Andrea Dietrich Poet Rhyme

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This was also used in the Contest of Gregory Barden. Here are the details of his invented form:
Here is the Qarinage's rhyme pattern (also entered in Gregory's contest):
At least TWO verses of the following rhyme scheme, ABBACCDD + Refrain, (the refrain repeats after every verse), with syllable counts of 10,5,5,10,5,5,11,11 + 6, (6 is the refrain), and the LAST verse must have an EXTRA line of rhyme (D, 11 syllables), and an extra line of refrain, (6 syllables), that is different but rhymes. 

First Rose of May

How beautiful is what I see today
          peeking from the green
                and almost unseen,
    blossoming for me – the first rose of May!
       While she’s in the pink,
           time is but a blink.
     In this merry month, oblivious is she
             to what’s to come as she poses prettily -

                        destiny evading

Her joy for now is sweet. What can she know
        of life’s suffering?
              She hears robins sing.
   On her face, tears are but a dewy glow.
      She is hope anew
         now that she’s in view!
    Will she – like me – feel her soul plunge to sorrow?
            Or will I – like her – be until tomorrow

                         destiny evading. . . 

      a wish faint and fading?


May 21, 2018 for Broken Wing's "Let Your Pen Drip" Contest

Uses Gregory Barden's invented Qarinage Rhyme Pattern. See notes above.
For 'THE CRAP SHOOT POETRY CONTEST' Poetry Contest of John Lawless

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John Watt March 2, 2020 at 5:11 PM Just gorgeous, Andrea. Rose as metaphor for aging, Spring as metaphor for innocence and youthful naivete. I love "On her face, tears are but a dewy glow." Also, the "will she - like me" / "will I - like she" turnaround. A fav ~ John

Joseph May December 13, 2018 at 11:54 AM Congrats on your win Andrea!

Jan Allison December 12, 2018 at 3:21 PM No wonder you chose this gem for the contest. so lovely to read it again, many congrats on your win Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire December 12, 2018 at 5:18 AM This is a unique and creative form, Andrea, and the reader can tell how much you admire that first rose of spring. Congratulations on your win! There were many terrific entries, including yours. Thank you for participating in the contest. Hus, Carolyn

L. J. Carber July 18, 2018 at 9:05 AM Congrats on your win, Andrea!

Susan Gentry July 16, 2018 at 9:48 PM Back again to congratulate you again for your #1 win. Well done. Beautiful. :)

Gregory Richard Barden July 16, 2018 at 5:16 AM I love this one, Andrea, and I see Brian does, too - congrats on your win, my friend ... well-deserved with this gem, (and blessings to the pigeon as well!) ;-) <3

Casarah Nance July 15, 2018 at 1:48 PM This is such a great comparison piece, the first rose to self. A pleasure to read. Congrats!

Edward Ibeh July 15, 2018 at 9:59 AM A top winner! I take great pleasure in sending congratulations to you, Andrea!:-)

Heidi Sands July 15, 2018 at 8:19 AM Congratulations for your win Andrea :)

Fauxcroft Wade July 15, 2018 at 3:44 AM Amazing win, very well done, great piece. Faux

Subimal Sinha-Roy July 15, 2018 at 1:09 AM Congratulations Andrea on your great win.

Ronald A. Williams June 20, 2018 at 2:53 PM A very cheerful poem. Amen, Blessings

Vijay Pandit June 18, 2018 at 4:46 PM You shine at the top of the podium, Andrea..best of the best!

Shirley Rebstock June 17, 2018 at 5:46 PM Beautiful

Faraz Ajmal June 17, 2018 at 8:01 AM Ahh, can anything be beautiful than this, I love reading it, " first rose of May" this is a poetry at it s best, truly a masterpiece, many congratulations on your well deserved win in the contest, your poem being chosen as POTW and your first position in best new poems,

Robertina B. June 16, 2018 at 12:32 PM Your rhyme is Absolutely magnificent, Andrea!!! Penned so beautifully.. Congratulations on winning!! Many blessings to you..

Susan Gentry June 15, 2018 at 12:08 PM Back to congratulate you on your win with this beautiful poem.

Lyric Man June 14, 2018 at 10:18 PM Congrats on this winner and an elegant write that is a joy to read this evening, Andrea!

Susan Ashley June 14, 2018 at 9:15 PM Simply superb and stunning Andrea. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley June 14, 2018 at 4:51 PM Congratulations on reaching the top spot on the hundred best new poems list my friend! Great title and brilliant poem to match!

Paul Callus June 14, 2018 at 2:10 PM Back again to re-read this impressive poem, Andrea! Congrats on reaching top spot in the "Best New" Member poems!! Regards // paul Andrea Dietrich June 15, 2018 at 1:16 AM Ok, I got it now. I just found out what you meant.Wow!! That was a sweet surprise. Andrea Dietrich June 14, 2018 at 6:52 PM haha. What the heck is this best new member poets all about??

Hija De La Luna June 13, 2018 at 11:00 PM beautiful, Andrea!

Elaine George June 12, 2018 at 2:34 AM Number one in my books, Andrea. Elaine

Tom Cunningham June 10, 2018 at 9:37 PM Beautiful verse Andrea, congratulations. Tom

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