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Fleeting Stars

Passing through the sky, A mass of gas fades away; Dimming into dark.

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Charmaine Chircop

Date: 6/21/2009 2:53:00 PM

i love shooting stars,and love the way the dim slowly till the disappear----beautiful-------charma

Gerard Keogh Jr.

Date: 6/17/2009 3:57:00 PM

That second line eals the grade for me bexcause it i TRUE MUSIC to the ear. Say it aloud. Yes, it is. Thank you for your comment on Libertine. I appreciate it deeply. Regards, GK.

Donna Golden

Date: 6/17/2009 12:31:00 PM

Another beautiful haiku, Raul! I love sitting on my front porch watching shooting stars! Ahhh, summertime! The best time for this simple pleasure! Donna

James Fraser

Date: 6/16/2009 2:20:00 PM

Great Haiku Raul, i can see where the others see the funny side, Soup Mail for you>>James

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/16/2009 8:16:00 AM

Clever you... how this can be beautiful and funny at the same time:) !!

Misty Penton-Leccese

Date: 6/15/2009 3:37:00 PM

Wonderful. Thanks for the welcome by the way. Lots of Love, Misty

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 6/15/2009 2:44:00 PM

Clever, very clever. Funny too. I like it. BG

Farah Chamma

Date: 6/15/2009 1:02:00 PM

Your Haikus are just wonderful...Great one... Thank you for sharing... Always, Farah

John Rhinem

Date: 6/15/2009 10:39:00 AM

Smile~"Fleeting Stars"~This Haiku made me laugh brother! A metaphor holding a message I do believe? Yet, it somehow makes me consider these words Raul: "Never let the sun set upon ones wrath...."~Smile, nice write; I could see it somewhat within my minds eye!!?~"My Love & Warmth Always To 'You & Your Loves Dear Brother,' Eternally, John!!"~"Have A Very Beautiful Day!!!":):) Bye ~

Michael Jordan

Date: 6/15/2009 10:30:00 AM

Raul what a ingenious haiku - very well spoken - God Bless you Raul, MJ