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Written: December 24, 2023, For Anoucheka Gangabissoon Contest _________________________________________ Forgiveness is felicity fetching a hefty feud. It warms our hearts and improves our mood. To live calmly on Earth, embrace forgiveness. Dexterously Defrock dawn air; discover dearness. As a fury furrow flees, I forgive you—feigned foe. Sustain stance—yessing zeal, solemnize and glow Forgive and allow your foe an alternative chance. As he begs for pardon with his frail stance, Scintillate the shiny strands of the sealed niche. Paths of forgiveness reveal an intriguing switch. With prayer, ember angels carry spots to paradise. Requesting a thoughtful endeavor toward demise. Hearse historically hab-dabs with the dead. With dawn of fresh days, let's start a raw tread. Continue treading amidst reduced leaf drift. Flower sheaths peeking down when buds swift? As seen from a prism of vanished years. How innocuous the task and the tiara appear. In times of harmony, past feuds were futile. A vanishing scowl encircles the path scruple. Furthermore, when anger or fury is at its peak, There is a factor worse for the heart: to speak. Being loved is all that matters in this world. Pray for peace, ease the burden of an iron sword. Same plight—yelling, oral, mental, and emotive. Septic sequels stir kids to feel fearful and erosive. Reducing their physical and mental resilience. Subverting their intended infancy and innocence. Flowers have brighter petals and fragrance. Though previously absent—sky in its radiance. Defying gravity tug feels absurd, yet it's true. Now each stride is airy, and there is no foe. Forgiveness has a way of lifting gloomy moods. It truly restores vigor and removes toxic feuds.
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Date: 1/8/2024 10:23:00 AM
Congratulations on your win! The last two lines are perfect.
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Date: 1/6/2024 2:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place in the contest with this wonderful poem..
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Date: 1/4/2024 6:22:00 PM
"Forgiveness has a way of lifting gloomy moods. It truly restores vigor and removes toxic feuds" - Truly said. A beautifully developed poem. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/4/2024 8:22:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading this wonderful write/great ending/picture. Forgiveness is a wonderful thing. It will set you free... Have a blessed day writing away........................
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Date: 12/25/2023 10:30:00 PM
Forgiving foes removes the darkness that may envelope our souls, so very well expressed with brilliant alliterations and flow of words and descriptive diction dr sotto. Its amazing how well you always rhyme and how philosophical and so deeply moving your lines are as always! I love the opening and also the line which says “ Furthermore, when anger or fury is at its peak, There is a factor worse for the heart: to speak.“ so true, so why let anger overtake your health and wellness, let forgiveness
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Date: 12/25/2023 10:31:00 PM
And light enter ones heart and life will be much better. I am someone that forgives my enemies too, but if i must write right now for them, its like im thinking of them so i might not. I think you will do very well in th contest. Goodluck and pleasure reading this
Date: 12/25/2023 7:35:00 PM
"To live calmly on Earth, embrace forgiveness. Dexterously Defrock dawn air; discover dearness." the very opening lines clearly state what happens to us when we forgive and are forgiven. Forgiveness not only adds to our mental well being but also ensures our physical wellness. Your poem sounds like a studied treatise of a psychologist. There is so much depth in your observations. "Furthermore, when anger or fury is at its peak, There is a factor worse for the heart: to speak. Being loved is all that matters in this world. Pray for peace, ease the burden of an iron sword." Love this stanza. No need to mention about your rhyming. As ever it is impeccable. I wonder if you have written anything without rhyme. This poem is also rich in alliteration. I am sure this is going to be placed high. All the Best dear friend.
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Date: 12/25/2023 8:54:00 AM
A floating optimistic poem that I hope everyone can obtain. Life is too short to continue carrying burdens. Thank you for this poem.
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Date: 12/25/2023 6:33:00 AM
Your first stanza delivers the essence of your poem, Lasaad. Yet, another win awaits you.
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Date: 12/25/2023 4:45:00 AM
dearest Sotto-your poem is powerful with its alliteration and imagery profoundly addressing forgiveness. Your opening lines (Forgiveness is felicity fetching a hefty feud. It warms our hearts and improves our mood. To live calmly on Earth, embrace forgiveness) touched my heart and soul. You're right...sometimes there is no visible foe...only what our minds conjure up. Well done...and the music was captivating...wow on this one. best wishes with the contest, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
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Date: 12/25/2023 4:42:00 AM
Yes, forgiveness is for the one who forgives and not the one forgiven, but it can help both. The one who forgives reaps bountiful benefits from forgiving the other person. Thanks for sharing your thoughts on the topic. Your visits to my page add a special touch. Sara K
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Date: 12/25/2023 2:39:00 AM
Dear Sotto, I love that music.. I must say music does inspire me in so many ways.. Your poem beautifully captures the transformative power of forgiveness, portraying it as a source of happiness and resolution in the face of conflict. The use of alliteration in phrases like "forgiveness is felicity fetching a hefty feud" adds a melodic quality to the verses, enhancing the overall flow and rhythm.. Best of luck in the contest my friend.. hope you have a nice day today however you choose to celebra
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Date: 12/24/2023 8:03:00 PM
95% of this was over my reading level of what I am comfortable with, however I think I understood the point. The simplified version is forgiveness is really hard, but necessary, and its freeing. Your last two lines was a helpful necessary summary.
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