Jan Allison Poet Verse

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Flash Revelation

I’d caught you with her in your arms,
in my heart I knew you’d not cheat-
but you flashed HER that smile;
that smile reserved for me ...
it was such a tender moment
as you cradled our baby girl!



HEXASTICH IT Poetry Contest


Sponsored by Nette Onclaud
05/26/20

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John Hamilton June 3, 2020 at 9:25 PM Very clever Jan...got me...nice write nice win!

Joseph May May 30, 2020 at 6:50 PM Congrats on your win Jan.. Jan Allison May 31, 2020 at 2:21 AM thanks Joseph:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus May 30, 2020 at 3:55 PM A pleasure to return with congratulations, Jan! A most deserved podium finish! Hugs // paul Jan Allison May 30, 2020 at 4:30 PM Thanks Paul I am delighted to be on the winners list:-) hugs Jan xx

Paula Goldsmith May 30, 2020 at 12:10 PM Congratulations on your win. WOW, a great story/poem in just 6 lines. Enjoy your win and day............ Jan Allison May 30, 2020 at 12:32 PM thanks Paula:-) hugs Jan xx

Aditi Mishra May 30, 2020 at 11:10 AM This is such a sweet one with a brilliant twist. Love the way your words maintain the mystery till the last line. Congratulations on your win :) Jan Allison May 30, 2020 at 11:32 AM Thanks Aditi:-) hugs Jan x

Nette Onclaud May 30, 2020 at 11:08 AM now this verse certainly made my jaw drop ( smiling) with your unexpected turn, jan!... congrats on your high placement in my contest... huggs Jan Allison May 30, 2020 at 11:09 AM Thanks Nette you asked for a twist and I delivered:-) hugs jan x

David Mohn May 30, 2020 at 11:01 AM congratulations Jan...this is unique and wonderful :) Jan Allison May 30, 2020 at 11:08 AM Thanks David:-) hugs Jan xx

Regina Mcintosh May 30, 2020 at 5:33 AM Glad this won, Jan. It's amazing - Congrats and love to you in Christ, Gina Jan Allison May 30, 2020 at 11:08 AM Thanks Gina:-) hugs Jan xx

John Watt May 30, 2020 at 12:56 AM Aww, fighting back a little tear right now. This describes me 27 years ago. A tender write, dear Jan, with a lovely finish. Well done, and congratulations on your win. Hugs ~ John Jan Allison May 30, 2020 at 11:08 AM Aww so glad you can relate. Thanks John:-) hugs Jan xx

Mohan Chutani May 30, 2020 at 12:30 AM So cute and sweet. Father's love does get divided, esp. for a daughter. Congrats Jan. Jan Allison May 30, 2020 at 11:07 AM Thanks Mohan:-) hugs Jan xx

Jenish Somadas May 29, 2020 at 11:18 PM Sweet verse..Great win Jan..Congrats.. Jan Allison May 30, 2020 at 11:07 AM Thanks Jenish:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus May 28, 2020 at 11:10 AM What a beautiful take on the "flash" prompt, Jan! Such a tender moment! Undoubtedly no jealous feelings here, though initially you led me astray:) Hugs // paul Jan Allison May 30, 2020 at 11:07 AM thanks Paul Nette said she wanted a twist and I tried to deliver it:-) hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger May 28, 2020 at 7:20 AM This is gorgeous for it is true. Jan Allison May 28, 2020 at 10:01 AM thanks Caren:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong May 27, 2020 at 6:06 PM She is going to love this Jan. I love the surprise ending! This poem made me smile and gave me much cheer today. Thank you Jan. blessings Jan Allison May 27, 2020 at 7:08 PM thanks for dropping by Connie:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands May 27, 2020 at 1:03 PM Great surprise Jan. Well done :) Jan Allison May 27, 2020 at 2:10 PM Thanks Heidi hope you are feeling much better, its good to see you my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Regina Mcintosh May 27, 2020 at 9:17 AM Jan, this is a WONDER - a work of art - so creative and insightful and simply amazing. I LOVE it. faving it... Love to you, Gina Jan Allison May 27, 2020 at 2:09 PM Thanks for your sweet comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Quoth Theraven May 27, 2020 at 9:11 AM Jan, A little tongue in cheek in this warm and witty poem. And a cheeky E ticket ride. Good luck. -Richard Jan Allison May 27, 2020 at 2:09 PM Thanks Richard:-) hugs Jan x

Lindsay Laurie May 26, 2020 at 6:58 PM Well done Jan … here I was being led up the garden path and then hearing a voice 'don't jump to conclusions' - great Jan - Lindsay Jan Allison May 27, 2020 at 2:09 PM The sponsor was looking for a twist at the end, from the comments I think I have delivered:-) hugs Jan x

Ilene Bauer May 26, 2020 at 4:09 PM oh, you got me, jan! great ending! Jan Allison May 27, 2020 at 2:08 PM Thanks Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta May 26, 2020 at 2:22 PM Jan doing the twist? What a treat! Aloha! Rico Jan Allison May 26, 2020 at 2:48 PM Thanks Rico:-) I like to do the odd twist at the end of the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen May 26, 2020 at 12:39 PM - ... love the end ... it wasn't like I thought ... luck in the contest, Jan :) -hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison May 26, 2020 at 2:08 PM Thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 26, 2020 at 12:11 PM Oh, Ah! A quick little emotional journey this, great write! (toying with my emotions!) xomo :))) Jan Allison May 26, 2020 at 12:18 PM thanks Mo, hope you are ok:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile May 26, 2020 at 11:47 AM I wondered where this was going Janand was so happy to see the sweet reprieve !! I really enjoyed it, Good Luck xxoo Jan Allison May 26, 2020 at 11:47 AM Glad you like the twist at the end:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May May 26, 2020 at 11:41 AM Lovely write Jan..best wishes in the Contest Jan Allison May 26, 2020 at 11:47 AM Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx