Folded

Night folded its temporary home Each segment removed brought Light through cracks, windows Doors until my eyes caught The light of day, saying get up Time to rise begin chores The bed is warm and the room cold Don't want feet to touch floor Sunlight's penetration awakes Even the cold, it now knows Time is short, soon to be warmed up 'Til night its tent unstows

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Robin Davis

Date: 6/25/2014 11:11:00 PM

Sara Such a charming and creative write. Its nice how you progressed from nighttime to daytime and warm to cold. Thank you for the great comment on my Nightmares poem.

Skat A

Date: 1/6/2013 10:49:00 AM

Love the verse Sars~ LUV~ SKAT

Jack Horne

Date: 1/5/2013 11:36:00 AM

love this clever write, my friend - I was nodding in sympathy with the middle stanza, lol (I hate getting up early in the mornings)

Russell Sivey

Date: 1/5/2013 9:17:00 AM

I just love the way you brought the progression from night to day, cold to warmth, darkness to light! This is a fantastic and delightful write my friend! I truly enjoyed reading this fabulous and tremendous poem this morning! What an enlightening piece...the last word of your poem is awesome, "unstows", perfect word, I love it! Great Work!!