Fleeting Stars

Passing through the sky,
A mass of gas fades away;
Dimming into dark.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Chircop Avatar
June 21, 2009 at 2:53 PM
i love shooting stars,and love the way the dim slowly till the disappear----beautiful-------charma
Keogh Jr. Avatar
June 17, 2009 at 3:57 PM
That second line eals the grade for me bexcause it i TRUE MUSIC to the ear. Say it aloud. Yes, it is. Thank you for your comment on Libertine. I appreciate it deeply. Regards, GK.
Golden Avatar
June 17, 2009 at 12:31 PM
Another beautiful haiku, Raul! I love sitting on my front porch watching shooting stars! Ahhh, summertime! The best time for this simple pleasure! Donna
Fraser Avatar
June 16, 2009 at 2:20 PM
Great Haiku Raul, i can see where the others see the funny side, Soup Mail for you>>James
Richards Avatar
June 16, 2009 at 8:16 AM
Clever you... how this can be beautiful and funny at the same time:) !!
Penton-Leccese Avatar
June 15, 2009 at 3:37 PM
Wonderful. Thanks for the welcome by the way. Lots of Love, Misty
Gorelick Avatar
June 15, 2009 at 2:44 PM
Clever, very clever. Funny too. I like it. BG
Chamma Avatar
June 15, 2009 at 1:02 PM
Your Haikus are just wonderful...Great one... Thank you for sharing... Always, Farah
Rhinem Avatar
June 15, 2009 at 10:39 AM
Smile~"Fleeting Stars"~This Haiku made me laugh brother! A metaphor holding a message I do believe? Yet, it somehow makes me consider these words Raul: "Never let the sun set upon ones wrath...."~Smile, nice write; I could see it somewhat within my minds eye!!?~"My Love & Warmth Always To 'You & Your Loves Dear Brother,' Eternally, John!!"~"Have A Very Beautiful Day!!!":):) Bye ~
Jordan Avatar
June 15, 2009 at 10:30 AM
Raul what a ingenious haiku - very well spoken - God Bless you Raul, MJ
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