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Fly In the Soup

There is a fly in the soup that just won't leave.... He taunts and taunts but barely makes a breeze... Now there is a disruption at the table for those who write... Must take this fly outside for a one sided fight... Shoo fly shoo fly your day has come to an end... You pushed a few too many poets, but this one wouldn't bend...

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Brittany Reynolds

Date: 10/27/2012 10:24:00 AM

Good poem. I could deduce what occurred immediately. Well done.

Josie Whitehead

Date: 5/12/2012 2:52:00 PM

I had to laugh at this poem - and that is good. Poetry is supposed to affect the emotions, ha ha. I'd have to work on "leave" and "breeze" They are not true rhymes. How about: He taunts and taunts, then climbs up my sleeve? ha ha I can see you having a one-sided fight with a fly, ha ha. The mind boggles, but I know just what you mean because I have a fly catcher and of course the fight is very much one sided.

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 5/7/2012 1:01:00 PM

Reading comments below gives the info that makes this poem live Michael. Sad when we can't be civil, your poems are always a joy to read my friend!

Dinda Minardi

Date: 5/7/2012 8:18:00 AM

A witty poem, Michael. I hope you're doing good. :)

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 5/6/2012 8:44:00 AM

Nice write. I am assuming you are writing about an "adult.". Well, at least physically. From the gambler "You gotta know when to hold 'em, know when to fold 'em.

John Loving Iii

Date: 5/5/2012 3:54:00 PM

soup mail me who and i'll look for something.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/5/2012 2:38:00 PM

Oh my gosh! Someone has been bothering yout oo, Michael? There is a different poet who bothers women all the time. We reported it after being called names like "lesbian" and "smelly old bat," but admin did not ban him from the site. This poem applies to him as well. Love, Carolyn

James Peranteau

Date: 5/5/2012 9:48:00 AM

*smiles* This is very creative dear poet ! Have a wonderful weekend my friend ! Much love, james

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 5/5/2012 6:13:00 AM

Sometimes writing just releases, yes? Like the second line best. Great that your books are in the soup store. Congrats on all your success and may it continue. Hugs, Cyndi

Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/5/2012 3:32:00 AM

I say dump the bowl of soup and get a fresh new bowl! Turn on the garbage disposal too! Great slam! Interesting! lol...Gwendolen ")

Wilma Neels

Date: 5/5/2012 1:56:00 AM

Can I take a guess on the identity of this particular fly????? MJF, love the wit and of cause this made me smile, hope your weekend will be a good one even with the pest still lingering or did you and Arild get rid of it with a SPLAT??? Lmao ;) love CTH

Marcella Santos

Date: 5/4/2012 7:33:00 PM

Wow! I guess you did tell him, uh? A very good write. Love and hugs Marci

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/4/2012 6:22:00 PM

oooo wow! Michael... your poem is smoking hot... this is the first time i have ever seen you with a slam.. ha ha.. and you do it with style and dignity.. you have all the right ingredients to to exclude that he taunting fly from your soup... he he ... you even gathered all the viewers like flies around your poem..(HUMOR) in a kidding way,,, was it the word slam,,on the outside... ja ja... i love this little take you have here.. now stay in the corner ring before all hell brakes lose.. xox~DP

Sandy Ivy D

Date: 5/4/2012 6:09:00 PM

I can't help with the smile :0 you should not fold for anyone sweetheart. Keep posting and realising that wonderful breeze i felt as i clicked on your poem. Thx you for the wonderful comment you left on my poem. hugs& belated kisses for going out of your way with a comment on my poem'