Russell Sivey Poet Pantoum

Fog Over Water

A smoky feel wafts across the water
As the fog rolls thick over sloshy feel
Ripples are there and surely all over
As drops from the fog enter lake’s appeal

As the fog rolls thick over sloshy feel
Breathing in the soupy air that’s about
As drops from the fog enter lake’s appeal
Drafts of the fog fly lower and more stout

Breathing in the soupy air that’s about
There’s a tender feel with this airy heart
Drafts of the fog fly lower and more stout
The fog is more than a ground cloud depart

There’s a tender feel with this airy heart
Swirling about the wind moves the white cloud
The fog is more than a ground cloud depart
Life extends beyond the bounds that’s allowed

Swirling about the wind moves the white cloud
Leaving wavelets on the water below
Life extends beyond the bounds that’s allowed
Water acts as a screen blocking the glow

Leaving wavelets on the water below
Ripples are there and surely all over
Water acts as a screen blocking the glow
A smoky feel wafts across the water

Russell Sivey

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Shadow Hamilton March 8, 2014 at 6:39 AM A write Russel worthy of Odin the god of poetry himself. It transcends the every day and adds magic, fantastic pen Hugs PS I have rewritten the final part of Journey through Time

Connie Gildersleeve March 6, 2014 at 2:48 PM You've captured the fog brilliantly in this Pantoum Russell. Enjoyed reading this today - Connie

Andrea Dietrich March 5, 2014 at 5:31 PM tenderness in the fog. I liked that interesting way of describing it Russell. you sure have done a lot of pantoum poems by now!!

Charmaine Chircop March 5, 2014 at 11:32 AM Life extends beyond boundaries till it reaches the glow behind the fog.A beautiful poem wafting to my heart as I read

Sara Kendrick March 5, 2014 at 5:56 AM Enjoyed reading your work this morning..Pantoums are no so easy to write..You have done good connecting with the already written lines..Thanks for the visits to my pages..Sara

Chuck Melugin March 5, 2014 at 5:26 AM Russell, The fog is captured in this poetic mind's eye, transcending inspiration's boundaries. My best, chuck

Nette Onclaud March 4, 2014 at 8:59 AM how well you have written this poem, superb, russell... images fall well in place and flow like wavelets' rolling over sloshy feel'.. a dynamo! huggs!

Richard Lamoureux March 4, 2014 at 7:43 AM I very much enjoy this old form and you have written it with great skill. Thanks for commenting on and inspiring my Rispetto.

Kayod5 Kayode March 4, 2014 at 7:21 AM You have so perfected rhyme in poetry that it serves you dutifully,no doubt this a classic pantoum that will surely go into record as one of the best.Kudos my friend.