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Fondant Gates

The distance between us means nothing~ l've f a l l e n in love with you, despite the moon sleeping in your eyes, I d r i f t towards you like a galaxy of stars. Craving your ivory fingers to unfurl my ebony crest, flying me to thrilling northern lights, as I grasp your fluttering wings onto my heaving chest, enabling you to u n r a v e l and devour me, beneath artistically crumpled sheets, sprinkling sweetness across mystifying rivers~ of toffee lakes that are ready to burst, as you sensationally dive into these restricted fondant gates, to passionately feed beyond the luscious linen, finding your way around enraptured embodiment. An enigmatic enchantress you've so effortlessly tamed, conquering my walls whilst within a timid pupa, confined inside the vulnerabilities of a voiceless cocoon, but waiting for your mystical vapors, to unleash spring blooms in our souls, engraving "forever" on rose tinted glasses, for summer steam has commenced calm seas. But these venereal spirits can r u n wild, a vacant space that shall leave our eager ink to create reckless nights, feeling your claws ravishing their way onto my poetic spheres deeper and faster, letting your hands explore as my plesiosaurs guide, while you set my canvas on fire with your alluring quill, and you grip onto my realms like a momentous love ritual. A scavenger hunting for hidden passages, full of t r e a s u r e and p l e a s u r e sinfully scribbling about how tomorrow shall be.

