by her side,thats you my friend shango,all you---bravo,you impress me how you can write about anything--bravo-charma
Hayton Avatar
May 7, 2009 at 12:47 PM
I love this L'nass, it is sensual and so beautiful and passionate, what a wonderful wonderful write, thankyou for your comments on my poems.. love Jo xx
Strand Avatar
May 7, 2009 at 8:01 AM
Passionate writing L'nass full of pace.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments.
Richards Avatar
May 7, 2009 at 7:50 AM
The beauty of your lovely poetry gets better and better...the feeling, passion and depth cannot be sung any more beautiful than your words. Wow! ~ Amazing once more! ~love, Carrie
Yeager Avatar
May 7, 2009 at 7:02 AM
wow =0 this is just wow such passion & Rythem and the flow of words awsome poem keep wrighting dude ~~^^Joanie^^~~
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May 7, 2009 at 6:32 AM
Intriguing title my friend! I love the assonance of '...breast caressed the hesitance' and the rest of your phrasing is sublime! BRAVO L'nass!! Best wishes, Keith (PS thanks for your generosity this morning!)
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