CayCay Godwin Poet Iambic Pentameter

First Winter Poem This Winter

The last of first snow’s flakes are falling down.
Lush, rich heaps sparkle opal gems as crown.
Such creamy drifts of bright schemes beam with glee.
Fresh, pure, blank slates of possibilities
Sway silver-lit flakes down dancing in spree.

I long to open my front door and play,
but I am stilled by my own feet to stay;
the fun I may now have in snow frolic
versus ruined pure white, so hypnotic. 

Thoughts turn to men with spades and city plows.
I determine my play be brisk and now.
In time, icicles may drip bleak onyx
And man’s snow-ways turn me melancholic,
but today I shall in this snow frolic.

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Maurice Rigoler December 20, 2016 at 12:37 PM I understand where you are coming from with your enthusiasm for snow. I wish I had the same, but truth is I lost my excitement for snow years ago, and I now detest the stuff. Heading for Florida in a couple of months, to get away from the white monster. Thanks for reading my poem on politicians. Best to you. / M

Jannie Breedt December 12, 2016 at 5:06 AM ..detract.. sorry

Jannie Breedt December 12, 2016 at 5:05 AM Hi Cay Cay. I sort of agree with Franklin. The flow did break on the first line for me to. It doesnt distract from the fact that its still brilliant . I think to successfully write in iambic pentameter is to sit and mime the words in front of the mirror. Maybe you must audio it. I e-mailed PS as I am unable to reply to comments for some reason. We have 38 degrees and you have snow overseas. The last time here was 1983. Hugs Jannie CayCay Godwin December 12, 2016 at 5:44 AM No snow in Virginia yet, but we usually get 2 to 3 good ones each winter. I wrote you a soup mail about your comment restrictions and other things??? 1983 was just the other day, wasn't it? Sure do enjoy your visits - always good to see you and read you ... CayCay

Andrea Dietrich December 9, 2016 at 7:47 PM wow, you did so well with her words, Caycay!! AGain, I see a difference in our styles. WE do write in somewhat different ways but I am able to really appreciate what you come up with. Your use of alliteration and imagery was splendid in this one and I loved that last line with the word rollick. Even the meter is very lyrical! Wonderful and congrats for your win.

Edward Mccall December 8, 2016 at 10:15 AM This brought back some pleasant memories from winters past. A fun and Winsome poem. :)

Darren White December 4, 2016 at 11:04 PM Congratulations on your win CayCay :)

Eve Roper December 4, 2016 at 7:17 PM CayCay, congratulations on your wonderful win :) We wish you a Merry Christmas & a Happy New Year

Alexis Y. December 4, 2016 at 6:34 PM Hi CayCay, I'm just coming back to congratulations on your win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Janis Medders Tobechi December 4, 2016 at 6:31 PM Congratulations on your win. Nice verse.

Agnes Krampe December 4, 2016 at 6:05 PM Back with congrats, CayCay. Agnes

Jan Allison December 4, 2016 at 5:41 PM Dropping back with my congrats CayCay:-) hugs jan xx

Franklin Price December 4, 2016 at 3:39 PM CayCay, I really enjoyed this. It reminded me of a new snow fall in Germany when I was having dinner with a business associate. We finished an came out to snowfall that not been touched by anyone or anything. Being from Florida, I was enthralled and delighted in walking down the middle of the road and looking back at the only footprints in the snow. Thanks for the memories. I sometimes lost the flow while readin. That's the only reason I didn't give you a 7 CayCay Godwin December 4, 2016 at 6:21 PM Franklin - From the bottom of my heart, I thank you! How refreshing to get my first honest feedback, just as I've longed for since joining this site! I absolutely embrace your comments and find your last remark utterly constructive. In fact, I reworded the first stanza. I do not know if that's where the flow 'broke' for you, but it did for me and I like it so much more now. I was born in Germany and though I don't remember my life there, I have many photos from that time of gorgeous Germany snow falls. Again, THANK YOU ... CayCay

Richard Lamoureux December 4, 2016 at 7:56 AM You've put me in a winter state of mind. This is pretty.

Darren White December 4, 2016 at 7:44 AM I love your rich choice of words, in every poem of yours I do, it's marvellous. I particularly enjoy this here: "Lush, rich heaps sparkling opal gems as crown, are creamy drifts of bright schemes beaming glee." Good luck in the contest!

Winged Warrior December 3, 2016 at 7:43 PM A very warm winter's tale CayCay...nice way to start the coming snow...and salt lol...god bless...^WW^

Daniel Turner December 3, 2016 at 7:41 PM Luckily we don't get much snow here. I always faced the same dilemma. Mess up the yard or play in the snow, I let Buddy go first:) Love your first winter poem this winter, CayCay.

Judy Ball December 3, 2016 at 5:26 PM It's the only time of year when everyone's yard look the same. Wonderful write Cay Cay I love the winter scenes. God Bless, JB

Anne-Lise Andresen December 3, 2016 at 2:24 PM - Landscape full of snow gives a special silence ... beautiful winter poem, CayCay - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Alexis Y. December 3, 2016 at 2:16 PM Hi CayCay, I enjoyed this"Winter" treat. It's so beautiful and the imagery is amazing.You did a good job with the required words. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A Big seven:-) Alexis

Demetrios Trifiatis December 3, 2016 at 11:23 AM Reading your poem dear, CayCay I found myself back to Canada were I spent eighteen years! Masterful writing with so vivid imagery! A seven!

Jan Allison December 3, 2016 at 9:55 AM Such incredible imagery CayCay a gem of a poem:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx7

Probir Gupta December 3, 2016 at 9:55 AM Lovely lines ... Call for repeated readings ... picturesque too ... Very impressive ...

Agnes Krampe December 3, 2016 at 9:10 AM I like how you worked in the required words. Have fun with your snow, and good luck in the contest.