Fluttering in Moonlight

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In the middle of the night, when butterflies dance to the moon's song Contest

Sponsor: Anoucheka Gangabassoon ~ November 19, 2023

Their fluttering starts in moonlight When Luna reaches zenith height She croons as butterflies take flight Magical night Magical night I was in awe without askance Mesmerized as if in a trance A cotillion of circumstance Butterflies dance Butterflies dance On nights when the golden moon sings They flit in nocturnal musings What pleasure to me their waltz brings On velvet wings On velvet wings What a delightful sight to see When they whirl with grand revelry Dancing with such joyful esprit In front of me In front of me It's a garden party soiree Beneath the moon and stars they sway A charming celestial ballet Then fly away Then fly away

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/21/2023 6:29:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful Monorhyme write. Merry Christmas..............

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 12/20/2023 4:45:00 PM

Congratulations on your top win. Love the mono rhyme form - your poem sounds soft, silky, soothing!

Terry Flood

Date: 11/22/2023 3:51:00 PM

Five smashing monorhymes come together in an enchanting whole. Best of luck in the contest, Lin.

Jeff Connelly

Date: 11/20/2023 2:54:00 PM

I enjoy the monorhyme form Lin; you write them well. In this one the repetition is very soothing: "soiree;" "sway," and "ballet" in the last stanza softly "fly away." Thanks

Lin Lane
Date: 11/22/2023 8:33:00 AM

Hi Jeff. I’m out of tiown But I’ll reply to all comments over the coming weekend. Thanks .

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/19/2023 3:47:00 PM

I found your poem breathtaking, soft, and enchanting. The images were exquisite an soft and I felt like I was living in a dreamland from which I didn't want to leave. I loved every line & word, but this one will stay with me: It's a garden party soiree Beneath the moon and stars they sway A charming celestial ballet. Well done, Lin...have to fav this one...have a splendid evening, Sara

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 11/19/2023 11:15:00 AM

Really enjoyed this beautiful Monorhyme! You played with enchanting word choices, images, and rhyme - a total mesmerizing piece!