Jack Jordan Poet Tanka

Flight - For Metamorph Contest

Flight (Original poem)

	It’s morning
	early on when
	I begin to sparkle, 
	dance, 
	ignite.
	I radiate,
	burn bright,
	reach high and grasp,
	talk fast and loud,
	create chaos,
	risk all to
	fly 
	(flying is the best part).


	Flight (Tanka)

	Morning, early on.
	I dance, radiate, burn bright, 
	chaos in my grasp. 
	I’ll chance my manic madness — 
	anything so I can fly.  	


	By Jack Jordan
	For Debbi Guzzi’s “Metamorph Free Poetry Contest”

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Poet Destroyer A May 1, 2013 at 6:04 PM Jack, Congratulations :-) In Debbie's "Metamorph" contest. always~ PD Jack Jordan May 1, 2013 at 7:07 PM Thanks! I'm enjoying the competitions. But you must too since your name is frequently on the winners lists. So, a general congrats to you as well... J

Abdulhafeez Oyewole April 28, 2013 at 10:05 AM Congrats On Your Win, Jack~A.O Jack Jordan April 28, 2013 at 10:54 AM Thanks. I'm just getting into the contest scene, and am enjoying myself... Jack

Richard Lamoureux April 25, 2013 at 5:08 PM Pretty amazing for your first tanka. Congratulations. Jack Jordan April 25, 2013 at 5:18 PM An earlier poem titled "Regret" was actually my first tanka attempt. Jack Jordan April 25, 2013 at 5:16 PM Thank you, Richard. I value your opinion... Jack

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl April 25, 2013 at 10:22 AM Many congratulations Jack , well done xx Jack Jordan April 25, 2013 at 10:26 AM Thank you, Mandy. I appreciate the congrats, and the prompt to look at the contest winners... Jack

Anne-Lise Andresen March 29, 2013 at 7:49 AM - This is really good, Jack! - (I agree with Andrea)- Luck in contest!!!! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :) Jack Jordan March 29, 2013 at 7:53 AM Thanks, Anne-Lise. Have a great weekend! Jack

Andrea Dietrich March 28, 2013 at 11:32 PM jack, I will tell you honestly, I think the metamorphosis made for the better poem of the two! I just loved the manic line in your tanka!! Jack Jordan March 29, 2013 at 7:44 AM I agree. There is something good to be said for time and compression (reconsider and get rid of what's unnecessary). "Manic" is just the way it is. Thanks for the comment. Jack

Barbara Gorelick March 28, 2013 at 10:22 PM I wasnt "getting it"..after reading your poem I think I do..Love both versions..BG Jack Jordan March 29, 2013 at 7:46 AM Thanks for the reading, Barbara. Jack