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Fizzling Out

What does it take to write a poem, a format, a principle perhaps imagination, If like me you make it up going along, can turn into a leaning conflagration. Sparks in the first verse are starting points, but might fade out with a whimper, Thought I had something going there, too complicated, let’s try something simpler, I need fresh kindling, to create a flash, not just latent potential, Good starting to catch, providing a glow, but much more fuel is essential. Lightning strike out of nowhere, creative thoughts bring more accelerant, Flames appear radiating tepid heat, a little crude, requiring elegance. This fire is burning all my reserves, morphing into a raging inferno, Now spreading out of control gone wild, lacking containment and tempo, Ok ease off the gas, take deep breaths, attempt to regain composure, Boy almost lost it there, must keep in surrounded enclosure. On the home straight my poem’s on fire, nice and steady, aflame at last, Time for crescendo, pull it all together, along comes a draught.....blast! By David Kavanagh

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Date: 9/30/2020 3:40:00 PM
Making it up David as you go along. Hey that sounds just like me. Think if a 1st verse to write about then breath work up a head of steam and hey presto a 1st draft
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Christopher Flaherty
Date: 10/1/2020 12:59:00 PM
Understood gotch David . Control
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/30/2020 4:05:00 PM
This one I had to think out beforehand Christopher it’s simple but analogous of trying to start and control a fire cheers David
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/30/2020 3:59:00 PM
I honestly do sometimes Christopher just make things up going along, great when it falls into place but not always, unless it’s a story I need to format it and research thoroughly before writing
Date: 9/25/2020 10:23:00 AM
Your poem sizzles dear poet, thanks for sharing it, have a nice day.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/25/2020 11:47:00 AM
It’s always a pleasure to share Pixie thank you so much for your comment, cheers David
Date: 9/25/2020 3:46:00 AM
I like the way your poem poem describes the construction, the labour. Some pertain to the ultimate flow. You aptly describe, with fine flair, colour and humour, it is sometimes a case of getting three from two stanzas, and hopefully that breeze blows in to get five stanzas from three to open the topic up, round it out nicely. Certainly you take us through the jaw clenching pain, David. (damn your reality check)!!
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/25/2020 4:12:00 AM
Wow Sigrid, I said before you had a computer like mind, with an algorithmic diagnosis for poetry, no wonder your so good, mine is rough and unpolished yet you analyse it brilliantly, thank you for looking in, Glad you enjoyed the pain in a good way, cheers David
Date: 9/24/2020 2:04:00 PM
i think many of us can relate to this one, david! well done! (by the way, your poem didn't seem to fizzle out at all...)
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/24/2020 2:12:00 PM
Thanks ilene I had to blow it out in the end, thank you very much for looking in, cheers David

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