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Date: 3/11/2024 7:13:00 PM
IE, hmmm, seems like this is pretty erotic. A pleasure to read and think about how you are enjoying the experience. All fun really....it is part of life and we are all so lucky that the lovemaking experience is a joy to experience. Your description is very inspiring and all defined in poetic terms. Three cheers...hooray!!! If there are people who fee the topic is "dirty", we just say what happened to them to ruin all this.
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Date: 3/11/2024 4:50:00 PM
Gorgeous writing, Ink. Like always, your words reach through the page. A pleasure to read-
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Date: 3/11/2024 12:11:00 PM
Dear Empress, North Star poetess, you are ever the enchantress as your imagery pours a spellbinding potion unto the poetic page to enamor and intoxicate my heart's imagination. The longing, the lust, deep, rich, potent emotions expressed so beautifully and creatively. "fondant gates" so evocative, passionate, empowering, feminine! A sumptuous piece! Your artistry outshines the summer sun! Congratulations for your win in Charlotte's contest. Warmest wishes my soulful friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 3/11/2024 9:36:00 AM
inky, there is so much i like about this, not least of all the lengthening of the lines, and the very strong opening lines..just a couple of things pushed it outside of the top three - the phrasing becoming a tad overblown in places (claws ravishing, etc) and the use of 'quill', it's a word that's very overused by poets and somewhat outdated..i hope this is construed as constructive rather than critical..it's a passionate poem and i enjoyed it immensely..congrats on your win in my contest!
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/11/2024 10:05:00 AM
Lol and i changed toffee loins to lakes ugh i changed alot .. :O ugh but in traumatized by insta censorship lol
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 3/11/2024 10:01:00 AM
use the tongue and not the quill! lol
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/11/2024 9:44:00 AM
Oh my i cant even believe i got placed in your contest dear charlotte, i was nervous about posting this here as this theme is not very appreciated here: about the quill line, i got a bit of cold feet and changed “ tongue to quill “ last minute adjustment when posting to not seem too much: thank you so much yes i usually use long lines for some judges like silent one, craig and now you: i appreciate your kind and detailed feedback truly. Sending you light always
Date: 3/10/2024 5:50:00 PM
I like the physical construction of your divinely written poem...so captivating with its passion and desire. Loved these words: while you set my canvas on fire with your alluring quill, and you grip onto my realms like a momentous love ritual.A bit breathless after reading your words. Have a splendid evening, Sara
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/11/2024 9:55:00 AM
Thank you so much sweet sara for your kindness and for your generous feedback im grateful for your support and for feeling the depth of emotions conveyed here, sending you light always
Date: 3/10/2024 6:53:00 AM
Scripted in powerful diction, your poem sets passion on fire devouring, unravelling--enchanting verses of love and desire, my friend. --while you set my canvas on fire with your alluring quill, and you grip onto my realms---full of t r e a s u r e and p l e a s u r e sinfully scribbling about how tomorrow shall be--WOW! FAVE!!
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/11/2024 9:55:00 AM
Thank you so very much for your fave and for your kind feedback dear vijay. Im always grateful for your poetic support
Date: 3/10/2024 5:12:00 AM
This is a voluptuous journey into love where desire and fulfillment lie deeper in hidden recesses and where love transforms hearts. Like a galaxy of stars, you are driven to his eyes where the moon sleeps "waiting for the mystical vapors, to unleash spring blooms in the souls." Some of the lines are so sensuous-----"feeling your claws ravishing their way onto my poetic spheres deeper and faster, letting your hands explore as my plesiosaurs guide, while you set my canvas on fire with your alluring quill, and you grip onto my realms like a momentous love ritual." - Like a Mason building an edifice, each word is placed so artistically that we stand wide-mouthed before your excellent work of art. This is a mellifluous song of love, dear Empress and into my FAVE.
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/11/2024 9:56:00 AM
Dear sweet valsa, you always leave me in awe of how sweet and sincere you are with your feedback and appreciating my words really. Im so very grateful for the fave and also for your kindness. Your comments lift me up and makes me feel good enough
Date: 3/10/2024 4:11:00 AM
Oh a slightly sensual piece, which I think Charlotte will like.. Its a captivating exploration of love and desire, woven with intricate imagery and passionate longing. The use of vivid metaphors and sensual language creates a rich analogy of emotions and sensations that draw the reader into your intimate world. As the poem progresses, it becomes increasingly sensual and intense, with imagery of "ravishing claws" and "sinful scribbling" conveying the raw intensity of desire and the exhilaration of exploration. The closing lines, with their reference to "hidden passages" and "momentous love ritual," suggest a sense of adventure and discovery in the journey of love.
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/11/2024 9:58:00 AM
Ah silent one what a profound and detailed comment this is, i am truly grateful always for your poetic presence and for encouraging me to keep writing and for inspiring me, thank you so much for your kindness and thoughtfulness. Your poetic support is much appreciated
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Silent One
Date: 3/10/2024 4:12:00 AM
Your poem is a testament to the transformative power of love, as well as the exhilarating and sometimes tumultuous journey of surrendering oneself to its depths. Its evocative imagery and passionate language invite readers to immerse themselves in the intoxicating whirlwind of emotion and desire. It could get a few a bit hot under the collar..
Date: 3/9/2024 10:02:00 PM
Simple and nicely said . I love it .
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/9/2024 11:05:00 PM
Might delete later lol
Date: 3/9/2024 9:56:00 PM
Ahhh..this is such a divinely beautiful piece. Each time I read your brilliance, I am so enthralled by your diversity! Such a wondrous line of a love so true — “the distance between us is nothing compared to how I’ve fallen in love with you, despite the moon sleeping in your eyes, I drift towards you like galaxy of stars” and “sprinkling sweetness across the mystifying rivers~of toffee lakes that are ready to burst as you sensationally dive into these restricted fondant gates” — so mesmerically
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Fading Star Silence
Date: 3/10/2024 12:47:00 AM
That’s what I should be saying about you! I appreciate you so much always! And I know you will lol!!
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/9/2024 11:06:00 PM
You make everything i write sound beautiful seriously beautiful soul sis! You are too kind and beautiful so u see beauty in everythn. I appreciate u so much. But not sure if ill keep this for long haha . As soon as i get an na i will delete this lolol
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Fading Star Silence
Date: 3/9/2024 10:13:00 PM
“To unleash spring blooms in our souls, engraving “forever” on rose tinted glasses, for summer steams has commenced calm seas.” — ahh..your ethereal words truly melts the heart and touches souls! You are one I see as a true poetic soul, my beautiful soul sis! I’m so entranced in the beauty of your ending verse! Feeling the depth of love that one feels, in this exquisite artistry! I’m truly starstruck!
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Fading Star Silence
Date: 3/9/2024 10:06:00 PM
Flavored in passionate fervor! I can see the colors swirling in this beautiful palette that paints these words you weave. “An enigmatic enchantress you’ve so effortlessly tamed, conquering my walls whilst within a timid pupa, confined inside the vulnerabilities of a voiceless cocoon” — so beautifully metamorphosed! Such depth and exquisite grace in this line. Seeing how love transforms a soul.
Date: 3/9/2024 9:53:00 PM
Ayeyayayayaeeeeee papi…this piece !!! So soo buenooooooo !! Craving your ivory fingers to unfurl my ebony crest, flying me to thrilling northern lights, you sensationally dive into these restricted fondant gates,to passionately feed beyond the luscious linen, ooo grrrrl.. where ma water at!! But these venereal spirits can r u n wild,a vacant space that shall leave our eager ink to create reckless nights,ooo u promise??sinfully scribbling about how tomorrow shall be.wat tomorrow..the day is not over yet
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/9/2024 11:06:00 PM
Papi did u get water
Date: 3/9/2024 9:44:00 PM
This is a sensuous, elegantly written poem, filled with beautiful imagery, and it's also a fave! Blessings. :)
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/9/2024 11:06:00 PM
Thank u for the fave and kind comment im grateful

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