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Notes About The Poem

This was also used in the Contest of Gregory Barden. Here are the details of his invented form:
Here is the Qarinage's rhyme pattern (also entered in Gregory's contest):
At least TWO verses of the following rhyme scheme, ABBACCDD + Refrain, (the refrain repeats after every verse), with syllable counts of 10,5,5,10,5,5,11,11 + 6, (6 is the refrain), and the LAST verse must have an EXTRA line of rhyme (D, 11 syllables), and an extra line of refrain, (6 syllables), that is different but rhymes.

First Rose of May

How beautiful is what I see today
          peeking from the green
                and almost unseen,
    blossoming for me – the first rose of May!
       While she’s in the pink,
           time is but a blink.
     In this merry month, oblivious is she
             to what’s to come as she poses prettily -

                        destiny evading

Her joy for now is sweet. What can she know
        of life’s suffering?
              She hears robins sing.
   On her face, tears are but a dewy glow.
      She is hope anew
         now that she’s in view!
    Will she – like me – feel her soul plunge to sorrow?
            Or will I – like her – be until tomorrow

                         destiny evading. . . 

      a wish faint and fading?


May 21, 2018 for Broken Wing's "Let Your Pen Drip" Contest

Uses Gregory Barden's invented Qarinage Rhyme Pattern. See notes above.
For 'THE CRAP SHOOT POETRY CONTEST' Poetry Contest of John Lawless

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John Watt

Date: 3/2/2020 5:11:00 PM

Just gorgeous, Andrea. Rose as metaphor for aging, Spring as metaphor for innocence and youthful naivete. I love "On her face, tears are but a dewy glow." Also, the "will she - like me" / "will I - like she" turnaround. A fav ~ John

Joseph May

Date: 12/13/2018 11:54:00 AM

Congrats on your win Andrea!

Jan Allison

Date: 12/12/2018 3:21:00 PM

No wonder you chose this gem for the contest. so lovely to read it again, many congrats on your win Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/12/2018 5:18:00 AM

This is a unique and creative form, Andrea, and the reader can tell how much you admire that first rose of spring. Congratulations on your win! There were many terrific entries, including yours. Thank you for participating in the contest. Hus, Carolyn

L. J. Carber

Date: 7/18/2018 9:05:00 AM

Congrats on your win, Andrea!

Susan Gentry

Date: 7/16/2018 9:48:00 PM

Back again to congratulate you again for your #1 win. Well done. Beautiful. :)

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 7/16/2018 5:16:00 AM

I love this one, Andrea, and I see Brian does, too - congrats on your win, my friend ... well-deserved with this gem, (and blessings to the pigeon as well!) ;-) <3

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/15/2018 1:48:00 PM

This is such a great comparison piece, the first rose to self. A pleasure to read. Congrats!

Edward Ibeh

Date: 7/15/2018 9:59:00 AM

A top winner! I take great pleasure in sending congratulations to you, Andrea!:-)

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/15/2018 8:19:00 AM

Congratulations for your win Andrea :)

Fauxcroft Wade

Date: 7/15/2018 3:44:00 AM

Amazing win, very well done, great piece. Faux

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 7/15/2018 1:09:00 AM

Congratulations Andrea on your great win.

Ronald A. Williams

Date: 6/20/2018 2:53:00 PM

A very cheerful poem. Amen, Blessings

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/18/2018 4:46:00 PM

You shine at the top of the podium, Andrea..best of the best!

Shirley Rebstock

Date: 6/17/2018 5:46:00 PM

Beautiful

Faraz Ajmal

Date: 6/17/2018 8:01:00 AM

Ahh, can anything be beautiful than this, I love reading it, " first rose of May" this is a poetry at it s best, truly a masterpiece, many congratulations on your well deserved win in the contest, your poem being chosen as POTW and your first position in best new poems,

Robertina B.

Date: 6/16/2018 12:32:00 PM

Your rhyme is Absolutely magnificent, Andrea!!! Penned so beautifully.. Congratulations on winning!! Many blessings to you..

Susan Gentry

Date: 6/15/2018 12:08:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your win with this beautiful poem.