Floating On All Sides

New mantelpiece, pinewood as heart's custom;
A waning fire's bed, her girl loving thwarted—

 ...I've sparkled my fingers' approach to this hearth.
I've kicked too long at its dousing birth.

As her skull's cracked by charcoal intent shears,
The Wintertime's frost slowly pulls out of her tears.

...You're the shadow in me, my upturned face—
Passing through this pine; this death; this hell of fireplace

For so familiar, so close, you seem in its embers;
I swear you're with me tonight in the deep ether.

...As the ashes seed to this wastely churn—
The flames may fall, but darling, I remember; you burn.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 5/23/2025 5:17:00 PM
This is breathtakingly raw--each line glowing with grief, memory, and flame. “The flames may fall, but darling, I remember; you burn” is an unforgettable closer. This reads like mourning by firelight--intimate, defiant, and full of ache.
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Date: 9/7/2024 11:01:00 AM
Reading this one again. I feel it is one of your best. A fave
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Date: 9/7/2024 7:46:00 AM
I like, "You're the shadow in me."
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Date: 9/5/2024 10:57:00 AM
So passionately dark and mystical, Paige. Wonderfully written. If this is for a contest, best wishes and blessings!
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Date: 9/4/2024 9:38:00 AM
Your heart aches and expresses itself in the most beautiful imagery and metaphors. An essay on self-discovery. Wonderful.
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Date: 9/4/2024 2:09:00 AM
Oh gosh! You write dark and deep so perfectlh my sweet paige! It’s so refreshing to read your work, for various reasons such as, because of how innovative your words are, you create metaphors in unique ways and do not try to conform to others way of exprssing! And also because i sit and read your poems, feelin so much! Im finally getting back on here slowly and need to write today too … hopefully my muse gets inspired . Best wishes sweet soul! Sending you light today and always
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Date: 9/3/2024 1:29:00 PM
I can feel the ache in your words.. this one so deep and full of emotions..
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Date: 9/3/2024 1:21:00 PM
wow, a powerful ending on this one. I feel bad that you saw so many of my poems and now I am just finishing up my comments and need to run and meet my daughter to see a movie!! Have a good day, Paige.
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Date: 9/2/2024 7:54:00 PM
my, gritty piece laden with powerful images about self- discovery...I enjoyed this one, paige!
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