Jack Horne Poet Rengay

First Halloween

children's laughter

a boy and girl carve out

 a jack-o-lantern

 

deep orange pumpkin gutted 

the scent of roasted brown seeds




gasps - -

the small lantern's grin and eyes are lit

by flickering candle light

 

The eerie light's shadows danced

A coyote howled in tune




an owl hoots - - 

the moon emerges from clouds


as bats flap across the sky



 

Full moon reveals surprises

Ghosts' wispy gown races fast




shrieks and giggles - -

little fingers drop candy and point 

towards the sky




A tiny night rider floats

Little eyelids close softly


written by Jack Horne and Sara Kendrick for Diane's contest

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Carol Eastman November 7, 2014 at 1:31 PM Congrats on the win... Loved it from the youngkids point of view.

Anne-Lise Andresen November 6, 2014 at 12:00 PM - A little late .....But, I will congratulate you with a 2nd place Jack and Sara - a great winning poems! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Casarah Nance November 5, 2014 at 7:16 AM Great job, both of you, :)

Tim Smith November 4, 2014 at 7:10 PM This was awesome...congrats

Brenda Meier-Hans November 4, 2014 at 6:14 PM Congratulations on your win Jack and Sara. There's something magical about this great poem.

Jan Allison November 4, 2014 at 1:20 PM Dropping back with my congrats Jack and Sara:-) Hugs jan xx

Diane Locksley November 4, 2014 at 1:10 PM This is splendid, Jack and Sara. I like the way you blended couplets and haiku to create great images. Congratulations on your second place!

Kabuteng P.Ink K. October 26, 2014 at 10:07 AM Hi Jack! Thanks for dropping by! That last two lines made me do a double take and made me think there was an actual ghost floating by-- could it be Casper? Very fun Halloween poem, with a lot of the familiar elements blended here-- great collab from you and Sara! I enjoyed reading this and I hope all is well with you, dear jack (o'lantern)-- forgive me, I can't resist!!

Robert Johnson October 18, 2014 at 9:04 AM The yin and yang of orange and black. You both have versed with aplomb and knack. Peace. :)

Nette Onclaud October 16, 2014 at 1:32 PM jack, eerie yet so experiential and delightful in its poetic approach...what a great tandem, you and sara... huggs

Daver Austin October 16, 2014 at 9:45 AM The whole spooky evening. Brings back memories. Like the sandman ending. Love, daver

Andrea Dietrich October 15, 2014 at 3:53 PM wow, you two did GREAT here. I really loved the part about the ghost, the way it was described was so creative.

Sara Kendrick October 15, 2014 at 3:26 PM The finished product is okay..Thanks for all the visits to my page..Sara

Paul Callus October 15, 2014 at 2:09 PM A top7 rating for this awesome write Jack & Sara!! Rengay form is new to me, but the content is no surprise, coming from two talented writers. Love the innocent pleasures of a young child enjoying its first Halloween...especially the gasps of excitement....and finally the contented falling off to sleep. Well done. // paul Paul Callus November 5, 2014 at 3:10 PM Hi Jack...back with merited congratulations....paul

Gry Christensen October 15, 2014 at 2:08 PM Great poem on Halloween! I'm sure you'll do well in the contest!

Brenda Meier-Hans October 15, 2014 at 1:24 PM I love this Jack. It 's lots of fun. GL

Jan Allison October 15, 2014 at 1:22 PM Wow this is brilliant I thoroughly enjoyed this collaboration - good luck in the contest. Hugs Jan xxx